You need to travel from your home to a place 40 miles (64kms) away. Compare the different kinds of transportation you could use. Tell which method of travel you would choose.
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)kCq'T)`1v&Q$C|留学|签证|TOEFL|GREWhen it comes to travel from home to another place, there are several kinds of transportation we can choose, such as walking, riding a bicycle, taking a bus or taxi, and self-driving. To begin with choosing the most suitable transportation, we must take the distance into account. When considering a 40 miles distination, it will be necessary to think about the time factor.留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USA6Yb#?/z#H        _/o

d&I1gDm;v2{c,ch|留学|签证|TOEFL|GREHaving sufficient time, we could choose going on foot or riding bike to the destination as the fittest vehicle. These two methods of traveling would provide us an excellent opportunity to exercise and relax ourselves. We could walk or ride with relatives and friends on the way, chatting on some interesting topics and deepening your affections. If feel tired, then we could go camping at any time.bbs.gter.net#dah;X%h)`oa
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7s:}8s/s5Z(s"dHowever, nowadays, the pace of our life is accelerating faster than ever before, if we don’t have enough time during our holiday, taking bus or taxi will help us save a lot of time. A 40-mile bus tour will be convenient for us to take, but as a public transportation, the environment on the bus maybe not so good. It may be difficult to find a suitable seat on the crowded bus and the air circulation maybe bad. Another choice is taking a taxi, which is obviously more comfortable and convenient for us, yet it will be more expensive and unworthily to take at the same time. Besides, rare taxi drivers would like to give you a 40-mile lift, especially to the suburb area, because he may hardly bump into any passenger on the way back.   
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X0B`Q        {Wkh|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRETherefore, as for me, the best selection for a 40-mile travel would be drving by myself. I could drive my own car or borrow one from my friends. With a private car, I could set my own schedual, stopping or driving to any speed. I could listen to various kinds of music and turn on the loud trumpet all the way to the destination. I also could set the air conditioner as cool as I like. Driving on my own car is not only convenient but it also ensures me that I don’t have to consider other passangers’ feelings and enjoying myself greatly.6t4|h~9]Q0G
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Based on the analysis above, the vehicle I would use for a 40-mile travel is driving by myself. Admittedly, other options can be selected in various circumstances, I still feel that driving by myself could make me feel happy and convenient better than other ones.1p/R2^)[4\"p

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linking up affections这种表达太不地道了，很中国式英语，个人觉得如果没有把握，还不如用简单的表达方式，宁可简单点，也不要这种不地道的表达。呵呵，个人意见

linking up affections这种表达太不地道了，很中国式英语，个人觉得如果没有把握，还不如用简单的表达方式，宁可简单点，也不要这种不地道的表达。觉得结尾没有收好，怪怪的，没有提炼，呵呵，个人意见

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When it comes to travel from home to another place, there are several kinds of transportation we can choose, such as walking, riding a bicycle, taking a bus or taxi, and self-driving. To begin with choosing the most suitable transportation, we must take the distance into account. When considering a 40 miles distination, it will be necessary to think about the time factor./t1b4E%KWg$P3A
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Having sufficient time, we could choose going on foot or riding bike to the destination as the fittest vehicle. These two methods of traveling would provide us an excellent opportunity to exercise and relax ourselves. We could walk or ride with relatives and friends on the way, chatting on some interesting topics and deepening your affections. If feel tired, then we could go camping at any time.
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;Z9c7?xB-moHowever, nowadays, the pace of our life is accelerating faster than ever before, if we don’t have enough time during our holiday, taking bus or taxi will help us save a lot of time. A 40-mile bus tour will be convenient for us to take, but as a public transportation, the environment on the bus maybe not so good. It may be difficult to find a suitable seat on the crowded bus and the air circulation maybe bad. Another choice is taking a taxi, which is obviously more comfortable and convenient comparing to taking bus(呼应一下), yet it will be more expensive and unworthily to take at the same time. Besides, rare taxi drivers would like to give you a 40-mile lift, especially to the suburb area, because he may hardly bump into any passenger on the way back.    |留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE4Q?:zFLj1F?6i6\Q
  
+p:uUf1^ l2y+LTherefore, as for me, the best selection for a 40-mile travel would be drving by myself. I could drive my own car or borrow one from my friends. With a private car, I could set my own schedual, stopping or driving to any speed. I could listen to various kinds of music and turn on the loud trumpet all the way to the destination. I also could set the air conditioner as cool as I like. Driving on my own car is not only convenient but it also ensures me that I don’t have to consider other passangers’ feelings and enjoying myself greatly.寄托家园uJp+D        f        sV


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C%baBased on the analysis above, the vehicle I would use for a 40-mile travel is driving by myself. Admittedly, other options can be selected in various circumstances, I still feel that driving by myself could make me feel happy and convenient better than other ones.寄托家园7x2Cdm'g*hE%@p9y0F
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和你之前的文章比简直是判若两人之作.进步之神速另我惊叹不已!不愧是学两种语言的,悟性之高是我无法比拟的. 留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USA:e9Qn;bSAJ*G7b
整个文章思路清晰,用词恰当,读起来朗朗上口,少有不妥之处. 2O2x'LV:?K%Z*k
标蓝之处为"我认为的"不太妥当的地方,主要集中在虚拟语气和固定搭配运用上,还把握的不太好.不过都是骨头里挑刺了
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E~[[寄托家园Anyway, u really did a good job and made a big progress. I believe u can get a high score in the exam of IBT essay part.8k,`Ws:?A
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[ 本帖最后由 yq_112397 于 2007-5-18 10:22 编辑 ]

呵呵，谢谢你呀~~~留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USA}y9Q&U%B-s

8YilrG留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USA我参照了一篇别的文章之后修改了自己的版本，所以这一篇也不能完全算作自己的。
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tR#i.neM1y hT|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE我看了夜婴的4.21JJ，同样没有充分复习的情况下，她都能分别写到400+ 和466字，太难得了，这是很少有的爆发力和手感吧，呵呵envying 寄托家园Qe4^Ohi
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