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从2005年3月5日18时27分到2005年3月5日19时51分
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The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds.
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There is a hot debate on the issue that which one is superior ?Human minds or mashines?Due to the firerce competion between the humans and the machines in deluge of fields and the increasing concern it commands,it is far from stunting to see this discuss lasted for long and be in the public's eyes so frequently.Some may claim that mechine will surpass the humans one day,while others doubt about it,and i am one of them.
Two emminent points can be easily pointed to buttress my asseriton.Firstly,as the common sense suggest that all the mechines are invented and made by human beings,since we are able to make them ,we are sure about their structures and forms,thus we will by no means let them out of our control.Secondly,some may listed out that some of the mechines or robust may 'think'.They decared that in certain cases,they are seems to have aquired the skill or ability to compete with human 'independently'.Is it?One of the best supporting example is that dacades of years ago,there was a competiton between a chess champion and a robust,to everyone's surprise ,robust winned.Therefore ,all the mass media were buzz around this issue,some extremists even declaimed that 'Here comes the era of the mechine.'It is fallacious.Thus,this evidence in by no means convincing.
A second problem involved in this sentiment is that ,the author failed to check out whether the two are comparable-----and that render this discussion unreasonable.On one hand,as the common sense telles us ,human minds and the machines are excle at dinstinctive spectrums,for the human,in the night of being dominanted and guilded by the perferct marrige of head and heart,to put it in to another way,science and emotion,they are bend to creation and innovation,yet are short in fatidious work,such as mechinical caculation----which is in the line of the mechines.And it is also why it serves.On the other hand,how can you define such a vague and inconcret concept as 'superior'?Once the machine won man in chess game,it is deserve to be called 'superior'?This comparation itself is infested with pitfalls.
Admittedly,by the introduction of mechines in the last century,it has brought about tremondous alternation to our human beings.By the utilization of tractor,we soared our agriculture pruducts;by the introduction of TV and radio,we are enjoying a much more exciting leisure time;by the population of computer and those computer-related products ,we overwhelming subverted our busniss modes,personal pursuites-----even the notion of the world.These outstanding innotiones are witnessed and recorded by the time and will be carved in the history of human exploring and conquering the world.However,this world would never be dominanted or even controlled by mechines.Thus ,those scentists who are zest in the 'artificial intellegence 'will bound to be desparated if they are under the illsion that one day machine will superior to human mind.
From what have been discussed above,we may easily draw a conclusion that machine is merely a tool or a servent of human beings,since we are able to invent them we can control them.Anyone who are willing to conquer the world with the aim of machines will definitely made his future be jeopardize pernemently. There is a hot debate on the issue that which one is superior ?Human minds or mashines?Due to the firerce competion between the humans and the machines in deluge of fields?什么意思and the increasing concern it commands,it is far fromnotstunting to see this discuss lastedlast for long and be in the public's eyes so frequently.Some may claim that mechine will surpass the humans one day,while others doubt about it,and i am one of them.这段前面背景介绍感觉有点罗嗦，最后主题句相对太简单。
Two emminent points can be easily pointed to buttress my asseritonassertion.Firstly,as the common sense suggest, that all the mechines are invented and made by human beings,.sinceSince we are able to make them ,we are sure about their structures and forms,thus we will by no means let them out of our control.感觉这两层之间不应该是递进关系，用first，second不太合适Secondly,some may listedlist out that some of the mechines or robusts may 'think'.They decareddeclared that in certain cases,they are seems to have aquired the skill or ability to compete with human 'independently'independence.Is it true?One of the best supporting example is that dacades of years ago时间有这么长？,there was a competiton between a chess champion and a robust,to everyone's surprise ,robust winned.Therefore ,all the mass media were buzz around this issue,some extremists even declaimed that 'Here comes the era of the mechine.'It is fallacious为什么fallacious？.Thus,this evidence in by no means convincing.感觉例子是反的，好像在证明与自己对立的观点。
A second problem involved in this sentiment is that ,the author failed to check out whether the two are comparable-----and that renders this discussion unreasonable.On one hand,as the common sense telles us注意句式变化 ,human minds and the machines are excle at dinstinctive spectrums,:for the human,in the night of being dominanted and guilded by the perferct marrige of head and heart,to put it in to another way,science and emotion,they are bend to creation and innovation,yet are short in fatidious work,such as mechinical caculation----which is in the line of the mechines.这句太长，意思也不太明白And it is also why it serves.On the other hand,how can you define such a vague and inconcret concept as 'superior'?Once the machine won man in chess game,it is deserve to be called 'superior'?This comparation itself is infested with pitfalls.这段论点是什么？
Admittedly,by the introduction of mechines in the last century,it has brought about tremondous alternation to our human beings.By the utilization of tractor,we soared our agriculture pruducts;by the introduction of TV and radio,we are enjoying a much more exciting leisure time;by the population of computer and those computer-related products ,we overwhelming subverted our busniss modes,personal pursuites-----even the notion of the world.These outstanding innotiones are witnessed and recorded by the time and will be carved in the history of human exploring and conquering the world.However,this world would never be dominanted or even controlled by mechines.Thus ,those scentists who are zest in the 'artificial intellegence 'will bound to be desparated if they are under the illsion that one day machine will superior to human mind.这段还是主题不明确，感觉多余
From what have been discussed above,we may easily draw a conclusion that machine is merely a tool or a servent of human beings,since we are able to invent them we can control them.Anyone who are willing to conquer the world with the aim of machines will definitely made his future be jeopardize pernemently.最后一句没有道理，题目是讨论人和机器的优越性，这里说如果有人想用机器来战胜人类，这本来就是个矛盾，既然他用机器，就说明人还是superior than机器，但是又说用机器conquer人，感觉和主题不搭调。
总的来说，我觉得你每段的主题不太明确，说理也还不够充分，而且感觉有点像在写argu（render this discussion unreasonable）。
不过你虽然超时了，还是比我超得少多了，呵呵。
我也是421成都考，还有10多天了，大家一起加油吧！
有空也帮我看看 帮偶看看https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/showthread.php?s=&threadid=262579谢谢 看过了，觉得Alier 拍得跟我想的差不多，你的第一段论证有些反了，而且例子不太好，第二段不太明白，整体感觉你的论点不是很突出。
不过还好啦， 我也是和同学讨论半天了才确定了各段的TS的，而且论证也不太对的样子：）
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