Argument4 拍必回！！！
题目：【4】The following was posted on an Internet real estate discussion site.
"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams."
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正文（542 words）：
In this argument, the author recommends that if one wants his home to be sent quickly and gain more profitability, it would be wise to choose Adams because Adams is seemingly superior to Fitch, the other leading estate firm in the author’s town. At first sight, the argument appears to be somehow plausible, but after careful scrutiny, it proves to be deeply problematic and is therefore unpersuasive as it stands. The argument is logically unconvincing in several respects.
Firstly, the author believes that Adams is better than Fitch after comparing the amount of estate agents included in two firms. Admittedly, Adams has more estate agents than that of Fitch, especially many of the employees in Fitch work only part-time. However, the quality of these employees is also an important factor, which to some extent maybe outweighs the quantity of the estate agents. It is possible that the estate agents in Adams are mostly young who have never been estate agents before, while the employees in Fitch are all experts in the realm. As a result, even the amount of the estate agents and the time they work are seemingly not good as Adams, the achievements made by Fitch are still greater than that of Adams.
Secondly, the arguer finds out that the revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and the averaged price of home sales is also higher than that of Fitch. But in this argument, the author doesn’t mention the cost of each estate firm. It is well known that profitability is a function of revenue to cost. So under the circumstance that the expense isn’t clear, it is hasty to say that Adams is superior to Fitch. Maybe the cost of Adams is much more than that of Fitch, which even outweighs the revenue of Adams. When this happens, the Adams made none profitability at all. How can the arguer arbitrarily say that Adams is a much better choice? Furthermore, the average price of the home sales doesn’t reflect the whole situation of the exchange. Are the homes sold by Adams bigger than that sold by Fitch? Are they located in a more convenient place and are there more public facilities nearby? All these kinds of factors can influence the price of the home sales.
Finally, the arguer concludes that Adams needs a shorter period of time to sell out home is unconvincing. Admittedly, the arguer’s home listed with Fitch ten years ago sold much faster than the home listed in with Adams last year. Maybe the properties of the home listed in two estate firms are not the same, which of course makes the time needed to sell out the home different. Even if the homes listed with two firms are the same, the estate market probably is in different situation at different time. It is also possible that the economy flourishes nowadays. So home can be sold much quicker.
To sum up, the reasoning in this argument does not lend strong credibility to what the author recommends. To strengthen the argument, the author should provide more detailed information about estate agents in two firms. Besides, to better evaluate the argument, we need to know the real economic situation in these two estate firms. 请帮忙看看思路
ok？
我看了billkao的分析
真的很透彻，逻辑性很强
但这也是感觉自己存在的一个问题
虽然能够找到题目中的若干批驳点
但是只会一个一个顺着批
就是不知道该如何把他们按照逻辑顺序组合起来
平时还好些
可上了考场以后
找到错误再把它们有机组合
觉得时间很紧张啊
请指点一下好吗？
谢谢！！！ In this argument, the author recommends that if one wants his home to be sent quickly and gain more profitability, it would be wise to choose Adams because Adams is seemingly superior to Fitch, the other leading estate firm in the author’s town. At first sight, the argument appears to be somehow plausible, but after careful scrutiny, it proves to be deeply problematic and is therefore unpersuasive as it stands. The argument is logically unconvincing in several respects.
Firstly, the author believes that Adams is better than Fitch after comparing the amount of estate agents employed by two firms. Admittedly, Adams has more estate agents than that of Fitch, especially many of the employees in Fitch work only part-time. However, the quality of these employees is also an important factor, which to some extent maybe outweighs the quantity of the estate agents. It is possible that the estate agents in Adams are mostly young people who have never been estate agents before, while the employees in Fitch are all experts in the realm. As a result, even the amount of the estate agents and the time they work are seemingly not asgood as Adams, the achievements made by Fitch are still greater than that of Adams.
Secondly, the arguer point out that the revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and the averaged price of home sales is also higher than that of Fitch. But in this argument, the author doesn’t mention the cost of each estate firm. It is well known that profitability is a function of revenue to cost. So under the circumstance that the expense isn’t clear, it is hasty to say that Adams is superior to Fitch. Maybe the cost of Adams is much more than that of Fitch, which even outweighs the revenue of Adams. When this happens, the Adams made none profit at all. How can the arguer arbitrarily say that Adams is a much better choice? Furthermore, the average price of the home sales doesn’t reflect the whole situation of the exchange. Are the homes sold by Adams bigger than that sold by Fitch? Are they located in a more convenient place and are there more public facilities nearby? All these kinds of factors can influence the price of the home sales.
Finally, the arguer concludes that Adams needs a shorter period of time to sell out home is unconvincing. Admittedly, the arguer’s home listed with Fitch ten years ago sold much faster than the home listed in with Adams last year. Maybe the properties of the home listed in two estate firms are not the same, which of course makes the time needed to sell out the home different. Even if the homes listed with two firms are the same, the estate market probably is in different situation at different time. It is also possible that the economy flourishes nowadays. So home can be sold much quicker.
To sum up, the reasoning in this argument does not lend strong credibility to what the author recommends. To strengthen the argument, the author should provide more detailed information about estate agents in two firms. Besides, to better evaluate the argument, we need to know the real economic situation in these two estate firms.
已近分析得很不错了。好像有一篇帖子讲过如何组织顺序，顺序或、让步、或按错误严重程度都不错。
:) 帮我看看
http://edu.gter.net/bbs/showthread.php?s=&threadid=263206 谢谢^_^
明天必回拍 先给顶下了，今天困了，明天扔砖了
谢了^_^
imjason，等着你的砖Re: Argument4 拍必回！！！
In this argument, the author recommends that if one wants his home to be sent quickly这里是否也要个比较级呢 and gain more profitability, it would be wise to choose Adams because Adams is seemingly superior to Fitch, the other leading estate firm in the author’s town. At first sight, the argument appears to be somehow plausible, but after careful scrutiny, it proves to be deeply problematic and is therefore unpersuasive as it stands. The argument is logically unconvincing in several respects.这里已经可以不要了Firstly, the author believes that Adams is better than Fitch after comparing the amount of estate agents included in two firms. Admittedly, Adams has more estate agents than that of Fitch, especially many of the employees in Fitch work only part-time. However, the quality of these employees is also an important factor, which to some extent maybe outweighs the quantity of the estate agents. It is possible that the estate agents in Adams are mostly young who have never been estate agents这是什么意思，人成为AGENTS，加个in么 before, while the employees in Fitch are all experts in the realm. As a result, even the amount of the estate agents and the time they work are seemingly not good as Adams, the achievements made by Fitch are still greater than that of Adams.再充分点。比如说A里有多少又是part-time呢
Secondly, the arguer finds out that the revenue ？in A last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and the averaged price of home sales is also higher than that of Fitch. But in this argument, the author doesn’t mention the cost of each estate firm. It is well known that profitability is a function of revenue to cost没看懂. So under the circumstance that the expense isn’t clear, it is hasty to say that Adams is superior to Fitch. Maybe the cost of Adams is much more than that of Fitch, which even outweighs the revenue of Adams. When this happens, the Adams made none profitability at all.牵强了点 How can the arguer arbitrarily say that Adams is a much better choice? Furthermore, the average price of the home sales doesn’t reflect the whole situation of the exchange. Are the homes sold by Adams bigger than that sold by Fitch? Are they located in a more convenient place and are there more public facilities nearby? All these kinds of factors can influence the price of the home sales.
Finally, the arguer concludes that Adams needs a shorter period of time to sell out home is unconvincing. Admittedly, the arguer’s home listed with Fitch ten years ago sold much faster than the home listed in with Adams last year. Maybe the properties of the home listed in two estate firms are not the same, which of course makes the time needed to sell out the home different. Even if the homes listed with two firms are the same, the estate market probably is in different situation at different time. It is also possible that the economy flourishes nowadays. So home can be sold much quicker.还有10年毕竟是个很长的时间了，会发生很多变化等
To sum up, the reasoning in this argument does not lend strong credibility to what the author recommends. To strengthen the argument, the author should provide more detailed information about estate agents in two firms. Besides, to better evaluate the argument, we need to know the real economic situation in these two estate firms.
你是初次写么？很不错了，继续加油啦！什么时候考啊？精华区里有个关于244道ARGU的每个的分析，很有用的，建议去下载看下了 非常感谢imjason！
不过是不是因为我写的不好所以看出我是第一次写的？汗。。。
但是你说的精华区里argu的每到题分析我找了半天也没找到，劳烦知道的gter们告知一声，我很想要这个东东，谢谢了！
正要拍你的issue^_^
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