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发表于 2010-8-5 16:24:01 |显示全部楼层
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children (ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, science, history and language.

With the development of modern society, the requirement of education will become more and more huge. At this time, teenage education plays a more essential role in our daily life, and this is where the controversy arises. Some assert that it is great benefit for the children who are five to ten study various subjects, like art and music in addition to math, science, history and language. Meanwhile, those who are strongly opposed to it cite that it is not necessary for these children to study so many things. From my own perspective, the former one is more favorable.

The first reason I want to put forward is that learning art and music could provide the younger school children a healthy approach to relax themselves and learn something that other subjects can not offer them. Nowadays, so many children consider TV and computer as a way to relax themselves. But there are a lot of criminal and violent scenes are floored with TV and internet, children may imitate the actions and put them into use, which is not healthy for them. What is more, listening to the music they can learn something about rhythm, which can teach them balance complicated situation. Drawing pictures could bring them into a colorful world, which could make them feel fresh and have a greater efficiency. So the process of learning art and music can ensure the children growing up healthy, that is what all the parents desire most.

The second reason to prove the significance of studying art and music is that the more classes the children take, the more friends they will have. When they take the art or music courses, they may have classmates from different background, they can learn how to get along with them and then improve their social skills. Further more, if they study the march music for instance, they could acquire the team work spirit, how to cooperate with others and tolerate and make compromises. The friends like a mirror reflect their disadvantages and help them learn more, since when they are alone, they may not know why they are wrong and what they do not know. Then, all these things will help the children improve themselves.

However, although the merits for taking the art and music classes enjoy results in are considerable, we cannot ignore the fact that with time these children spend on studying, they will have less time to amuse and face heavier pressure. In my opinion, a pure childhood should not include so much pressure compared with adulthood, especially for the younger school children,their childhood should be full of games or other things like this. If they enjoy a good daily times now, they can form a wonderful memory after they grow up.

In conclusion, I think that although with more leisure time for the children not taking the art and music classes has certain advantages, more impacts exerted by the forward pace of the requirement of a good habit and personal promotion. By studying art and music, the children will enjoy a good life.
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发表于 2010-8-6 20:16:03 |显示全部楼层
8.5-comment by matlab

add oil la XD
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it will make sense in the end.

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发表于 2010-8-7 11:24:53 |显示全部楼层
文章已改好,一起加油~
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发表于 2010-8-7 17:12:46 |显示全部楼层
8月7日作业,不拍不成材~为啥我写的总是那么慢~~!
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发表于 2010-8-8 00:21:37 |显示全部楼层
悲催死了,还不够格传附件,只能QQ邮箱给你吧。
多担待哦~
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发表于 2010-8-9 14:50:18 |显示全部楼层
With the development of modern society, the competition we will confront will become more and more intense. At this time, studying in universities plays a more essential role in our daily life, and this is where the controversy arises. Some assert that it is a great benefit for students to take part-time jobs. Meanwhile, those who are strongly opposed to it cite that it is not necessary for them to take part-time jobs. As my own perpective, the former one is more favorable. assert,cite用的不错,favorable本来就有比较的意思,不用比较级)

The first reason I want to put forward is that in the process of taking part-time jobs, the college students can accumulate work experience, which will help them when they graduate and hunt for jobswith their future job-hunting after graduation. Citing myself for example, I have tried various part-time jobs such as being a library assistant, a salesman, or a city volunteer and so on since entered the university. When I was a library assistant, I learnt the patient attitude. As a salesman, I acquired the skill of how to communicate with others and recognized the importance of keeping optimistic no matter face with how huge difficulties(no matter how huge dificulties i am facing). And then, as a city volunteer, I could put my English fully into use and enjoy the sense of achievement brought by the smiles on others’ faces(others’ smile, 微笑也只能在脸上吧,简练些). I feel that all these experience will have positive effect on me
after I graduate.


The second reason to prove the significance of taking part-time jobs when we are university students is that we could improve the social skills. Since meeting with(删) different people come from distinct(个人觉得diverse好些) background, we can learn how to get along with each other and enrich the(our) communicating techniques(skills). If we undertake a team project, we are able to cultivate the team work spirit, cooperating with and tolerating others, and
at the same time making compromises. The more frequent
ly we communicate with others, the more harmonious atmosphere we will have. After all, almost all kinds of occupations have to face the society, so it is important for us to increase these skills now in order to work flexibly in the future.(这句话很chinglish, 我会写成after all, almost all kinds of occupations require us a good communicaiton with the society,....)


Admittedly, although the merits for taking some part-time jobs results in are considerable, we cannot ignore the fact that it would disturb our studying to some extent. After all, with the time we spend on working increased, it must reduce our studying time. Furthermore, some part-time jobs such as cafeteria waiters need us to work at night, which means we have to go to sleep very late,
due to which
we cannot have an efficiency on next day studying. However, I
hold(insist)
that though taking the part-time jobs has certain disadvantages, more impacts exerted by the forward pace of the requirement of future jobs preparation.(I insist that taking part-time jobs has more positive impacts on universtiy students’ job preparation inspite of some disadvantages)


To sum up, from what has been discussed discussed above, we could safely draw the conclusion that students should take some part-time jobs while they are studying in universities.

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发表于 2010-8-10 14:20:15 |显示全部楼层
不知道为啥没改我的作文,也没见你在出现过了
不过你的我改好了。捱到今天终于能加附件了,还是给你好了
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发表于 2010-8-10 16:53:23 |显示全部楼层
8月10日作业,大家使劲拍,不打不成材~~!!
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发表于 2010-8-11 10:51:40 |显示全部楼层
23# littlekuo
不好意思 我还没有传附件的权限 你有邮箱么 我发给你~

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发表于 2010-8-11 11:34:38 |显示全部楼层
大家一起努力加油

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发表于 2010-8-11 16:30:33 |显示全部楼层
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呵呵,麻烦了,谢谢
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发表于 2010-8-12 08:29:07 |显示全部楼层
嗯,改好了~呵呵~
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发表于 2010-8-12 17:33:43 |显示全部楼层
楼主,我的作文你什么时候给看啊~~???

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