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29"Public figures such as actors, politicians, and athletes should expect people to be interested in their private lives. When they seek a public role, they should expect that they will lose at least some of their privacy."Some public figures such as actors, politicians, singers and so on, are respected and praised by general people who are filled with curiosity to these so-called idols. So, as the speaker’s claim that if determining to be a public role, you should expect that you will lose at least some of your privacy. In my point of view, losing part of their privacy, for public figures such as actors, politicians, and so on, is reasonable and should be advocated.
First of all, public figures, to some extent, act as the idols of the public and thus are closely concerned by the public. Generally speaking, for the public, at least a kind of interests among countless activities is related to everyone, and some interests, whether real or imaginative, have been oriented or swung in their minds. Once the vivid examples occur in actual life, they will transfer the inner examples to the real idols and begin to admire them, and thus eager to know about the idols’ information, including their privacy. For example, Bill Clinton, the former president of U.S., was a focus person whose splendid image was impressed in American people and other nations’ people, but when the public knew his gender scandal, most of the mass media in the world reported it and some people asked who was “another part” very curiously. What’s more, Zhou Jielun, a Hongkong singer, is extremely famous for his R&B music style, and many youngsters regard him as their idols and mimic his tone and the action when he performs, but for the followers, all this yields to the curiosity to his privacy. So, the public figures are taken as the models of the public, of course, their privacy is also what many people want to attain.
Furthermore, public figures play a double-side sword role in our society. On the one hand, they can propel the development of the whole society, if their active effects can be taken utterly. Retrospecting the American history, one need look no further to find that, without Washington’s democracy and independence, or Lincoln’ equality, or Martin Luther King’s struggle against discrimination, or Jefferson’s educational reform, the values such as freedom, democracy, equality and so forth, are not so deeply rooted in the Americans’ mind and the civilization process of society also can not get ahead so fast. On the other hand, if leaving them to themselves, public figures can serve to impede the development of society. It is not difficult to take such examples: many people, especially so-called high-level leaders, followed by Clinton’s gender scandal; Brant Kobe’s adultery has often been copied by some famous football stars in England; Cheng Xitong’s serious corruption are also accepted as a good example by many people being in the high positions. Once these ill behaviors are acknowledged by the whole society, controlling the citizens’ behaviors will be as difficult as human beings wanted to land the moon several centuries. So, exerting the public figures’ advantages and avoiding their disadvantages, by social supervision, is very import to cultivate the civilization of society.
Certainly, social supervision, including mass media, general citizens, must deprive of some privacy of public figures. Is this fair to them? Psychologists think, when handling everything, people try their best to seek the balance point, otherwise, their behaviors will conflict with their mentality. For example, people sometimes hesitate for a moment, facing right and responsibility, or pains and gains, etc. undoubtedly, nowadays public figures’ salaries and honor gifted by society, are also what many general people cannot be eager for. But, what are their responsibilities or their pains? As a reward, they should lose part of privacy space to accept the monitoring from the public, which is conducive not only to the whole society but also themselves. Because during the process of supervision, ill behaviors of the public figures are exposed to the public, which help them avoid happen so again and thus make further progress and in the meanwhile make the public know about them throughly. Today, in some countries, publishing the asset of government officials directs at changing the asymmetrical or unbalanced state of the public figures’ pains and gains, rights and responsibilities.
Admittedly, the public figures, as general people, should have some free space for themselves. Exposing public figures’ all privacy is unwarranted and cruel. After all, they are not machines, but normal persons who have some their own secrets and necessary free space. At the same time, we should be aware that there are not only the public figures, but also more general people. Therefore, the development and advancement of society should attribute all people, yet the public figures play a more predominant role than others.
In conclusion, as the description presented above, the public should emphasize their images because to some extent they stands for the whole society, and nearly all the people are seeing them and even sometimes expect too much for them. 29"Public figures such as actors, politicians, and athletes should expect people to be interested in their private lives. When they seek a public role, they should expect that they will lose at least some of their privacy."
Some public figures such as actors, politicians, singers and so on, are respected and praised by general people who are filled with curiosity to these so-called idols. So, as the speaker’s claim that if determining to be a public role, you should expect that you will lose at least some of your privacy. In my point of view, losing part of their privacy, for public figures such as actors, politicians, and so on, is reasonable and should be advocated.
First of all, public figures, to some extent, act as the idols of the public and thus are closely concerned by the public. Generally speaking, for the public, at least a kind of interests among countless activities is related to everyone, and some interests, whether real or imaginative, have been oriented or swung in their minds(这一句不太清楚，从后面看来，应该是头脑里产生的完美的形象，那么用interests是否合适？). Once the vivid examples occur in actual life, they will transfer the inner examples to the real idols and begin to admire them, and thus eager to know about the idols’ information, including their privacy. For example, Bill Clinton, the former president of U.S., was a focus person whose splendid image （was impressed in直接用impressed，不要用被动） American people and other nations’ people, but when the public knew his gender scandal, most of the mass media in the world reported it and some people asked who was （“another part”这种表述规则吗？还是我孤陋寡闻呵呵） very curiously. What’s more, Zhou Jielun, a Hongkong singer, is extremely famous for his R&B music style, and many youngsters regard him as their idols and mimic his tone and the action when he performs, but for the followers, all this yields to the curiosity to his privacy. So, the public figures are taken as the models of the public, of course, their privacy is also what many people want to attain.
Furthermore, public figures play a double-side sword role in our society. On the one hand, they can propel the development of the whole society, if their active effects can be taken utterly. Retrospecting the American history, one need look no further to find that, without Washington’s democracy and independence, or Lincoln’ equality, or Martin Luther King’s struggle against discrimination, or Jefferson’s educational reform, the values such as freedom, democracy, equality and so forth, are not so deeply rooted in the Americans’ mind and the civilization process of society also can not get ahead so fast. On the other hand, if leaving them to themselves, public figures can serve to impede the development of society. It is not difficult to take such examples: many people, especially so-called high-level leaders, followed by Clinton’s gender scandal; Brant Kobe’s adultery has often been copied by some famous football stars in England; Cheng Xitong’s serious corruption are also accepted as a good example by many people being in the high positions. Once these ill behaviors are acknowledged by the whole society, controlling the citizens’ behaviors will be as difficult as human beings wanted to land the moon several centuries（少了ago）.
So, exerting the public figures’ advantages and avoiding their disadvantages, by social supervision, is very import to cultivate the civilization of society.
Certainly, social supervision, including mass media, general citizens, must deprive of some privacy of public figures. Is this fair to them? Psychologists think, when handling everything, people try their best to seek the balance point, otherwise, their behaviors will conflict with their mentality. For example, people sometimes hesitate for a moment, facing right and responsibility, or pains and gains, etc. undoubtedly, nowadays public figures’ salaries and honor gifted by society, are also what many general people cannot be eager for. But, what are their responsibilities or their pains? As a reward, they should lose part of privacy space to accept the monitoring from the public, which is conducive not only to the whole society but also themselves. Because during the process of supervision, ill behaviors of the public figures are exposed to the public, which help them avoid （happen happening ?）
so again and thus make further progress and in the meanwhile make the public know about them thoroughly. Today, in some countries, publishing the asset of government officials directs at changing the asymmetrical or unbalanced state of the public figures’ pains and gains, rights and responsibilities.
Admittedly, the public figures, as general people, should have some free space for themselves. Exposing public figures’ all privacy is unwarranted and cruel. After all, they are not machines, but normal persons who have some their own secrets and necessary free space. At the same time, we should be aware that there are not only the public figures, but also more general people. Therefore, the development and advancement of society should attribute all people, yet the public figures play a more predominant role than others.
In conclusion, as the description presented above, the public should emphasize their images because to some extent they stands for the whole society, and nearly all the people are seeing (应用watching)
them and even sometimes expect too much for them
这篇文章可以说相当不错，无论从语言还是论证的充分展开上，但是论证的角度显得过多而不太集中，还是着重于你要论述的中心思路为上，有一点散。
结尾似乎不能概括你的立场，与前面有些照应不上。
虽需加改进，但是作者的功底可以显见。
也请看看我的文章
还望各位不吝指正，刚开始写argument，有什么问题自己都不知道，多谢。
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