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([ z1f/?6U|留学|签证|TOEFL|GREFirst of all, these priceless gifts can help us recall a special occasion and suddenly we went back to the very moment and very place out of instinct. People send gifts to each other in many situations, such as birthday party, Christmas, Valentine's Day and even graduation ceremony. On these special occasions, one may get so excited even cried out with laugher. No one will forget the excitement of get(getting) an enrollment of his dreaming university and after years and years(感觉有点问题!) one day the very book that her friend sent to her as a gift and it used to stay at the corner of his bookcase with so many dusts on it, may bring him to the right time. Not only did the gift book remind him of the special occasion, but also the hardship that he had gone through and the efforts he has(had?) put to achieve his goal.bbs.gter.net3\y4G8Bj/B/Q
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On the second place, the very person who sent the gift to us may be just flashing in our mind. Those who(注意不是一个完整的句子了) may help us so much like our respectful teachers and dear friends and even our dearest parents. Whatever these gifts may be, small or big, worthy of a lot of money or not, it does represent the intentions of the people who sent us them. Just take me for example, when I studied in a high school, I didn't have a strong interest to learn Physics. Ms Li noticed it and I can sense it from the anticipation and kindness in her eyes. However, I still couldn't sum up my strength to catch up with the other students only because I got an unforgotten score 56 in a small test, which is the most shameful score that I had. After failing to try to encourage me in that pair of passionate eyes, one day she sent me a gift-- a common bookmark with a motto on it" You may fail, but NEVER NEVER GIVE UP ". Tiny this bookmark may be, it roused(arouse?) the courage inside me to do my best. Today, I still keep it in my most favorite book when I have free time or I feel frustrated that I would like to take it out, and immediately I can get the magic power from it.留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USA,N[R
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A)oY/Z0ejWFirst of all, basic education to learn these subjects would provide a platform for all the students to develop in all disciplines and thus it may help kids to find out what their interest lies in. From the first cry coming out of the baby's mouth to the mumbles of the first word "Mom", every child are curious about the new things around them and eager to find new things around them. However, some kids especially those born in poor family, doesn't have the same opportunity to study subjects like art, music and drama with(as) the kids who was born with a silver spoon in their mouth. Given the basic education including all these courses open to all students, we may have more "Van go" or "Beethoven' mushroom from the poor family.
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On the second place, it do good to improve average qualities among a nation's population in the long run and contribute to the welfare and harmony to the society. In the past, many of the developing countries are struggling on the border of solving the problem of poverty. This kind of basic education is only the privilege to the children in countries with better conditions. Nowadays, with the living standard greatly improved, it's the high time(后面是不是加ing?) for all the kid to enjoy the marvelous piece of art, the beautiful melody of the classic music and even the grand drama. Kids will get at least some vague impression of what are the beauty and the ugly, and gradually generation after generation there are fewer ignorance and rude manners in nation.留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USA(@)P]
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Ut._-P1q @'Wbbs.gter.netThe professor summarizes that most of primitive tourism is out of political or economic purposes such as conquer and colonization. He also uses the example of Hemingway mentioned in the passage to illustrate that his purpose is the conquest of so-called savages in Africa. And it has a great influence on the offspring for still today most of people have a sport like hunting or fishing in their tour. However, unlike the primitive purpose of traveling, in search of resources, conquering and colonization, or cultural, educational, scientific purposes, nowadays more and more people travel for pleasure, entertainment and adventure. Besides traditional tour, there are other two new forms of tour that people travel: the first one is ethnic tour, which major visit point are those habitat of ethnic group or villages in danger. People can enjoy their local ceremony and traditional singing or dancing, appreciate their ethnic food or clothing. Contrast to what happened in history, people got pleasure form their tour instead of from the political or economic interest. The other is environmental tour. Their destination are places where few people have gone before, and they just want to explore the nature and have a adventurous trip by observing and preserving the natural world like what Ernest Hemingway did in Africa almost one hundred years ago.1K\ u C$cN+A q
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