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发表于 2007-10-17 21:51 资料个人空间短消息

响应豆豆号召,综合写作投票(附题下载,像真题)

from XDF某老师推荐的一套综合写作练习%_$E{.W](D RnH
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今天刚写的，就当试验品吧，看看豆豆提出的这个投票搞得怎样，hoho
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In the lecture, the professor makes several points about employees’ work policy. The professor claims that there are many disadvantages to hire employees who work a four-day workweek and ask for 80 percent of their normal pay. This contradicts the point demonstrated in the reading that the policy does good to the country, company and workers.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE8A.G;c
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The first point that the professor challenged the reading is that the policy will harm company’s profits because more workers are required, so that more training, health assurance, offices and computers are in need, which lead to a lot more additional costs. One the contrary, the reading passage contends that company will save money on those overworked and error-phone workers as a result of getting more profits.寄托家园7i$J'};Qkdf

The second point that the professor used to cast doubt on the reading is that no additional jobs will come out because company will weigh much more expectation on their workers and thus some employees can do five-day work in four days. This is very different from the reading, which states that unemployment rates will decrease because more positions will be in demand.bbs.gter.net7MV,Ks9T(Sa/Q2F)Ks
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Finally, the author of the passage points out that employees will be willing to have more time with their family since they have one more holiday every week, while the lecture states that it will do harm their quality of life since they will have less chances of advancing career and will be not so welcome as five-day employees.寄托家园&y?"MM}!dJ
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To sum up, the points asserted by the professor are totally different from what the reading notes.
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发表于 2007-10-17 22:13 资料短消息

我来投第一票哈～留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USA Mo!jp*n#F']

我觉得写的不错。
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但是，建议在陈述的时候把观点和例子分成两句话来写。不然容易让raters觉得你少了信息，会扣分的哦～

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。。。感激啊。。。寄托家园A&R/h8V;_2AYI
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发表于 2007-10-17 23:10 资料短消息

这不是现实作文功底的地方。。。要以简洁准确为准。。。XDF的老师经常瞎扯

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发表于 2007-10-18 02:07 资料个人空间短消息

写长句子的确很费脑子呢　估计考场一紧张　脑子转不过弯来　全短句子的

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我也来投一票，不过我觉得还是有些欠妥。留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USA:y,J4Pnb
我自己都不知道为什么。。。。

先要经过苦训的试练。
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发表于 2007-10-18 12:15 资料短消息

我也写了一篇
献丑了，我觉得综合也不是很好写，因为不知道怎么概括，又怕概括的太简单了，还有就是用自己的意思改写而不是听到的句子要不要紧啊，因为听力记不下来，总是忘。留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USA})^0?v7roI/r
这个语速和真题一样吗，这个语速还能胜任
ps：这个活动是不是指同主题写作？还是就是投票？
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In this lecture, the professor made several points about the effects of the policy of shortened work hours. The professor argued that such a mandatory policy cannot bring positive effects on employees and society, which is totally different from the statement in the reading passage. The professor raised three reasons to chanllenge the views of reading passage.

In the first place, the professor claimed that shortened workweek would not increase the company profits as the reading passge expected. Since hiring more worker means providing more training, medical health benefits, office space and computers, this additional costs will indeed cut the profits. This point is entirely different from the reading passage which claimed that shortened workweek help employees redunce the errors in the work and as a result increas company profits.
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Secondly, the professor argued that such a policy may not reduce unemployment rate. Because the employers has other options in face of the policy. The employers may raise their expectation or force the employees to work over time to guarantee the work efficiency and work load. In that case, there are no more jobs availble and as a result the unemployment rate cannot be improved.

Finally, the professor pointed out that shorten work week could not improve the quality of worker's lives. It is entirely possible that less work hours make employees decrease their work abilities and meawhile reduce the chance of advanced careers. As a result the works who work less time per week may become the first persons losing jobs in economic depression. If there is no finacial security, how can these employees to improve the quality of their lives?

In conclude, the professor strongly diagreed with the viewpoints of the reading passage and raised three reasons to contradict them.
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发表于 2007-10-18 16:35 资料短消息

楼上写这么多？寄托家园0z0CR"GH)r1@Eo'}R

貌似独立作文了

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发表于 2007-10-18 19:06 资料短消息

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就是投票就好了^_^呵呵:-)

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发表于 2007-10-21 09:20 资料短消息

我顶！顶！

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Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. We ask ourselves, Who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? We were born to make manifest the glory of God that is within us. It's not just in some of us; it's in everyone. And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same.

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