issue154。高频题目
154 Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators."Whether communities and parents must be involved in local school? The speaker asserts that responsibility of education should not be left to professional faculty for its significant influence on society. I concede that cultivating qualified citizens requires the participation of communities and parents for their external guide; however, it is impossible to overlook the special role of educators in children's life.
On the one hand, parents cannot shirk their duty of education, because they are students' best teachers for their direct effect on daily life. The growth of children has important relationship with parents, no matter interest, habit, taste or personality; after all, they live with their parents and are affected by them. If parents fail to participate in education and even have bad effect on children, education would be impeded or damaged eventually. For example, when a father usually tell lies in front of his son, the small boy would feel that lies are necessity rather than defect, not to mention understanding the concept of honesty. On the contrary, the good thoughts and behavior of parents might lead children into a brilliant life. For instance, Archimedes was a famous mathematician and physicist whose success might due to the influence of his family. Without of the parents' education, the great man might lack interest on mathematics. Considering those merit of family education mentioned above, it is impossible require parents to involve in local school.
On the other hand, the purpose of education is to cultivate qualified citizens to fit for the need of community so that the society should also pay attention to education. Recently, education usually is separated from social activities; as a result, students feel difficulty to change information and theories of books into individual knowledge; in other words, they lack ability of practice. Consequently, the communities should provide more chances for students to connect with society and help them to know what the society need and what they should do to improve the nation. By communicating with the society, students can work according to the requirement of society, such as jobs, moral standard and other conditions. All in all, without communities, the growth of students would be stopped in the superficial level of school education rather than become real citizens.
However, it is unfair to neglect the function of professional educator for their essential role in school. The basic duty of school education is to teach principles, methods and various theories to students in that any ability and improvement depend on these knowledge. In the absence of professional educators, students might fail to understand lessons well, let alone learning other skills or majors. It is terrible to imagine that students in the world are all illiterate or poor educated ones. Taking a look into developing countries, such as Japan and America, the two countries pay more attention to school education, especially abilities of faculty because they consider that knowledge from school is primary factor of survival. As professional educators, they are guiders of students who lead them to choose their directions and help students to widen vision. Lacking professional educators, external strength of communities and parents would make no sense on education for the absence of the base of education.
In sum, the lifetime of a student has three parts: the affection of parents, the direction of education and the guide of communities. To cultivate an all-round student, such three factors must play as a part into education rather depends on single one. 自己提一下，要不然就石沉大海了 154 Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators."
Whether communities and parents must be involved in local school?[这麽问句可以吗?我不清楚，请指教] The speaker asserts that responsibility of education should not be left to professional faculty for its significant influence on society. I concede that cultivating qualified citizens requires the participation of communities and parents for their external guide; however, it is impossible to overlook the special role of educators in children's life.
On the one hand, parents cannot shirk their duty of education, because they are students' best teachers for their direct effect on daily life. [稍嫌罗嗦]The growth of children has important relationship with parents, no matter interest, habit, taste or personality; after all, they live with their parents and are affected by them. If parents fail to participate in education and even have bad effect on children, education would be impeded or damaged eventually. For example, when a father usually tell lies in front of his son, the small boy would feel that lies are necessity rather than defect, not to mention understanding the concept of honesty. On the contrary, the good thoughts and behavior of parents might lead children into a brilliant life. For instance, Archimedes was a famous mathematician and physicist whose success might due to the influence of his family. Without of the parents' education, the great man might lack interest on mathematics.[真的是因为家庭的影响吗？这里最好说下他的家庭是如何培养的] Considering those merit of family education mentioned above,
On the other hand, the of education is to cultivate qualified citizens to the need of community so that[这里用得不对] the society should also pay attention to education. Recently, education usually is[副词位置不对] separated from social activities; as a result, students feel difficulty to change information and theories of books into individual knowledge; in other words, they lack ability of practice. Consequently, the communities should provide more chances for students to connect with society and help them to know what the society need and what they should do to improve the nation.[这个长句再组织一下] By communicating with the society, students can work according to the requirement of society, such as jobs, moral standard and other conditions. All in all, without communities, the growth of students would be stopped in the superficial level of school education rather than [这里不能继承上半句的主语]become real citizens.
However, it is unfair to neglect the function of professional educator for their essential role in school. The basic duty of school education is to teach principles, methods and various theories to students any ability and improvement depend on these knowledge. In the absence of professional educators, students might fail to understand lessons well, let alone learning other skills or majors. It is terrible to imagine that students in the world are all illiterate or poor educated ones. Taking a look into developing countries, such as Japan and America, the two countries pay more attention to school education, especially abilities of faculty because they consider that knowledge from school is primary factor of survival.[这里说理比较主观] As professional educators, they are guiders of students who lead them to choose their directions and help students to widen vision. Lacking professional educators, external strength of communities and parents would make no sense on education for the absence of the base of education.
[我觉得最后你说的那句话才应该是本段重点应该展开的地方]
In sum, the lifetime of a student has three parts: the affection of parents, the direction of education and the guide of communities. To cultivate an all-round student, such three factors must play as a part into education rather depends on single one. 这个题目我我觉得我一直在主观上绕
展 不开来，所以就显的空，有什么好的例子或者比较有说服力的东西吗？ 154 Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators."
Whether communities and parents must (should ?) be involved in local school? The speaker asserts that responsibility of education should not be left to professional faculty for its significant influence on society. I concede that cultivating qualified citizens requires the participation of communities and parents for their external guide; however, it is impossible to overlook the special role of educators in children's life.
(我觉得尽量客观，最好不要用impossible之类的词)
On the one hand, parents cannot shirk their duty of education, because they are students' best teachers for their direct effect on daily life. The growth of children has important relationship with parents, no matter interest, habit, taste or personality; after all, they live with their parents and are affected by them. If parents fail to participate in education and even have bad effect on children, education would be impeded or damaged eventually. For example, when a father usually tell lies in front of his son, the small boy would feel that lies are necessity rather than defect, not to mention understanding the concept of honesty. On the contrary, the good thoughts and behavior of parents might lead children into a brilliant life. For instance, Archimedes was a famous mathematician and physicist whose success might due to the influence of his family. Without of the parents' education, the great man might lack interest on mathematics. Considering those merit of family education mentioned above, it is impossible require parents to involve in local school.
On the other hand, the purpose of education is to cultivate qualified citizens to fit for the need of community so that the society should also pay attention to education. Recently, education usually is separated from social activities; as a result, students feel difficulty to change information and theories of books into individual knowledge; in other words, they lack ability of practice. Consequently, the communities should provide more chances for students to connect with society and help them to know what the society need and what they should do to improve the nation. By communicating with the society, students can work according to the requirement of society, such as jobs, moral standard and other conditions. All in all, without communities, the growth of students would be stopped in the superficial level of school education rather than become real citizens.
However, it is unfair to neglect the function of professional educator for their essential role in school. The basic duty of school education is to teach principles, methods and various theories to students in that any ability and improvement depend on these knowledge. In the absence of professional educators, students might fail to understand lessons well, let alone learning other skills or majors. It is terrible to imagine that students in the world are all illiterate or poor educated ones. Taking a look into developing countries, such as Japan and America, the two countries pay more attention to school education, especially abilities of faculty because they consider that knowledge from school is primary factor of survival. As professional educators, they are guiders of students who lead them to choose their directions and help students to widen vision. Lacking professional educators, external strength of communities and parents would make no sense on education for the absence of the base of education.
In sum, the lifetime of a student has three parts: the affection of parents, the direction of education and the guide of communities. To cultivate an all-round student, such three factors must play as a part into education rather depends on single one.
我只是从结构是上说一下我的看法：我觉得你的开头和后面的正文在结构上不相配，在第一段你有一个让步句型引出主题，强调的是educator的作用，然而你的正文却没有显出这一点来，而是把三个因素并列展开的。因此我觉得第一段最好改一下。 之前我也有过这样的问题，朋友给我提醒了，今天看到你的文章我就说一下。
继续加油！！！
个人观点仅供参考：） 当初我和老师讨论过这个问题，让步不一定代表很面就是重点啊，是只出不能忽略的意思
事实上我很多文章都这么写的2 正1负，但是可能那个让步最好个限定词好点，我是这么认为的。不过也不肯定，呵呵
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