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What are some of the experience that have shaped your outlook and the way you live now?bbs.gter.net#CHf&dt.T
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I can say that the process of people's growing up is so complex and it accompanies with so many special experiences which let them become mature. Of course, these experiences not only contain good and active ones but also include bad and negative ones. I encountered some things significant to me because they deeply influence my outlooks to life and living ways. Thus, I want to list three of them as follow.bbs.gter.net%s;j }1N`*@ e
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First of all, one thing which affects my attitude to life is my experience of college entrance examination. When students get into high school they only need three years' study before they attend this test and get better sores and then were enrolled by diverse departments of colleges. However, I did not obtain a reasonable score, so I must study one more year. Through that year's striving, I made great progress and enlisted by my dream school. From that time on, I frequently told myself that diligence was important to a person’s achievements and I needed to work hard for my aims in future.
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Secondly, another thing which had affected me dramatically happened at the period of my high school, too. I caught a bad disease at that time after my college entrance examination was failure. Maybe I was too anxious to keep peaceful emotion and as we know bad psychological condition was so hard to one person's health. Then I encountered a surgery and lay on bed for 1 month in hospital. I had feeling that I was so near to death when the physician performed my surgery though my low body is null. From this thing I found life is so precious to us and we all need to treasure them because we had so many can do and so many need to do. I could not have this thinking if I was not undergoing this thing.留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USAo fVW2wl#J&_3^

s$H,l)P-y9~!sbbs.gter.netThe last but no the least, another thing I want to mention is related to my study career and it is about my graduate school life. Through about 2 years study and work in my major, I find keeping on one thing and try my best on doing it is so important to fulfill it perfectly. There are many examples around me, many students have published many papers before they graduated, and other people hunter good jobs when depart from colleges. Almost every one of them tells me persistence in doing a thing is the basis of success if I have ever asked them. Thus, I attain another outlook about life and that is perseverance.R+\m j*~-N6a

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兄弟们,批阿,只有经历痛苦才能成功是吗????
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I can say that the process of people's growing up is so complex and it accompanies with so many special experiences which let them become mature. Of course, these experiences not only contain good and active ones but also include bad and negative ones. I encountered some things significant to me because they deeply influence my outlooks to life and living ways. Thus, I want to list three of them as follow.:C-c        dTy0M2Ir/n"Y
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First of all, one thing which affects my attitude to life is my experience of college entrance examination. When students get into high school they only need three years' study before they attend this test and get better sores and then were (???) enrolled by diverse departments of colleges. However, I did not obtain a reasonable score, so I must study one more year. Through that year's striving, I made great progress and enlisted by my dream school. From that time on, I frequently told myself that diligence was important to a person’s achievements and I needed to work hard for my aims in future.
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Secondly, another thing which had affected me dramatically happened at the period of my high school, too. I caught a bad disease at that time after my college entrance examination was failure. Maybe I was too anxious to keep peaceful emotion and as we know bad psychological condition was so hard (harmful) to one person's health. Then I encountered a surgery and lay on bed for 1 month in hospital. I had (a) feeling that I was so near to death when the physician performed my surgery though my low body is null. From this thing I found life is so precious to us and we all need to treasure them because we had so many can do and so many need to do. I could not have this thinking if I was not undergoing this thing.
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The last but no the least, another thing I want to mention is related to my study career and it is about my graduate school life. Through about 2 years study and work in my major, I find keeping on one thing and try my best on doing it is so important to fulfill it perfectly. There are many examples around me, many students have published many papers before they graduated, and other people hunter good jobs when depart from colleges. Almost every one of them tells me persistence in doing a thing is the basis of success if I have ever asked them. Thus, I attain another outlook about life and that is perseverance.
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In conclusion, I have harvested 3 vital outlooks or life rules through my experience and there are industrious, nourish lives and persevere in works respectively. And they are so significant to me and (that) they have played essential roles in my success of working at corporation now.A9M8R/Qs9V2m |-icp

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I can say that (delete这样写开头太突然)the process of people's growing up is so complex and it accompanies with so many special experiences which let them become mature. Of course, these experiences not only contain good and active ones but also include bad and negative ones. I encountered some things significant to me because they deeply influence my outlooks to life and living ways. Thus, I want to list three of them as follow.留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USA'wx8o1V9_G
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First of all, one thing which affects my attitude to life is my experience of college entrance examination. When students get into high school they only need three years' study before they attend this test and get better sores and then were enrolled by diverse departments of colleges. However, I did not obtain a reasonable score, so I must study one more year. Through that year's striving, I made great progress and enlisted by my dream school. From that time on, I frequently told myself that diligence was important to a person’s achievements and I needed to work hard for my aims(觉得用dreams比较好一些) in future.&Cy#R]Lr/k
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Secondly, another thing which had affected me dramatically happened at the period of my high school, too. I caught a bad disease at that time after my college entrance examination was failure(failed). Maybe I was too anxious to keep peaceful emotion and as we know bad psychological condition was so hard(dreadful)to one person's health. 这部分是怎么生病的,没太看懂Then I encountered a surgery and lay on bed for 1 建议不用这种数字month in hospital. I had feeling(had a feeling or felt) that I was so near to death when the physician performed my surgery though my low body is null不太懂. From this thing I found life is so precious to us and we all need to treasure them because we had so many觉得这里应该加一些things之类的词 can do and so many need to do. I could not have this thinking if I waswere,虚拟语气里只能用were)not undergoing this thing.$W(n)R@;t[O0g)LyW3i*B
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The last but no the least,和后面的语句不协调,删掉 another thing I want to mention is related to my study career and it is about my graduate school life. Through about 2 two years study and work in my major, I find that keeping on one thing and try my best on doing it is so important to fulfill it perfectly. There are many examples around me, many students have published many papers before they graduated, and other people hunter good jobs when depart from colleges. Almost every one of them tells me persistence in doing a thing is the basis of success if I have ever asked them.(delete) Thus, I attain another outlook about life : perseverance.
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HOes(|zd&s寄托家园In conclusion, I have harvested 3 three vital outlooks or life rules through my experience : industrious, nourish lives and persevere in works respectively. And they are so significant to me and they(delete) have played essential roles in my success of working at corporation now.
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怎么办,我写了两篇,就没感觉了,现在看见电脑就没词。已经掉队两篇了,就每天看看你们写的,好郁闷!!!
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坚持就是胜利,加油吧。我挑的题目都偏难不好写,目的就是训练大家的思维能力,以后慢慢就会写了
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(I can say that the process of people's growing up is so complex and it accompanies with so many special experiences which let them become mate.) The process of human's maturity is complex and influenced by the experiences accompanying with it. Of course, these experiences not only contain good and active ones but also include bad and negative ones Not all the experience are good, active ones, some are even bad and negative. I have
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Secondly, another thing which had affected me dramatically happened at the period of my high school, too. I caught a bad disease at that time after my college entrance examination was failure. Maybe I was too anxious to keep peaceful emotion and as we know bad psychological condition was so hard to one person's health. Then I encountered a surgery and lay on bed for 1 month in hospital. I had feeling that I was so near to death when the physician performed my surgery though my low body is null. From this thing I found life is so precious to us and we all need to treasure them because we had so many can do and so many need to do. I could not have this thinking if I was not undergoing this thing.O;rHs6C$UD9o
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