issue51 教育类，欢迎大家批评
51"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."At first glance, the above statement sounds reasonable, and it relies on an assumption that needs and interests of every student are different, which is dubious. It is true that no every two students are totally same, but it does not mean that they have nothing in common. In fact, many students share some common needs such as learning basic skills and morality. This calls for a balance between standard education and individualized education.
First of all, individualized education is significant in cultivating talent students. A typical example can be found in higher education, especially in graduate schools in universities. In science subjects, almost every graduate student has a special advisor, for every student researches in different directions from his or her classmates. When the students meet some difficulties and troubles in their research, they can timely receive suitable advices from their advisors. Since the students' researches are so specific, it is almost impossible for one advisor to guide them simultaneously, and such kind of individualized education guarantees the quality of education. Without such individualized education, the students will probably cannot develop fully and contribute to society well.
On the other hand, individualized education sometimes is hard to be applied and has poor efficiency. For example, in some poor areas in China, there are many children in an age of going to school, but the number of teachers available there is very small. Therefore, the teacher has to teach students in a very large class. It is true that it will be better for these children if they could receive more individualized education, but as the circumstance limit it impossible to reach that goal and a large class could provide more children education and have a better result than only teaching a small number of students. Besides, there are also other cases in which the standard education is more effective. For instance, in fundamental schools, nearly all pupils share the same needs that are to learn reading, writing and other basic skills. Further, they also need to learn morality, which is also the same among pupils. Therefore, it is natural to teach them in a standard method. If they are taught one by one just like graduate students, the efficiency of education is undoubtedly low.
All in all, although sometimes it is desirable for education to be design to meet individuals’ needs and interests, it is sometimes better for teachers to teach students in a large class. Further, the reality is that the standard education is the only choice in many towns. 51"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
At first glance, the above statement sounds reasonable, and it relies on an assumption that needs and interests of every student are different, which is dubious (which指代什么呢?而且这样就来一句从句是否罗嗦?我觉得直接说dubious assumption就可以了). It is true that no every two students are totally same (觉得好别扭 every student is distinct?), but it does not mean that they have nothing in common. In fact, many students share some common needs such as learning basic skills and morality (记得孙远工具箱里提到Thomas Jefferson的话,好像moral与faculty相对仗更好些). This (it?) calls for a balance between standard education and individualized education.
First of all, individualized education is significant in cultivating talent students. A typical example can be found in higher education, especially in graduate schools in universities. In science subjects, almost every graduate student has a special advisor, for every student researches in different directions from his or her classmates (+ do?). When the students meet some difficulties and troubles in their research, they can timely receive suitable advices (有复数么?) from their advisors. Since the students' researches are so specific, it is almost impossible for one advisor to guide them simultaneously, and such kind of individualized education guarantees the quality of education. Without such individualized education, the students will probably cannot develop fully and contribute to ( make contribution for )society well.
On the other hand, individualized education sometimes is hard to be applied and has poor efficiency. For example, in some poor areas in China, there are many children in an (at the ) age of going to school (表达太不地道, 不过我一时业想不出 :mad: ) , but the number of teachers available there is very small. Therefore, the teacher has to teach students in a very large class. It is true that it will be better for these children if they could receive more individualized education, but as the circumstance limit it (这里上下间的结构有点问题)impossible to reach that goal and a large class could provide more children education and have a better result than only teaching a small number of students.(有必要整这么个长句嘛?) Besides, there are also other cases in which the standard education (突然冒出,没有铺垫. 原来你那个大班上课就叫标准化教育啊?你也应该先定义下)is more effective. For instance, in fundamental schools, nearly all pupils share the same needs that are to learn reading, writing and other basic skills. Further, they also need to learn morality, which is also the same among pupils. Therefore, it is natural to teach them in a standard method (到底是什么?举个例子吧). If they are taught one by one just like graduate students, the efficiency of education is undoubtedly low.
All in all, although sometimes it is desirable for education to be design to meet individuals’ needs and interests, it is sometimes better for teachers to teach students in a large class. Further, the reality is that the standard education is the only choice in many towns
感觉论证上单薄了些, 只有两个body, 力度不够, 一般采用+-+, ++- 等结构更有力一点..另外感觉论证的浅了些, 个性化教育未必就是一对一授课, 大班上课就能称为标准化教育了嘛? 我们的研究生教育虽然是一个导师带少数学生, 但我可以找出充分的理由反驳这不是一种个性化教育. 建议举举具体的例子来证明学生怎么样从个性的教育中充分发展自己的特长最后超越常人的, 这种例子很好举, 编也编的出. 另外还可以用反证法等等. 多谢 CRUSADE老兄的点评，这篇是限时写的，所以从思想到论证都弱了很多，SIGH。 51"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
At first glance, the above statement sounds reasonable, and it relies on an assumption that needs and interests of every student are different, which is dubious.(这句话说得有问题，整个一句话用and连接，到后半部分又用which来转折，which 指代的是谁？这句话的重点在哪里？) It is true that no （not）every two students are totally (the)same, but it does not mean that they have nothing in common. In fact, many students share some common needs such as learning basic skills and morality. This calls for a balance between standard education and individualized education.前面的铺垫看起来都像是说学生是相同的，只有一句话是说不同还是用it is true…but…这种句子来说明，以为你是要说反面观点，没有想到是说了折衷观点。改一下的好）
First of all, individualized education is significant in cultivating talent students. A typical example can be found in higher education, especially in graduate schools in universities. (这句话是个什么意思)In science subjects, almost every graduate student has a special advisor, for （不正式）every student researches in different directions from his or her classmates.(直接使用every student researches different from his classmates 不好吗?) When the students meet some difficulties and troubles in their research, they can timely receive suitable advices from their advisors. Since the students' researches are so specific, it is almost impossible for one advisor to guide them simultaneously, and such kind of individualized education guarantees the quality of education. Without such individualized education, the students will probably cannot (去will)develop fully and contribute to society well.
这一段说明个人化教育对培养学生很重要.
首先, ts有问题,talent student指得是什么?天才学生吗?还是说培养有用的人才？后面你可没有说什么天才学生了呢
其次，在一个自然段之中，如果开始用的是student,后面就一直使用student,不要用复数和单数参杂.
再次,我认为个人化教育旨在培养学生在未来职业上的需求,社会需要不同的分工,所以需要大学对学生进行专业区分,这个是必需的,但是不能说Without such individualized education, the students will probably cannot develop fully.
On the other hand, individualized education sometimes is hard to be applied and has poor efficiency. For example, in some poor (总是使用一个词，还是换一个得好poverty-striken）areas in China, there are many children in an age of going to school（in an age to recieve education会不会好一点）, but the number of teachers available there is very small（number能和poor连用吗？）. Therefore, the teacher has to teach students in a very large class. It is true that it will be better for these children if they could receive more individualized education, but as the circumstance limit （limit circunstances或circunstances limited) it impossible to reach that goal and(顺接关系不要用and) a large class could provide more children education and have a better result than only teaching a small number of students. Besides, there are also other cases in which the standard education is more effective. For instance, in fundamental schools, nearly all pupils share the same needs that are to learn reading, writing and other basic skills. Further, they also need to learn morality,（只有这个吗？） which is also the same among pupils. Therefore, it is natural to teach them in a standard method. If they are taught one by one just like graduate students, the efficiency of education is undoubtedly low.（efficiency 不能和low 像搭配的吧）
这一段想说明个人化教育的限制,分成两个小点1对于一些贫困地区,个人化教育不可能2学生需要全面教育,尤其是小学生.
对于第一小点给的例子,本人尽管感情上不能接受,但是说得对.
第二小点,不好,难道只有小学生才要接受全面教育吗?现在的大学为了就业,把学生只局限于自己的领域,使学生不能得到全面的发展就可以了吗?诚然,专业教育是必需的,但是过于专业会导致头脑闭塞,理科生需要文科来锻炼自己的文字水平,表达能力,逻辑思维.
All in all, although sometimes it is desirable for education to be design to meet individuals’ needs and interests, it is sometimes better for teachers to teach students in a large class. Further, the reality is that the standard education is the only choice in many towns.
要是我的话，会这样写
1 教育的有效与否应该看一个人的综合素质是否提高（反面）
2 整体教育是必需的。从小学开始全面教育，到大学在根据自己的兴趣加以选择。但是什么时候都不能忽视整体教育，包括自然科学，文化，艺术，他们都从不同层面上提高一个人整体素质。（反面）
3 为了个人生存和社会需要，学生必须要学习专业知识，这就需要个人化教育。（正面）
限时作文看来是不太好写呢，加油：）
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