ISSUE183，行为类，还是觉得很抽像，不太好写，请大家指正
ISSUE183 As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and more mysterious.The process of acquiring knowledge, in fact, is the revolution of new problems replacing old ones. With the process of science and humanity, we have solved many problems baffling us for a long time, but meanwhile, raised more complex and more mysterious ones to be figured out. Thus, in my view, I'm in favor of the speaker's point of view that more knowledge does not necessarily lead to more comprehension. Instead, it brings out far more than what people can handle with in the form of new puzzles.
Admittedly, the aim of acquiring knowledge is to tackle the problems that are confusing us. Nevertheless, the old problems have from time to time disappeared by means of turning into new ones, which may seem more complicated and inexplicable to us than ever before. For example, in the Middle Ages, when astronomy was not so developed as today, people had to labor a long way to find out whether the sun or the earth is the center of the universe. Yet as modern astronomy is developing at a fabulously rapid speed, human beings are not only satisfied with the discussion on the center of the universe, but also cast their nets on the other planets or satellites, such as landing on the moon, exploration on Mars, which doubtlessly prove to be more complex and profound. The more we have learned, the more we are aware of our ignorance, so that things will appear more difficult rather than more simple.
On the contrary, the more mysterious the things seem, the more we are eager to learn so that we can achieve the final answers. Albert Einstein, considered as the greatest scientist in the 20th century, once said (and I paraphrase) that the most beautiful thing we can experience is the mysterious, which are the source of all true art and science. The curiosities for the unknown tend to motivate people to acquire more in order to get answers to their curiosities. Newton, another great scientist in the 20th century, is good case in point. He had strong curiosities about all the things that puzzled him. To himself, just as he once said, he was nobody but a small boy wandering upon the vast shores of knowledge every now and then finding a small bright pebble to content himself with while the vast of undiscovered truth was laid before. When compared to the unknown, which look like the limitless sea, the familiar truth is just the pebbles on the seashore. What's more, the further we navigate, the broader we may find the sea is.
However, not all the issues become more complicated when we gradually broaden our horizon. Overemphasis laid upon our ignorance will depress the enthusiasm for learning, and hampers our self-improvement. Take the invention of computer for example. Since computer are invented and widely used, things are easier to operated, managed or solved. As a result, with the application of computers, what requires a great deal of labor and finance now can be handled by relatively more simple and efficient methods.
To sum up, what we have learned is only a little of the whole truth, while what we have not explored yet is always vast and infinite. Thus there is no need to feel frustrated about the increasingly more complex and more mysterious world that confront, because as long as we keep on learning our knowledge in total keeps growing and correspondingly we are becoming better equipped to cope with the problems that emerge. 我自己顶一下，麻烦哪位大侠帮我看看吧~~~~ 555555555555，为什么没有人帮我看看呀~~~~~~
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我的一点意见
ISSUE183 As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and more mysterious.The process of acquiring knowledge, in fact, is the revolution of new problems replacing old ones. With the process of science and humanity, we have solved many problems baffling us for a long time, but meanwhile, raised(我觉得把but meanwhile, raised改成while raising比较好，既强调了转折又比较连贯) more complex and more mysterious ones to be figured out. Thus, in my view, I'm in favor of the speaker's point of view that more knowledge does not necessarily lead to more comprehension. Instead, it brings out far more than what people can handle with in the form of new puzzles.
Admittedly, the aim of acquiring knowledge is to tackle the problems that are confusing us. Nevertheless, the old problems have from time to time disappeared by means of turning into new ones(我不太同意这个观点啊，是不是太消极了，好像完全否认了老问题可以被解决的事实，难道全都turning into new ones rather than being figured out了吗？), which may seem more complicated and inexplicable to us than ever before. For example, in the Middle Ages, when astronomy was not so developed as today, people had to labor a long way to find out whether the sun or the earth is the center of the universe. Yet as modern astronomy is developing at a fabulously rapid speed, human beings are not only satisfied with the discussion on the center of the universe, but also cast their nets on the other planets or satellites, such as landing on the moon, exploration on Mars, which doubtlessly prove to be more complex and profound. The more we have learned, the more we are aware of our ignorance(这句写得好!!!), so that things will appear more difficult rather than more simple.
看到最后几句我觉得作者的观点似乎还是比较积极的，是从乐观的角度理解题目。但前面的论述似乎没有能够充分体现这种积极的态度。我觉得应该这么写，先让步说一下旧有的问题确实被解决了，但是由于人们的求知欲是永无止境的，在解决了老问题的基础上，对新的以及更加复杂问题的解决成为可能，所以继续探索。
On the contrary, the more mysterious the things seem, the more we are eager to learn so that we can achieve the final answers. Albert Einstein, considered as the greatest scientist in the 20th century, once said (and I paraphrase) that the most beautiful thing we can experience is the mysterious (ones), which are the source of all true art and science. The curiosities for the unknown (加个things什么的)tend to motivate people to acquire more in order to get answers(get answers的对象应该是problems而不是curiosities，改成satisfy？) to their curiosities. Newton, another great scientist in the 20th century, is good case in point. He had strong curiosities about all the things that puzzled him. To himself, just as he once said, he was nobody but a small boy wandering upon the vast shores of knowledge every now and then finding a small bright pebble to content himself with while the vast of undiscovered truth was laid before. When compared to the unknown, which look like the limitless sea, the familiar truth is just the pebbles on the seashore. What's more, the further we navigate, the broader we may find the sea is.
这一段语言和例子都没有什么问题，只是整段的中心似乎和题目没有太大关系。题目说的是人们的研究是让问题变得更容易理解了还是更复杂了，而这一段说的是越复杂越神秘人们越想知道，而且段首是个强转折。如果想说这个意思，我觉得不妨作为上面一段的递进(而不是转折!)，进一步说明为什么问题越来越复杂(实际就是刚才说的求知欲的问题)
However, not all the issues become more complicated when we gradually broaden our horizon. Overemphasis laid upon our ignorance will depress the enthusiasm for learning, and hampers our self-improvement.(根据后面的意思，我觉得这句话可以去掉。因为这段应该是在说“确实有一些问题得到了解决或简化”，而不是在说“过分强调我们的无知会导致不良后果，所以要承认一些问题得到简化”这个意思) Take the invention of computer for example. Since computer are invented and widely used, things are easier to operated, managed or solved. As a result, with the application of computers, what requires a great deal of labor and finance(finance想说明什么意思？) now can be handled by relatively more simple and efficient methods. (computer的例子很好!)
To sum up, what we have learned is only a little of the whole truth, while what we have not explored yet is always vast and infinite. Thus there is no need to feel frustrated about the increasingly more complex and more mysterious world that confront, because as long as we keep on learning our knowledge in total keeps growing and correspondingly we are becoming better equipped to cope with the problems that emerge.
最后一段说的是如何以正确的态度面对新的问题，意思是对的，但感觉上似乎是全文意思的一个延伸。我个人认为延伸没有什么不可以，但前提应该把全文的中心简练小结一下，正反都照顾到。实际上这个小结就已经够最后一段的篇幅了，所以我觉得在考场上没有那么多时间延伸。不知作者怎么看？ :D
总体上来说全文的语言和结构还是可以的，论述的角度也不错。就是body3整个的展开方向调整一下我觉得更好。还有body2一开始的基调，我想应该定得更积极一点，适当有一点让步，不仅逻辑上完整一些，也为后面的展开作好辅垫。(因为body4就是一个小反嘛)
以上观点请作者指正! :cool:
一点意见
ISSUE183 As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and more mysterious.The process of acquiring knowledge, in fact, is the revolution of new problems replacing old ones. With the process(progress) of science and humanity, we have solved many problems baffling us for a long time, but meanwhile, raised more complex and more mysterious ones to be figured out. Thus, in my view, I'm in favor of the speaker's point of view that more knowledge does not necessarily lead to more comprehension. Instead, it brings out far more than what people can handle with in the form of new puzzles.
Admittedly, the aim of acquiring knowledge is to tackle the problems that are confusing us. Nevertheless, the old problems have from time to time disappeared by means of turning into new ones, which may seem more complicated and inexplicable to us than ever before. For example, in the Middle Ages, when astronomy was not so developed as today, people had to labor a long way to find out whether the sun or the earth is the center of the universe. Yet as modern astronomy is developing at a fabulously rapid speed, human beings are not only satisfied with the discussion on the center of the universe, but also cast their nets on the other planets or satellites, such as landing on the moon, exploration on Mars, which doubtlessly prove to be more complex and profound. The more we have learned, the more we are aware of our ignorance, so that things will appear more difficult rather than more simple.(列子前面挺好，但是感觉好象没有说明具体的＂更加复杂的问题＂所在，看着好象在说技术的发展给人们带来了很多好处，才让人们可以研究其他星球什么的，个人认为可以再强调一下）
On the contrary, the more mysterious the things seem, the more we are eager to learn so that we can achieve the final（我想问用ultimate会不会更好呢？可以讨论一下） answers. Albert Einstein, considered as the greatest scientist in the 20th century, once said (and I paraphrase) that the most beautiful thing we can experience is the mysterious, which are the source of all true art and science. The curiosities for the unknown tend to motivate people to acquire more in order to get answers to their curiosities. Newton, another great scientist in the 20th century, is (a) good case in point. He had strong curiosities about all the things that puzzled him. To himself, just as he once said, he was nobody but a small boy wandering upon the vast shores of knowledge every now and then finding a small bright pebble to content himself with while the vast of undiscovered truth was laid before. When compared to the unknown, which look like the limitless sea, the familiar truth is just the pebbles on the seashore. What's more, the further we navigate, the broader we may find the sea is.
However, not all the issues become more complicated when we gradually broaden our horizon. Overemphasis laid upon our ignorance will depress the enthusiasm for learning, and hampers our self-improvement. Take the invention of computer for example. Since computer are invented and widely used, things are easier to operated, managed or solved. As a result, with the application of computers, what requires a great deal of labor and finance now can be handled by relatively more simple and efficient methods.
To sum up, what we have learned is only a little of the whole truth, while what we have not explored yet is always vast and infinite. Thus there is no need to feel frustrated about the increasingly more complex and more mysterious world that (we) confront, because as long as we keep on learning our knowledge in total keeps growing and correspondingly we are becoming better equipped to cope with the problems that emerge.
写得不错，只是大概看了一下， 提了一点小建议，可以讨论 终于有人看了,谢谢大家!
我再下去改!
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