题目：What do you want most in a friend-someone who is intelligent, or someone who has a sense of humor,or someone who is reliable?which one these charateristics is most important to you?
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h$xc$lh9Y2^"o  The main reason for my propensity for this choice is that a reliable friend offers a sense of security. There is no doubt that a reliable friend will stand by me when I am in trouble and provide mental assist as well as material assist. For instance, when I was slandered by classmates for they insisted that I have stolen their books, by contrast, not only give me a trust, but also she help me eliminate the misunderstanding between classmates and me.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GREb~(y`QO1yrCn
Another reason why I choose the reliance as a friend’s the most important characteristic is that I believe that a reliable friend could not deceive and betray me. A reliable friend could tell me my fault once she found it instead of deceiving me in order to please me. Even though discover my primacy involuntarily, they would keep the secret for me rather than amuse people with telling it everybody surrounding me. In particular, it is not likely to betray me when the friend face the lure of interest whereas other friends who don’t have the characteristic may fail.
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d;N?f3rom  In a nutshell, though a friend may have many characters such as intelligent, sense of humor, the important quality to me is reliance. As I mentioned above, he/she could provide sense of security, teach me some virtues as well as not deceive and betray me.
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第三段 reliance前the去掉，reliance改reliability，两者意思不同。Most前面the去掉。把could改would，他们并不是没有能力欺骗你，and改or, 因为否定句。我不懂你第二句为什么要过去时。把even though那前半句去掉，你这里的私事跟真正的privacy不同。Telling 后的it去掉。In particular, reliable friends are less likely to betray me when they are faced with the lure of interest whereas others may fall for the lure.
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