mingjizhe 发表于 2004-2-22 12:04:48

issue 191 (personal life and productive workers) 麻烦大家了

大家说说写两段可以吗?俺只有400出头个字。还有你们说我的观点可以吗?
issue 191 "Education should be equally devote to enriching the personal lives of students and to training students to be productive workers."
       
The speaker asserts that the education should enrich the students' personal lives and train students to be productive works. I strongly agree with this statement because the most function of education at any level is to develop the personality of individual and the significance of his life to himself and to the society.

One of the education's purposes is to make the students become eligible workers who can contribute to the society. Therefore universities and colleges should supply some courses to train students to be productive workers.  Recently a survey conducted by the department of sociology in PeKing University revealed that 62.4 percent of freshman are concerned about the employing rate of their major students. Whether they can get enough training or part-time working experience is critical factor when they choose which university they will study in. The society's development is based on numerous productive workers and the education play an important role in training productive workers. These workers included all kinds of workers, so university should supply different training for diverse discipline students. For example, psychology students practice in psychological clinic; engineer students take an industrial attachment scheme in related-fields; business students practice in a bank or commercial company; science students gain research experience as a student help of their supervisors.

In spite of training student to be a productive worker, the education also play the role to make the student be an all-round person by means of enriching the personal life. First of all, the education should broaden the student's horizon by supplying various elective courses. For instance, liberal art education for engineer students is essential and vital, because they can learn skills for good interpersonal relationship and leadership as well as oral and written communication skills. Secondly, the education should also inoculate students with values what we shared: honesty, fairness, tolerant, self-discipline, fidelity to task, friends, and family, personal responsibility, love of country, and belief in the principle of liberty, equality, and the freedom to practice one's faith. In addition, the education should encourage students to take more extra- curriculum activities and provide some facilities. For example, the interest-teams, such as music, sport, movie, language and so on, will attract more students if schools appropriate money to support interest-teams' development.

In conclusion, enriching the personal lives of students and training students to be productive worker are important responsibilities of education. So I agree with the speaker's assertion that both aspects should be equally devoted to.

pooh 发表于 2004-2-22 19:08:10

issue 191 "Education should be equally devote to enriching the personal lives of students and to training students to be productive workers."

The speaker asserts that the education should enrich the students' personal lives and train students to be productive works. I strongly agree with this statement because the most function of education at any level is to develop the personality(personal lives不等于personality吧) of individual and the significance of his life to himself and to the society.

One of the education's purposes is to make the students become eligible workers who can contribute to the society. Therefore universities and colleges should supply some courses to train students to be productive workers. Recently a survey conducted by the department of sociology in PeKing University revealed that 62.4 percent of freshman are concerned about the employing rate of their major students. Whether they can get enough training or part-time working experience is critical factor when they choose which university they will study in. The society's development is based on numerous productive workers and the education play an important role in training productive workers. These workers included all kinds of workers, so university should supply different training for diverse discipline students. For example, psychology students practice in psychological clinic; engineer students take an industrial attachment scheme in related-fields; business students practice in a bank or commercial company; science students gain research experience as a student help of their supervisors.   这里的例子不太合适,应该将重点放在why should 而不是 how

In spite of training student to be a productive worker, the education also play the role to make the student be an all-round person by means of enriching the personal life. First of all, the education should broaden the student's horizon by supplying various elective courses. For instance, liberal art education for engineer students is essential and vital, because they can learn skills for good interpersonal relationship and leadership as well as oral and written communication skills. Secondly, the education should also inoculate students with values what we shared: honesty, fairness, tolerant, self-discipline, fidelity to task, friends, and family, personal responsibility, love (patriotism) of country, and belief in the principle of liberty, equality, and the freedom to practice one's faith. In addition, the education should encourage students to take more extra- curriculum activities and provide some facilities. For example, the interest-teams, such as music, sport, movie, language and so on, will attract more students if schools appropriate money to support interest-teams' development. 注意:还是要多论证why

In conclusion, enriching the personal lives of students and training students to be productive worker are important responsibilities of education. So I agree with the speaker's assertion that both aspects should be equally devoted to.

400出头少了点,争取500左右才好,最好是分5段,这是根据范文的标准来的。一定要注意审题,行文还算比较流畅。加油!

mingjizhe 发表于 2004-2-23 00:39:42

谢谢pooh, 我也感觉要写一些why,可以写的时候写不出来,所以就往how 上扯了。呵呵,一下子就被人看穿了,是要改改。
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