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发表于 2007-7-15 15:16 资料短消息

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In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay寄托家园&^-}
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With the development of modern science and technology, people now are living longer than ancient people. In my opinion, besides the developed medical facilities and knowledge, there are other factors which also make contribution to the longevity, such as the peaceful and rich society, people’s own awareness of health and so forth.

First of all, the advanced medical level today could not only cure many diseases and illness but also will predict the potential ones which are in the latency, then people will get avoided of being ill. Years ago, doctors only knew about the most basic diseases and cures. Now we have antibiotics and other medicines to help cure infections, even some people have get badly illed, skillful surgrons will make exact operations on them and finally cure them.

Furthermore, now we are living a world whose theme is peace and developing, we have been far away from the times which is filled with world war, exile and depression, thus many sorts of diseases are got controlled and not spread around the world any more. What’s more, many international nursing and medical organizations also existed to give hand to those people in less-developed country, who need medical cae.

Last but not the least, modern people begin to aware more about their own health and realize the importance of excercises to their health. Every morning you could see people doing sports outside. Regular sports build up a strong body. Sports like hiking, jogging, and swimming can all benifit our health. Naturally, people with stronger body could resist more diseases, and therefore they can live longer.

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Well, the favorite sport of my country is Pingpong, which is popuar with the whole nation from old ages to children. We feel proud of it because our Pingpong athletes have won numerous champions, medals and great honors from all kinds of international races during the decades.And we also love playing it, since Pingpong is much smaller than other balls such as basketball, we could exercise on both agility and strength when playing it. I like to play Pingpong very much and everytime I play it I feel I gain much pleasure as well.jWV9ep:GL

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发表于 2007-7-16 10:30 资料个人空间短消息

In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay
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With the development of modern science and technology, people now are living longer than ancient people. In my opinion, besides the developed medical facilities and knowledge, there are other factors which also make contribution to the longevity, such as the peaceful and rich society, people’s own awareness of health and so forth.（开始段引出下文的结构，很好啊）|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE6[ev9R
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First of all, the advanced medical level today could not only cure many diseases and illness but also will predict the potential ones which are in the latency, (+and更连贯些) then people will get avoided of being ill. Years ago, doctors only knew about the most basic diseases and cures. Now we have antibiotics and other medicines to help cure infections, even some people have get(got) badly illed(sick), skillful surgrons(surgeons) will make exact operations on them and finally cure them.

Furthermore, now we are living （in）a world whose theme is peace and developing, we have been far away from the times which is filled with world war, exile and depression, thus many sorts of diseases are got controlled and not spread around the world any more. What’s more, many international nursing and medical organizations also existed to give hand to those people in less-developed country, who need medical cae(care).（感觉这段后面展开的理由和peace有点距离）

Last but not the least, modern people begin to aware more about their own health and realize the importance of excercises(exercises) to their health. Every morning you could see people doing sports outside. Regular sports build up a strong body. Sports like hiking, jogging, and swimming can all benifit(benefit) our health. Naturally, people with stronger body could resist more diseases, and therefore they can live longer.

一直觉得你文章写得又快又好，很是羡慕~这篇我看了45分钟，想找错啊！语言不错，句子衔接得很好，就是有些笔误，还有字数少了点。

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Well, the favorite sport of my country is Pingpong, which is popuar(popular) with the whole nation from old ages to children. We feel proud of it because our Pingpong athletes have won numerous champions, medals and great honors from all kinds of international races during the decades.And we also love playing it, since Pingpong is much smaller than other balls such as basketball, we could exercise on both agility and strength when playing it. I like to play Pingpong very much and every(+空格)time I play it I feel I gain much pleasure as well.
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