issue136, 大大缩短写作时间，感觉力有不逮
136． "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."没有选择的情况少之又少
It is true that with the development of technology and the advancement of democracy, we get more choices comparing to the past. However, we can not go too far to conclude that absence of choice in our lives is very rare. In fact, there are quite a few circumstances in which we have few choices and must carry out compromise for kinds of reasons.
First of all, although technology highly developed, our choices are still greatly limited by natural rules. Admittedly, with the help of technology, we have gotten through many barriers that used to encumber our progress in making choices. However, natural rules, no matter how advanced technology is, can always built limitation of our choosing range. For example, human beings need to eat foods and drink water to survive, which is a natural rule that people have no choice but to obey. Though nowadays technology has advanced itself to a high stage, it is still impossible to make people get energy from the sun and draw water from soil. In this case, human being have no choice at all.
What's more, our choices are often confined by law and social conformity. In order to keep the stability of society, there exist disciplines that can confine our choices into a reasonable circle. For example, in china, our choice towards marriage is limited by law: one man or woman mustn't marry another spouse after being married. In fact, it is forbidden to make another choice rather than marry only one spouse. On the other hand, though it is often asserted people have complete freedom to choose the life style of their own, as social animals, we have to talk and behave referring to social conformity. For instance, people have no choice but to wear clothes while meeting others, no matter how hot the weather is. If not, the individual will inevitably be regarded as either a fool or someone erotic.
In addition, social source is so limited that we can only choose the things distributed to us. In fact, such distribution is realized through hidden approaches, such as money and purchasing, which can seldom be doubted. For instance, there are converts, large houses, and many other wonderful things around us while on the surface we can freely choose them. However, in fact, we can only substantially get things that we afford: our financial condition actually confined our choices.
In sum, though we can now choose things from a rather wide range, there exits factors that prevent us from a circumstance in which we can carry out choices all at our will. What’s more, such limitation can hardly be ignored or get through. 136． "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."
没有选择的情况少之又少
It is true that with the development of technology and the advancement of democracy, we get more choices comparing to the past(compared to). However, we can not go too far to conclude that absence of choice in our lives is very rare. In fact, there are quite a few circumstances in which we have few choices and must carry out compromise for kinds of reasons.开头不错。
First of all, although technology highly developed（怎么用过去时）, our choices are still greatly limited by natural rules. Admittedly, with the help of technology, we have gotten through many barriers that used to encumber our progress in making choices. However, natural rules, no matter how advanced technology is, can always built limitation of our choosing range. For example, human beings need to eat foods and drink water to survive, which is a natural rule that people have no choice but to obey. Though nowadays technology has advanced itself to a high stage, it is still impossible to make people get energy from the sun and draw water from soil. In this case, human being have no choice at all.
What's more, our choices are often confined by law and social conformity. In order to keep the stability of society, there exist disciplines that can confine our choices into a reasonable circle. For example, in china, our choice towards marriage is limited by law: one man or woman mustn't marry another spouse after being married(去掉after being更好). In fact, it is forbidden to make another choice rather than marry only one spouse. On the other hand, though it is often asserted people have complete freedom to choose the life style of their own, as social animals, we have to talk and behave referring to social conformity. For instance, people have no choice but to wear clothes while meeting others, no matter how hot the weather is. If not, the individual will inevitably be regarded as either a fool or someone erotic. （这个例子好夸张阿，hehe）
In addition, social source（resource） is so limited that we can only choose the things distributed to us. In fact, such distribution is realized through hidden approaches, such as money and purchasing, which can seldom be doubted. For instance, there are converts, large houses, and many other wonderful things around us while on the surface we can freely choose them. However, in fact, we can only substantially get things that we afford: our financial condition actually confined our choices.
In sum, though we can now choose things from a rather wide range(你前面没有证明是在有很大选择的情况下,由于其他原因而被限制住,所举的例子都是别无选择的,所以逻辑上不是很严密,after all, 已经不错了), there exits factors that prevent us from a circumstance in which we can carry out choices all at our will. What’s more, such limitation can hardly be ignored or get through最后一句最好写的完整点，别省去动作的发出者，毕竟你是要作总结给别人留下一个完整的印象。
这篇写得不错，角度不错，而且语句比较通顺。能达到这样已经可以，比较有说服力。 谢谢pooh姐姐的宝贵意见.
我也觉得那个例子太不像话了，因为实在没时间再想就乱写了一个，呵呵。
我会认真修改的 no choice 和no ability有什么不同吗？第四段。。很深奥啊！ To 楼上 coolwits 有点偷换概念，不过自圆其说的比较好，他是说虽然有choice, 但是被客观条件限制住了。
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