Issue 193 谢谢
Issue 193 It is not the heading—making political events but seldom –reported social transformations that have the lasting siginificance1,未报道事件确实起了很大作用
2但是重大有意义事件又是与政治事件联系一起的
3我们甚至可以通过政治事件预测历史
‘What are the real impulse that in deed move the society ahead in the world?’ some people claim that the headline—making political events, while some other persons assert that it is the seldom—reported social transformation that actually progress the world forwards. In my opinion, on balance advocate that both the former and the latter drive the world forward.
It is true that the seldom—reported social transformation take account for the world’s great chance in that it always lead to potential change such as some transition in people’s ideology and invisible economical deep transform etc. Here are some example in that case It is well known that since the exerpriencing the Reform and Open policy in China, what dominant in people’s mind in the traditional theory that the Plan economics have been replace the idea that Market economics is also a very useful tool whether the Communist country or country or not. Hence, step by step, the latent change in people’s thought lead to the great progress in the past 26 years.
On the other hand, What we think the most important things also depend on the headline –making political events that marked great history turnpoint .For instance, both the success of the American Independence Revolution and the foundation of USA marked the exciting sense that the coming of the human being’s freedom and democracy, no matter you ever notice that or not. Similarly, the foundation of new China announce the dependence of a great nation, since then, the pages that the Chinese people is inferior and poor has past for ever.
Moreover, the change of great politics in the international range also makes an accurate predict, if we are good at summing up the former events and full of political sense. Here is an example that is very striking, in 1990, since the decomposition of Soviet Union, it is the many parties rather than the solely Communist Party in power The extent to which the Russia people faced a new way that so totally different from they used to that we can predict that Russia will be in a chous in a few years.
To sum up, given the fact that more and more complex society and much more influences when we assess a certain thing, it is always the seldom—reported social transformation have the most lasting significance make some sense. My institution is that although so many superficial things come out, but the great political events play its unique role on some angel. When we consider some important event, on balance, take both the seldom—reported events and the great political things factors together will make much better. Issue 193 It is not the heading—making political events but seldom –reported social transformations that have the lasting siginificance
1,未报道事件确实起了很大作用
2但是重大有意义事件又是与政治事件联系一起的
3我们甚至可以通过政治事件预测历史
‘What are the real impulse that in deed move the society ahead in the world?’ some people claim that the headline—making political events, while some other persons assert that it is the seldom—reported social transformation that actually progress the world forwards. In my opinion, on balance advocate that both the former and the latter drive the world forward.从首段可以看出，你的思路满清楚的,首先提出什么是推动社会进步的.我喜欢用这样的开头,不落俗套
It is true that the seldom—reported social transformation take account for the world’s great chance in that it always lead to potential change such as some transition in people’s ideology and invisible economical deep transform etc. Here are some example in that case It is well known that since the exerpriencing the Reform and Open policy in China, what dominant in people’s mind in the traditional theory that the Plan economics have been replace the idea that Market economics is also a very useful tool whether the Communist country or country or not. Hence, step by step, the latent change in people’s thought lead to the great progress in the past 26 years.有一些小的语法错误,自己可以再检查一下.不过建议再强调一下Reform and Open policy 对中国的重大作用
On the other hand, What we think the most important things also depend on the headline –making political events that marked great history turnpoint .For instance, both the success of the American Independence Revolution and the foundation of USA marked the exciting sense that the coming of the human being’s freedom and democracy, no matter you ever notice that or not. Similarly, the foundation of new China announce the dependence of a great nation, since then, the pages that the Chinese people is inferior and poor has past for ever.
Moreover, the change of great politics in the international range also makes an accurate predict, if we are good at summing up the former events and full of political sense. Here is an example that is very striking, in 1990, since the decomposition of Soviet Union, it is the many parties rather than the solely Communist Party in power The extent to which the Russia people faced a new way that so totally different from they used to that we can predict that Russia will be in a chous in a few years.这个论点提的很好,但我觉得这三段的分论点可以改变一下,把 第一个论点放到第三个分论点处,形成一个小补充,把重要的分论点放前面
To sum up, given the fact that more and more complex society and much more influences when we assess a certain thing, it is always the seldom—reported social transformation have the most lasting significance make some sense. My institution is that although so many superficial things come out, but the great political events play its unique role on some angel. When we consider some important event, on balance, take both the seldom—reported events and the great political things factors together will make much better.最后一段和第一段比起来稍微逊色了点,有点拖沓.
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