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发表于 2010-12-4 22:31:04 |只看该作者

对不起给你改晚了

还有我的作文早上就传上去了，只是在帖子那里没有更新，麻烦看一下吧

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发表于 2010-12-5 16:15:55 |只看该作者

已改好，你的和杨光的我是在同一个文档里修改的O(∩_∩)O~，第一页是你的。

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发表于 2010-12-5 17:11:05 |只看该作者

我的一篇综合作文能麻烦帮我修改下吗多谢了
Both the reading passage and the listening passage talk about the government should own Amtrak company or not. However, the opinions are entirely different. The reading passage suggests that purchase the Amtrak is helpful, but the listening section believe that means nothing.

Firstly, the reading paragraph suggested the government will make no profit. Because that the railway build in the remote area. So less people will use it. Finally it will make government lose money. But, the listening passage gave a paragraph with opposite idea saying that government funding for train is not for earn money but for provide services. The persons who lived in the remote area need trains and they also have right to take trains.

Secondly, the reading section provided us that it is not fair that government only helps Amtrak. There are a plenty of personally transportation company need funding. In this way, the other companies van not complete with Amtrak. In contrast, the listening section showed us a different picture that Airline Company had already got funding form government. For example, paying bills form the air traffic control towers, training aviators and weather forecasting organization.

Thirdly, in order to strengthen the idea, the writer in the reading passage believed traveling by train is not popular now. Most of people have car. So to build more high way is the right thing which the government should to do. But, the professor said, nowadays people do not choose train because that the system of the train is not update for a long time which tones back the writer. The professor also talked about the train system in Japan for example.

All in all, the opinions in the listening passage are totally different from the ones in the reading passage.

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发表于 2010-12-5 18:19:32 |只看该作者

12月4日综合TPO9
已改，请查收

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发表于 2010-12-5 20:11:13 |只看该作者

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有學文學的嗎歡迎認識！

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发表于 2010-12-6 21:53:13 |只看该作者

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career.

Needless to say, either trying different jobs or taking a long term career is right for young people, since they do can benifit young people in different perspectives. However, is it necessary to pick up the better one between them? Definitely I believe that there is little value to do so, due to no approciate method or specific meaning.

First of all, trying different jobs enable young people to learn what they can't acquire in the classroom. Not only will different jobs provide young people with different pratical experience, but also broaden their horizon, all of which are precious for them in the future life. For instance, my brother who major in software has changed jobs 3 times. However, after each transfer, he can get a higher wage, since he learns a lot from his last job which improve his ability to develop the software.

Second, even though we can benifit from the transfer of job, we must choose a certain job as soon as possible, since only a steady job can give us a chance to promote. This is because that the manage possition will only give the person who has worked a long time in the company. Take the elite in the bussiness, Mr. Tang as an example. He has worked in the 163 over 20 years. And in the 20 years, he has promoted step by the step, from a normal worker to a director, then to a associate manager, finally to a manager. Just like his statement in self-biography, it was the loyalty to the company that help him arrive this position.

Furthermore, there is no meaning to evaluate which option is better, trying different jobs or taking a long term career. Firstly, different person hold different opinion and reasons, just like different preference in eating, where doesn't exist an unconditional crterion. On the other hand, even we find the better between them, it has no practical effects. Such solution can't do a favor to make the young people's career easier, nor make young people's dream come true. Then, why should we do that?

Summarizing the points above, I prefer to conclude trying different jobs the same important as taking a long term career. Everyone should think highly of both, instead of a so-called better one. Only then will we have a successful and colorful career.

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