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While retrospecting my life till now, the most important decision I have been made is choosing Applied Chemistry as my specialty when entering university. Ever since I was a kid, I had a dream of being a famous scientist like Einstein, though it seems rather challengible,my parents told me that if there is a will, there is a way. Step by step, I gradually find the profound and entertainment of Chemistry which plays a significant role in the long human history in learning it during these years. Finally I made the most important decision in my life, at that moment, I was so excited that I will spend my whole life studying it as I become close to my dream inch by inch.

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Since the announcement of building a new restaurant in my neighborhood(since后面加完整的分句，比方说since the project of a new restaurant's construction has been anounced), a majority of my neighbours showed(为什么用过去时？这是一个假设的问题，用现在时也可以，当然过去时也行，但是意味着下面的讨论也必须用统一的时态，过去时比较麻烦） their concern for the project and expressed their views of buiding the restaurant. It is clear that the diversified views have converged to two: some people welcome the restaurant while others do not. In my opinion, we should agree with the latter without hesitation for the following reasons.（without hesitation 比较绝对，不妨用大概的推测语气来写，这样下面更可加一段让步以凑字数）p2dz n{wI'Z
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恩，谢谢你的批改,,,,用词方面我会注意的.汗,,,,,last but not least 当年在argument里用了N次了~~~|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE:H5X#Ih(PZ({0F!w
至于转折的问题,,我当时是在准备AW时听说的,,,,说一开始最好表达自己的观点,让别人快点知道你的立场,然后在最后稍微让步显得有辩证思维,,,,当然,你那样说也有道理

最后一句  we never weicome it! 小森林的情感发泄出来了，哈哈

开头段太厉害了，绝对让人眼睛一亮