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发表于 2010-8-8 18:06:59 |只看该作者

改好哩~~

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发表于 2010-8-8 21:33:53 |只看该作者

fanfan 9.11考试啊？这个日子不错。。。。。

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发表于 2010-8-11 10:29:24 |只看该作者

8.10作业

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发表于 2010-8-11 11:36:04 |只看该作者

真的很好

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发表于 2010-8-14 10:58:22 |只看该作者

交作业啦

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发表于 2010-8-15 15:05:02 |只看该作者

我不会传附件  就直接贴到这里了

09.08.07NA    Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children’s future for them.

Currently, there is a general debate on the issue that whether parents should determine children’s future for them. As far as I am concerned, at the different ages of the children， parents are supposed to make different choices when facing this problem.感觉这个problem指代不太明显是什么problem？
Firstly, when the children are babies or at a very young age, parents must make every choice for them no matter the thing is important or not. In this stage, the whole world is completely new to the babies and they have to learn every thing from the start.这句话很好的~ For example, parents should wake up them 建议改成children at 8:00 in the morning and feed them with dinner at 12:00 in order to keep a good healthy. The reading materials and TV programs are also determined by parents, which  which指代不了前面的一句话建议改成 this can be is beneficial for the babies to get a better understanding of the strange world.
Then they 同上 come to the age of schooling 这个词可以么我不太清楚 , it is the parents’ task to introduce the more interesting world to the children and develop their passion to the novel things, but at the same time they should decide what they like most by themselves. For example, the children should follow their own interests to decide whether majoring in arts or mathematics. 好！What parents should do is to tell them the advantages and disadvantages of the decision, which还是指代不了一句话  will help the child makes a better choice.
After the children go to the universities, they are already adults and parents are better not to make any choices for them. In my opinion, parents should be the best friends with their children not the choice makers 哈哈  这个词好any more. As adults, children have the responsibility to take care themselves and should be able to make choices by themselves. For example, the issues like what kind of job they should take or where to live are decided by the children. Is it possible to ask parents who you should fall in love with?狠~！Of course not.
From what has been discussed above, we could safely draw the conclusion that whether parents should make choices for their children or not depends on what kinds of issues and at what period of time.

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发表于 2010-8-15 15:06:51 |只看该作者

整个文章很顺的就是有的小语法点有问题我在下面都是用红色标出来了不知道为什么传上来又变成黑色了不好意思继续加油哈~

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发表于 2010-8-15 17:02:07 |只看该作者

整个文章很顺的就是有的小语法点有问题我在下面都是用红色标出来了不知道为什么传上来又变成黑色了不好意思继续加油哈~
alex0795 发表于 2010-8-15 15:06

谢谢啦~~~ 点评的很好~

另外上传附件在高级回复里面有的

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