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Recently, I have been very concerned about international news, and then I get information that the price of crude oil is higher than people can accept. Crude oil is an important kind of fossil fuels and it plays important roles in the process of the development of industrialization and urbanization. Thus many scientists from different countries consider solving this problem through using other renewable resource of energy such as sun, wind or water. Whether these types of energy can substitute for fossil fuels soon? In my point of view it is so hard recently to replace fossil fuels with renewable energy. There are a couple of reasons as follow.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE^8T!j^0Q1[
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To begin with, though many specialists have made great efforts to improve technologies of transferring sun, wind and water to energy that we can utilize in our daily life, like electricity, there are so many difficulties to overcome. One thing is that, sun and wind energy are scattered in different place and produced at different time, it is hard for us to collect them. When it comes to sun, sunlight only can be available in day but night, so the energy we got is interrupted at night. At the same time, wind resource can not be found in all places in the world, we can just accumulate huge energy of wind in part of countries and even merely partial places in a country.  Water has the same problems as sun and wind have. It can only be acceptable in a period of time during a year and just abundant in some places. So these kinds of energy are hardly to replace fossil fuels.寄托家园
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I$@QO'`KPFinally, people can not afford the high charge of renewable energy now. Take cars which use renewable energy for examples, the cost of these cars is not tolerable to common workers. There scarcely have been civilians in a country can afford the cost on this kind of cars. Many investigations indicated that people prefer to drive renewable energy cars when the price of gas increase to the level that they can not sustain, however they will run gas cars again when is price of oil is as low as they can pay. As we know, the price of oil is rather lower than renewable energy, so a large number of people choose cars which burn oil as their transportation tools nowadays and subsequent many years.4_:V;zMzY*j

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自己先顶一下，大家狠狠地拍啊。

其实我看了你的文章，发现你进步也很大的，能应用一下高级句型和用法。我这点就不行了，想起什么就一直写，不太能想到变。
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A number of people maintain that renewable resources of energy will soon replace the old resource of fossil fuels. While the first reaction of some people may be to disagree with this statement, there are compelling reasons to explore this issue in great depth. Personally, I agree with this statement for three important reasons

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C?(cbFuThe first reason for my agreement is that those renewable resources are easy to find. We don’t have to worry about the storage of these elements which exist in this planet for thousands of years. Renewable energy like sunlight, for example, can easily be acquired as if the weather is not cloudy. The next reason is cheap. We don’t have to pay any money to buy renewable resources. As long as we can make the efficient equipments to transform these elements to power, there will be no cost problem. For example, in Holland, it has hundreds of windmills in their country. To them, wind power is not only an element but a necessary power. The final reason in support of my position is environmental protection. When the resource, such as coal, is used to produce energy, it will definitely discharge lethal air pollutant. Those dangerous chemical compositions, such as carbon dioxide and sulphur dioxide, are the main reasons why the rain is more acid than before. All of these causes have influenced my opinion on this issue
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Recently, I have been very concerned about international news, and then I get information that the price of crude oil is higher than people can accept. Crude oil is an important kind of fossil fuels and it plays important roles in the process of the development of industrialization and urbanization. Thus many scientists from different countries consider solving this problem through using other renewable resource of energy such as sun, wind or water. Whether these types of energy can substitute for fossil fuels soon? In my point of view it is so hard recently to replace fossil fuels with renewable energy. There are a couple of reasons as follow. DM6P8mak
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Based on the proofs which I stated above, it won't be soon to replace fossil fuels with renewable energy. We only can pay much more attention to technological progresses if we want to see this day's coming as soon as possible
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    Crude oil, the important fossil fuels to the world, plays important roles in the process of industrialization and urbanization. Many scientists from many different countries devote into solving this problem by replacing with other renewable resource of energy such as sun, wind or water. Anyway, it is still controversial whether these types of energy can be the substitution of fossil fuels as soon as possible.bbs.gter.netq~0[1~7h&^&M
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      Even if we transfer these kinds of energy to the stable and confined form of energy without any difficulties, it is so challengeable to gather(上段不是说了收集能源的观点了么) and save these energy（这跟你的Even if 的让步从句中叙述有重复，你想想要表达什么新的观点）. According to a recent report published on the magazine "Science", renewable energy kept in some facilities is difficult to perform. There will be much waste of these energy, and the cost of using these facilities is so high. There are no countries can better manipulating these facilities for a very long following time because these challenges.(这段的表达较为混乱，而且用了不少there be 举行，发现LZ很喜欢用，但是这个句型是许多人经常用错的。)m,P)u5Vq'ic
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      Finally, people can not afford the high charge of renewable energy now. Take cars which use renewable energy for examples, the cost of these cars is not tolerable（这个词用在这里显然不够好，应该说是搭配主语和在情景上不合适，acceptable or affordable也许好点吧） to common workers. （又是there be 句型，小心谨慎哦！）There scarcely have been civilians（citizens会不会好点呢） in a country can afford（建议用新的词代替，避免单一） the cost on this kind of cars. Many investigations indicated that people prefer to drive renewable energy cars when the price of gas increase to the level that they can not sustain, （当石油气的价格上升到人们不能承受的水平，人们驾车时还是会愿意选择循环利用能源。似乎跟上下文的意思没有很好地联系好！）however they will run gas cars again when is price of oil is as low as they can pay. As we know, the price of oil is rather lower than renewable energy, so a large number of people choose cars which burn oil as their transportation tools in the future.（这段的意思表达还是挺混乱，尤其是在However之后，其实你知道你表达的意思没错，但是读的人却读不懂，那是最痛苦的，也是问题的根源）留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USAC
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Based on the proofs（ points会好点） which I stated above, it won't be soon to replace fossil fuels with renewable energy. We only can pay much more attention to technological progresses if we want to see this day's coming as soon as possible.(最后建议延伸一下，说说未来新能源取代就能源的趋势是不可逆和即将到来，但这还是需要一定的过程和时间，这样点题和结尾我觉得会好点。)
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最后，提点建议，楼主写前还是要列好提纲，然后把层次思维理清楚再写，别过于注重长短句，什么复杂的文章撰写，还是注重分析和思考的能力，这样会让你写出与众不同，而且能打动ETS老头们的文章，那高分就有望了。嘿嘿~
fx!s*Re1^*~| H花了挺多时间改这作文，感觉自己也学到了新的东西。谢谢LZ，我学艺不精，但却敢班门弄斧，望包涵。有空来拍我。

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