Jun 9th同题写作Argument 78
本帖最后由 Candyisthebest 于 2015-6-14 19:06 编辑78) The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.
Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
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1 According to the memo, the vice president of a food distribution company is planning to return to Buzzoff from Fly-Away Pest Control Company in order to save money. 总结作者观点
A number of questions about the difference between Palm City and Wintervale regarding the pest control, the percentage of damage happened in the two cities, and whether or not using Buzzoff rather than Fly-Away Company can save money, have to be answered in order to evaluate the predictions. 引出三个正文段观点
2 For starters, we need to know the difference between Palm City and Wintervale in terms of the pest control. TS1
The more damage happened in Palm city maybe caused by other reasons instead of Fly-Away Company’s inability. If the pests in Palm city is inherently hard to get rid of or the weather condition in Palm city is preferable for pests to reproduce than pests in Wintervale, the cost of pest damage is certainly more in Palm City. 找他因
To exanimate whether Fly-Away Company did a good job, we need to know the average data about pest damage in Palm city, so if the damage under Fly-Away ‘s control is far less than the average damage is Palm city, Fly-Away Company is efficient in pest control. Comparing with the average data in Wintervale can also evaluate whether Fly-Away Company is productive or not. 补充作者论证
3 In addition, the author assumes that $20,000 worth of food damage in Palm City is sever than $10,000 worth of the food stored in Wintervale. TS2
However we do not know the amount of food stored in the two cities. If the company has $200,000 worth of food in Palm City so 10% of them are damaged, while there are $20,000 worth of the food stored in Wintervale so 50% of them are damaged, in this case, the food damage in Wintervale is more severe than in Palm City, thus, Buzzoff Pest Control Company is not actually better than Fly-Away Pest Control Company. 举例说明
4 As far as saving money, the author hold the idea that the price charged by is considerably lower so the company can save money. TS3
Nevertheless the author fails to take into account of the situation that, the pest control method applied by Fly-Away Company does not suit for every place. 找反例
It is entirely likely that, if they work in Palm City, they can not control the pest at all so the food damage may be much more than $20,000. 举例说明
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