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Issue185Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
The statement exactly illuminates the benefits of scandals, no matter in politics, academia, or other areas. I agree this claim with little reserve.
Scandals are usually considered to connect with something illegal, immoral, and secret. So it is hard to acquaint them for public. Once the public are informed of them, the people involved in the scandal suffer great pressure and maybe punishment legally and morally.
The benefit of scandals is mainly that they enable us to pay attention to the problems that were masked and may cause potential loss and hidden damage. For example, one of the famous scandals involves two major American airline companies. The CEOs of these American airlines companies contemplate to raise fight tickets and the two companies are secretly unified. However, the tape recording of the talk between the two CEOs was exposed to the public, which irrigate rage of people. If this scandal had never been revealed, then it is consumers that suffer the loss at last and the companies gain extra profit by breaking the law. This example illustrates clearly that scandals are beneficial to us by exposing possible loss and hazard.
Scandals are phenomena, not the origin of problems, so another benefit of the scandals is that they force people to think why these scandals happen, search for solutions and finally may reform the system. One shocking scandal in 2002 is the scandal of Enron. By inappropriately counting profits, the corporate made up false Balance Sheet in order to ensure investors so that the stock price would be sticky to a high price. However, this illegal behavior was denounced (laid open/unmasked). Consequently, Enron bankrupted along with several companies involved. This scandal, without any doubt, amount to an earthquake in business world. While still shocked, people discuss why this ashamed issue happens. Many people believed that the origin of the scandal was the current supervising system of corporation. From then on, several policies, stricter rules and more severe punishment were employed to reform the system. Now, corporations have to seriously deal with the authenticity of accounting statements。A better system ensures the operation of society normally. Scandals don't show us what we should do positively, but tell people where the problems are and ultimately propel the society.
To sum up, scandals should not be regarded as the nothing but immoral and useless thing. Like medicine, they are bitter but helpful to the health of a society. No.1 issue185 丑闻那片
Issue185
Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
The statement exactly illuminates the benefits of scandals, no matter in politics, academia, or other areas. I agree this claim with little reserve.太简练了吧！呵呵。其实我觉得开头可以不用这种赞同不赞同的方式，可以把题目的意思用自己的话RESTATE一下子，这样字数也有了，也更像ISSUE了。
Scandals are usually considered to connect with something illegal, immoral, and secret. So it is hard to acquaint them for public. Once the public are（是不是应该用单数？） informed of them, the people involved in the scandal suffer great pressure and maybe punishment legally and morally. 这一段似乎和论述的主题无关。
The benefit of scandals is mainly that they enable us to pay attention to the problems that were masked and may cause potential loss and hidden damage. For example, one of the famous scandals involves two major American airline companies这句话听起来较别扭，是不是调换一下前后顺序好一些呀？. The CEOs of these American airlines companies contemplate（不是很好） to raise fight（flight） tickets and the two companies are secretly unified. However, the tape recording（record） of the talk between the two CEOs was exposed to the public, which irrigate（the） rage of people. If this scandal had never been revealed, then it is consumers that suffer the loss at last and the companies gain extra profit by breaking the law. This example illustrates clearly that scandals are beneficial to us by exposing possible loss and hazard.
Scandals are phenomena（不解）, not the origin of problems, so another benefit of the scandals is that they force people to think why these scandals happen, search for solutions and finally may reform the system. One shocking scandal in 2002 is the scandal of Enron. By inappropriately counting profits, the corporate made up false Balance Sheet in order to ensure investors so that the stock price would be sticky to a high price. However, this illegal behavior was denounced (laid open/unmasked). Consequently, Enron bankrupted along with several companies involved. This scandal, without any doubt, amount to an earthquake in business world. While still shocked, people discuss why this ashamed issue happens. Many people believed that the origin of the scandal was the current supervising system of corporation. From then on, several policies, stricter rules and more severe punishment（s） were employed to reform the system. Now, corporations have to seriously deal with the authenticity of accounting statements。A better system ensures the operation of society normally. Scandals don't show us what we should do positively, but tell people where the problems are and ultimately propel the society.强呀，这样的例子都举得出，学经济或金融的吧！这一段写得很好，尤其是最后一句总结得好。
To sum up, scandals should not be regarded as the nothing but immoral and useless thing. Like medicine, they are bitter but helpful to the health of a society.结尾也不很不错，就是有些太短了。虽然简洁是优点，但字数也是很重要的。
整篇来讲写得不错，但若删去第二段相对无关的话的话，是不是感觉分量就不够了？ No.1 issue185 丑闻那片
Issue185
Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
The statement exactly illuminates the benefits of scandals, no matter in politics, academia, or other areas. I agree this claim with little reserve.
既然是little reserve, 可以把理由陈述一下
Scandals are usually considered to connect with something illegal, immoral, and secret. So it is hard to acquaint them for public. Once the public are informed of them, the people involved in the scandal suffer great pressure and maybe punishment legally and morally.
这里要不应该和上面合并，要不就是说完，比如great pressure和punishment是scandal最好的传播媒介，吸引了媒体，在关系到百姓利益的时候更引发了全社会的关注...反正觉得是这里应该有一个结果，不然就显得论证不足。
The benefit of scandals is mainly that they enable us to pay attention to the problems that were masked and may cause potential loss and hidden damage. For example, one of the famous scandals involves two major American airline companies. The CEOs of these American airlines companies contemplate to raise fight tickets and the two companies are secretly unified. However, the tape recording of the talk between the two CEOs was exposed to the public, which irrigateirritate,好象已经包含rage的这层意思了 rage of people. If this scandal had never been revealed, then it is consumers that suffer the loss at last and the companies gain extra profit by breaking the law. This example illustrates clearly that scandals are beneficial to us by exposing possible loss and hazard.
Scandals are phenomena, not the origin of problems, so another benefit of the scandals is that they force people to think why these scandals happen, search for solutions and finally may reform the system. One shocking scandal in 2002 is the scandal of Enron. By inappropriately counting profits, the corporatecorporation made up false Balance Sheet in order to ensure investors so that the stock price would be sticky to a high price. However, this illegal behavior was denounced (laid open/unmasked). Consequently, Enron bankrupted along with several companies involved. This scandal, without any doubt undoubtedly, amount to an earthquake in business world. While still shocked, people discuss why this ashamed issue happens. Many people believed that the origin of the scandal was the current supervising system of corporation. From then on, several policies, stricter rules and more severe punishment were employed to reform the system. Now, corporations have to seriously deal with the authenticity of accounting statements。A better system ensures the operation of society normally. Scandals don't show us what we should do positively, but tell people where the problems are and ultimately propel the society.
To sum up, scandals should not be regarded as the nothing 题目里面原来说的是useful, 既然是反驳的话也布应该把它改成nothing呀！but immoral and useless thing. Like medicine, they are bitter but helpful to the health of a society.最后的比喻有点像Bitter pills may have wholesome effects.不过这个比方和immortal&useless不是矛盾了嘛！~~
感觉开头结尾比较简单，中间的部分相比例子充分好象说明的不多，好象就是讲个故事，所以好或者不好。内容很有代表性，而且句子表达很清楚的说~~ 感觉各个段落的字数不太平衡呀，越往后越长，前面却那么短，比如我觉得body1就是个很奇怪的段落，是不是不太好？
另外，举个小错误：“ I agree this claim with little reserve.”应该是with little reservation吧 写得不错哦！就你论及的几点，已经讲的比较充分了。语言也不错。
不过呢，你似乎忽略了题目中的后半句，在你的文章里几乎没有提及。还有就是感觉例子用的篇幅多了些，虽然生动，但是理论性就弱了。其实还是有很多大道理可以讲的。
另外，我建议你更明确地说出来：丑闻有两个作用：一是惩罚当事人，二是警戒其他人和后人。
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