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It is easier to be a success in the past than it is today.[2008.9.20NA]2 g l/ F) ], Z6 m0 P
# \: P% p: S. q& u. j, }$ b1 `& KNowadays, social competition appears more and more intense with the development of society, people makingmake跟effort可以搭配,跟time就牵强了。 more time and effort to be success这句话跟主旨没联系. Then which one is much easier to succeed on earthon earth?, in the past or today? Maybe many people think that it 这有点别扭is in the past that people are easier to succeed, but I completely hold the opposite opinion. As far as I am concerned这句可以去掉, I am 去掉amconvinced that achieving success is easier for people living in modern society than the past, because people have more opportunities today.
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Firstly, the modern people have more opportunities to get education. Unlike before, more and more young people have the optionoption后面应该是个选择,用or,跟choose,且两个比较的对象应该不想高中和大学没有对比度 to enter high schools and even colleges now. No doubt, a a?person people absorbing enough knowledge is justlooks like a bird with a pair of wings. And knowledge is so useful that it can help peoplehim或者one go where hehe不能跟people对 wants to go, and和逗号?and fulfill the target he plans to achieve. On the other hand, a person without knowledge will have less chance to be success.比喻不给力啊,像鸟和更多机会…?
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In addition, people can get more resources fairly easily today. For instance, people do not need to worry about information any longer. When they want to learn about anything, they can look for it in encyclopedia,逗号去掉 or search in the internet. But in the past, maybe even after traveling a long way orand spending a lot of time, people still could not get the information what they want. As well as we know, information is just去掉 an important kind of resources, and the same situation other resources face.
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Admittedly, people maybe confront a bit less competitors in the past, but it definitely not means that it is much easier to make successmake success?, because competition can stimulate people to try their best两个不定式不推荐 to strive for their ambitions. On the contrary, people would become lazy and not like to rake any responsibility without competition. To sum up, for what has been discussed above, although modern society is full of competition, I insist that it is much easier to achieve a success in today than in the past.(348)
建议:例子不够到位,跟主题衔接不紧。Just用的太多。句式多为不定式,可以换复杂点。 |
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