issue 218 同主题 艺术被人理解 郁闷啊～～
218"In order for any work of art—whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people."Are the merits of arts is absent without populace’s understanding? From the analysis on the values of social, aesthetic and “marketing”, I get a conclusion the other way around.
Above all , art significance lie in its influences on social levels. Since they reveal the concepts hidden under the mundane life and the impulse that may cause a revolution, it is impractical to make most people to understand the ideas behind the article, the canvas, and the play. For example, the post-modernism in art field in 1950's really confused public viewers at its presumptuous emergence. At that time, artists can not bear the mass conformity and coldness of machines in industrial culture. They stood up first to claim human’s emancipation from the controls of machines, from the restraints of mass production, from the disinterest of human's creativity. They exploited their pigments and pens to express their ideas, but ordinary people can not understand why they put so many strange colours onto the face of the portrait on the canvas randomly, why they composed so noisy music to bother others. The deep thinking of reality and strong will to express creatively determined its "high position" and “eccentric meaning” beyond common sense. But their post-modernism works do contain merits for their waking up the society, for their efforts to stop the slavery by cold machines on people's mind. Afterwards, the society takes changes gradually in many fields, such as new life styles of individual pursuit, freedom demands and so on. It is the profundity and creativity of arts that deeply and implicitly influenced society to change people's minds, their value systems although people can not understand or even perceive it, they can be affected by the idea.
In addition, the aesthetic value may just give people a feeling of beauty. It is not necessary to make people understand why the "Starry night" by Van Gogh is regarded as masterpiece. In fact, it has already make effect that common people have seen the picture and felt pleasant, whether the scale should be like this, or the colour contrast should be stronger or weaker can totally left to artists. Confusing about the ways or the skills through which artists express will not bother people's emotional influences on aesthetic values.
Furthermore, sometimes it may do harm for the pursuit to cater public's taste or lower artist's position to obtain public comprehension for material merits realization. In order to acquire market revenue, some directors produce junk films containing indecent scenes of sex or violence to meet people's needs. Some novelist just writes about "instant literature" serving as fast food with no nutrition. It is true that they can be understood by people since it follows human's needs and inferior interests basing from their intrinsic deficiencies, but the arts betray its principle, let along serve merits.
In sum, as the famous saying goes, " It is real arts that guide populace rather than follow them passively." For real values, no matter how few people understand, they will still exist in the masterpieces. Are the merits of arts is absent without populace’s understanding? From the analysis on the values of social, aesthetic and “marketing”, I get a conclusion the other way around. 可以这么用么？
Above all , art significance这个词不妥 lie in its influences on thesocial levellevels. Since they reveal the concepts hidden under the mundane life and the impulse that may cause a revolution, it is impractical to make most people to understand the ideas behind the article, the canvas, and the play. For example, the post-modernism in art field in 1950's really confused public viewers at its presumptuous emergence. At that time, artists can not bear the mass conformity and coldness of machines in industrial culture. They stood up first to claim human’s emancipation from the controls of machines, from the restraints of mass production, from the disinterest of human's creativity. They exploited their pigments and pens to express their ideas, but ordinary people can not understand why they put so many strange colours onto the face of the portrait on the canvas randomly, why they composed so noisy music to bother others. The deep thinking of reality and strong will to express creatively determined its "high position" and “eccentric meaning” beyond common sense. But their post-modernism works do contain merits for their waking up the society怎么wake up？人们都不懂得它的意思, for their efforts to stop the slavery by cold machines on people's mind跟上句一样，缺乏证明. Afterwards, the society takes changes gradually in many fields, such as new life styles of individual pursuit, freedom demands and so on. 这个有点牵强，不是仅仅是后现代艺术带来的吧It is the profundity and creativity of arts that deeply and implicitly influenced society to change people's minds, their value systems although people can not understand or even perceive it, they can be affected by the idea. 这段主题是说艺术即使不被理解，还是对社会有merit吧？！这个点可以，但是你举例和说理都没有说明白一个关键的问题：人们既然不懂得艺术的意思，怎么被affected呢？
In addition, the aesthetic value may just give people a feeling of beauty. It is not necessary to make people understand why the "Starry night" by Van Gogh is regarded as masterpiece. In fact, it has already make effect that common people have seen the picture and felt pleasant, whether the scale should be like this, or the colour contrast should be stronger or weaker can totally left to artists. Confusing about the ways or the skills through which artists express will not bother people's emotional influences on aesthetic values. 这段有点混乱了，主题是要说艺术的审美价值也不依赖人们的理解而存在吧。 Van gogh 的例子很好，但是没有把它与主题的联系说得太清楚。
Furthermore这里似乎是转折吧？, sometimes it may do harm for the pursuit to cater public's taste or lower artist's position to obtain public comprehension for material merits realization.这句有点问题，是对哪个有harm？ In order to acquire market revenue, some directors produce junk films containing indecent scenes of sex or violence to meet people's needs. Some novelist just writes about "instant literature" serving as fast food with no nutrition. It is true that they can be understood by people since it follows human's needs and inferior interests basing from their intrinsic deficiencies, but the arts betray its principle, let along serve merits.需要考虑这个问题：你举的这些例子能被叫做art么？其实这个点是很好的，就是说如果一味追求被大众理解可能反而会影响art的纯艺术性，但是还需要好好想想举哪些例合适以及该怎么说理
In sum, as the famous saying goes, " It is real arts that guide populace rather than follow them passively." 这句话不错，收了，呵呵For real values, no matter how few people understand, they will still exist in the masterpieces.结尾还是不错～
总得看来，我觉得你的三个点找得不错，很有新意，但是段内结构组织以及例子的归纳还有待加强，继续加油，没有问题的，呵呵！ 谢谢Alier 又见到你了啦～～：）
我再细看看
感想：
发现本专业的东西反倒难写
背景了解的深了 逻辑和表达就容易跳跃
还不如那些离得远的主题好写 唉～
难点！！ 恩，恩，我觉得这个也很难写，不过看下pooh 的百宝箱还是有帮助的
我也写了这篇的，你有时间去拍下看! Are the merits of arts is absent without populace’s understanding? From the analysis on the values of social, aesthetic and “marketing”, I get a conclusion the other way around.开头写的不是很好，你的问句开头有两个谓语are和is；而后来的回答the other way是针对谁的作答
Above all不妥above all,用to begin with即可，我想above all更多是最重要、尤其是等等意思 , art significancesignificance of art lies in its influences on social levels. Since they reveal the concepts hidden under the mundane life and the impulse that may cause a revolution, it is impractical to make most people to understand the ideas behind the article, the canvas, and the play. For example, the post-modernism in art field in 1950's really confused public viewers at its presumptuous emergence. At that time, artists can not bear the mass conformity and coldness of machines in industrial culture. They stood up first to claim human’s emancipation from the controls of machines, from the restraints of mass production, from the disinterest of human's creativity. They exploited their pigments and pens to express their ideas, but ordinary people can not understand why they put so many strange colours onto the face of the portrait on the canvas randomly, why they composed so noisy music to bother others. The deep thinking of reality and strong will to express creatively determined its "high position" and “eccentric meaning” beyond common sense. But their post-modernism works do contain merits for their waking up the society, for their efforts to stop the slavery by cold machines on people's mind. Afterwards, the society takes changes gradually in many fields, such as new life styles of individual pursuit, freedom demands and so on. It is the profundity and creativity of arts that deeply and implicitly influenced society to change people's minds, their value systems although people can not understand or even perceive it, they can be affected by the idea.
In addition, the aesthetic value may just give people a feeling of beauty. It is not necessary to make people understand why the "Starry night" by Van Gogh is regarded as masterpiece. In fact, it has already make effect that common people have seen the picture and felt pleasant, whether the scale should be like this, or the colour contrast should be stronger or weaker can totally left to artists. Confusing about the ways or the skills through which artists express will not bother people's emotional influences on aesthetic values.
Furthermore?, sometimes it may do harm for the pursuit to cater public's taste or lower artist's position to obtain public comprehension for material merits realization. In order to acquire market revenue, some directors produce junk films containing indecent scenes of sex or violence to meet people's needs不同意，既然人们需要sex，为什么要怪导演. Some novelist just writes about "instant literature" serving as fast food with no nutrition这个比如好. It is true that they can be understood by people since it follows human's needs and inferior interests basing fromon their intrinsic deficiencies, but the arts betray its principle, let along serve merits.
In sum, as the famous saying goes, " It is real arts that guide populace rather than follow them passively." For real values, no matter how few people understand, they will still exist in the masterpieces.
首先给我最深的感觉就是词句用的相当不错了，进步很快，注意细节问题，比如B2里can 后面left肯定不对、其它地方也有比较粗心的错误，信号词的表达一定注意，这三个方面的立意很好，但轻重并不是你论述的厚薄决定的，我个人认为作用同等重要。另外，注意一下最后的例子，有些逻辑问题，好好加油 谢谢David～
信号词的问题～嗯～真是很重要！
～马虎！唉～乱七八糟的低级错误都有冒出来～～ 我也来学习学习！
218"In order for any work of art—whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people."
Are the merits of arts is absent without populace’s understanding? 我怎么觉着那么别扭呢，又是is 又是are?From the analysis on the values of social, aesthetic and “marketing”我对引号的问题有点疑问，不过我自己都没搞清楚，但好象英语里是没有双引号的哦！, I get a conclusion the other way around.
Above all , art significance是不是写成the significance of art好些呢？ lies in its influences on social levels. Since they reveal the concepts hidden under the mundane life and the impulse that may cause a revolution, it is impractical to make most people to understand the ideas behind the article个人意见，中国人看得懂，但老外不一定懂哦！可不可以这样来表达呢get the meaning between the lines, the canvas, and the play. For example, the post-modernism好专业的术语啊，学习一下！ in art field in 1950's really confused public viewers atfor its presumptuous emergence. At that time, artists can not bear the mass conformity and coldness of machines in industrial culture. They stood up first to claim human’s emancipation from the controls of machines, from the restraints of mass production, from the disinterest of human's creativity. They exploited their pigments and pens to express their ideas, but ordinary people can not understand why they put so many strange colours onto the face of the portrait on the canvas randomly, why they composed so noisy music to bother others. The deep thinking of reality and strong will to express creatively determined its "high position" and “eccentric meaning” beyond common sense. But their post-modernism works do contain merits for their waking up the society, for their efforts to stop the slavery by cold machines on people's mind.这样的表达，感觉有点怪怪的 Afterwards, the society takes changes gradually in many fields, such as new life styles of individual pursuit, freedom demands and so on. It is the profundity and creativity of arts that deeply and implicitly influenced society to change people's minds, their value systems although although 可以这样放句中啊？怕是不行哦？people can not understand or even perceive it, they can be affected by the idea.
In addition, the aesthetic value may just give people a feeling of beauty. It is not necessary to make people understand why the "Starry night" by Van Goghwhich is regarded as masterpiece. In fact, it has already makemade effect that common people have seen the picture and felt pleasant, whether the scale should be like this, or the colour contrast should be stronger or weaker can totally left to artists. 总结开始，最好加个连接词Confusing aboutConfused with the ways or the skills through which artists express will not bother people's emotional influences on aesthetic values.
Furthermore, sometimes it may do harm for the pursuit to cater public's taste or lower artist's position to obtain public comprehension for material merits realization. In order to acquire market revenue, some directors produce junk films containing indecent scenes of sex or violence to meetsome呵呵，我读到这里，不自然就加了哈！ people's needs. Some novelist just writes about "instant literature" serving as fast food with no nutrition.很好的比喻！学习学习！ It is true that they can be understood by people since it follows human's needs and inferior interests basing from their intrinsic deficiencies, but the arts betray its principle, let along你是要说‘更别提’了是吧？let alone serve merits.
In sum, as the famous saying goes, " It is real arts that guide populace rather than follow them passively."这句点的好！看来famous就是 famous 啊！说的话都不一样 For real values, no matter how few people understand, they will still exist in the masterpieces.结尾点题，干的不错！
总的来说，感叹楼主用词的深度和力度！想问一句，红宝背了几便拉？：P
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