Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.U5l:vR6K)L'HA+E1A
Nowadays, it is not uncommon to hear such depute whether parents are the best teacher. It is commonly accepted that parents are the best teacher for their children. However, the objectors hold that parents breed the children just by instinct. Actually, although parents in a measure will become quite illogical as they bring up their offspring. The truth of it is self-evident. In my opinion, no one can deny that parents are not only the first teacher but the best teacher of their children. There are several reasons as follow.q3Kb+vC5j0hht
    Firstly, how much knowledge parents have offered in the process of our growing. For instance, frequently, most of commence senses of daily life which the children really gain are taught by their parents. Furthermore, many Parents have not only just taught their child simple general knowledge but taught them the professional knowledge. Especially, until the first industrial revolution, a majority of traditional crafts are hold on by father taught their children. Therefore, parents are the best teacher who is most self-giving rather than others.
uX1s]"v8oZ    Secondly, how much patient parents have offered in the process of our growing. As we are a baby, parents pay more patience to teach us how to stand up from our first tumble, how to speak our first letter and how to button our first fastener. The growth of us is in company with our parents. Whatever we have obtained from parents, we have always regarded the impartment is in nature of things. But our parents, silently, offered their all painstaking and knowledge which is not acquired to reward to breed us. In conclusion, None of our successes will be likely to happen if without patient education from our parents.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRED'V4AR@6^:x.i$A3u
    Last but not least, how much experience parents have offered in the process of our growing. The experiences of parents which will be possible to help us to be success give us more useful and effective advices and suggestions to our lives, On the one hand, the successful experiences of parents are still the best examples which direct our to progress and a great asset to us in both future work and life. On the other hand, the failed experiences of parents can give us a lesson to warn when once encountered to the similar condition happen. Parents provide their cherish experience to assist us come up more perfectly and strongly. As a result, we can learn that parents are the greatest teacher in the world.留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USAgT7q7i9P^${5t.D&I
    All in all, although parents are not as professional as experts in the special fields, they do their best to cultivate us – teach us a great many of knowledge, give us more beneficial advices and take care of our lives. Therefore, I firmly maintain that parents are the best teacher who is most self-giving, most patient and greatest in the world.bbs.gter.netrKpS$W%NJm
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[ 本帖最后由 xiaosi326 于 2007-7-31 17:33 编辑 ]

Have you read your writing?
,s w$](z%QO|留学|签证|TOEFL|GREWrite a completed sentence in formal writing.
&Z8t6i%h@(m^ ~5k寄托家园Just pick some from your composition:d(D:L6?y
"Actually, although parents in a measure will become quite illogical as they bring up their offspring."
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Bqqawhere is the main clause?
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I don't know what you are talking about.
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)~s@}F.NO|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRESuggest rewrite.

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i am sorry. i can't catch your meaning would you mind  explainting detailedly?
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(z;LQ[&k,Qn|留学|签证|TOEFL|GREi make a mistake. "Actually, although some parents will become quite illogical as they bring up their offspring"留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USAygB5p+m/J
3."Firstly, how much knowledge parents have offered in the process of our growing."在我们成长的过程中，父母给予了我们很多的知识。i use this sentence just because i want to the paragraph make up of a whole.bbs.gter.net4J-w(Upcxe)e#@0yZ&W
this sentence is a copy another sentence which i have ever saw in a  model essay.maybe ,i have something wrong with its syntax. would you mind  ccorrect it.
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i want to rewrit, but i can not catch the way. i look forward to your reply . 寄托家园M,eq\:?'F(o6\
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H;Zc+X(X4He|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE[ 本帖最后由 xiaosi326 于 2007-7-31 17:34 编辑 ]

在我们成长的过程中，父母给予了我们很多的知识。
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Lets take your sentence as an example: "Firstly, how much knowledge parents have offered in the process of our growing."
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"How" can also refer to an attributive subclause, but you sentence is a simple one.
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You may want to say "Our parents offer us a lot of knowledge during our growth." But the structure in your writing confuses readers.

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[ 本帖最后由 kevinliu6883 于 2007-8-1 02:42 编辑 ]

thank you so much ,i mistake the meaning of "how much",thanks .  Would you mind i ask a question? what is the main reason produce you think that the composition is not famal writing? Is it  in any way because i use too much subclause in one sentance? would you mind tell me the writing's merits and demerits? i want to improve my demerits and keep back my merits. i do not know how to express my appreciation. thank you

看来偶要多多努力了

Composition is somewhat betwenn formal and informal writing. When it is for others, it is formal, especially when you publish a science paper. You try to communicate, thus clarity is the first important requirement. When you take note just for yourself or you are doing practice by yourself, that would be an informal writing.
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In formal writing, write clearly so your reader won't misunderstand.寄托家园$A d_h:j$?3Nx

$W{v        RYd^|留学|签证|TOEFL|GREIn conversation, some sentences missing subject or object may be acceptable. You have tones, facial expression and guestures to make up what you say. While in formal writing, your reader was not able to see your guesture or emotion. You have to deliver your meaning completely by the words you put on paper or screen. In this case, you have time to revise to make sure others understand. Here grammar is a guide. Follow the conventions.
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Again, practice makes perfect. Write every day. Read your writing three times after you finished it. Ask your friends to proofread your composition.
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[ 本帖最后由 kevinliu6883 于 2007-8-2 05:04 编辑 ]

thanks , have get it, i am so glad you took time and trouble to modify it. thank you so much

Nowadays, it is not uncommon to hear such dispute whether parents are the best teacher. It is commonly accepted that parents are the best teacher for their children. However, the objectors hold that it is just instinct behavior when parents bring up their children. Actually, although some parents will become quite illogical as they foster their offspring, the truth is self-evident. In my opinion, no one can deny that parents are not only the first teacher but the best teacher of their children. There are several reasons as follow.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE-`'L9ZJ:?2IT(Q!Q!O
     First of all, how much knowledge do parents teach us in the process of our growing up? For instance, in most of case, children learn their common sense from their parents. Furthermore, many Parents teach their children general knowledge as well as professional knowledge. As we know, before the first industrial revolution, the skill of making traditional crafts was introduced by one generation to the other. Therefore, parents are the best teacher who is more self-giving rather than others.
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spP寄托家园    Secondly, how much patient do parent offer in the process of our growing? we were born with nothing, it is our parents  who pay much patience to teach us how to stand up from our first tumble, to speak our first letter and  button our first fastener. The growth of us is with the company of our parents. Whatever we obtain from parents, we always regard the impartment is nature, but our parents who breeding us without requiring reward, silently offer their all painstaking and knowledge. In conclusion, our successes will not be likely to happen if without patient education from our parents.
*_*_+M6whM5cbbs.gter.net    Last but not least, how much experience do parents offer in the process of our growing. The experience which is learnt from parents is possible to help us to be successful. Parents always give us more useful and effective advices and suggestions to our lives. On one hand, the successful experiences of parents are the best examples, directing us to make progress in both future work and life. On the other hand, the failed experiences of parents can give us a lesson when we encounter the similar situation. Parents provide their cherish experience to assist us to make progress more perfectly and strongly. As a result, we can learn that parents are the greatest teacher in the world.留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USA_/SQ;MaZ
    All in all, although parents are not as professional as experts in the special fields, they do their best to cultivate us, teaching us a great much of knowledge, giving us more beneficial advices and taking care of our lives. Therefore, I

i rewrite it, would you mind give me another suggestion? thank you so much@r
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[ 本帖最后由 xiaosi326 于 2007-8-2 11:38 编辑 ]