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本帖最后由 weimo1987 于 2010-12-15 22:14 编辑

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Only movies that can teach us something about real life is worth watching? Answeing this question we must define what is worth watching movie . In my opinion a worth watching movie not only brings audiences happiness in soul but also has resonance in thought.

Admittedly, the movies teaching us about real life is closer to our daily life and make audiences have more resonance in life. take the famous movies “Forrest Gump” for example, it describes a common person’s uncommon life and tells us that Life was like a box of chocolates, You never know what you're going to get. but if we have a dream and struggle for it, you will have a beautiful future. This movies make some person who is disappointed of present life, light up the hope of mind and teach them smiling against trouble.

However living under a lot of pressures, an increasing number of people watch movies to relax themselves or enlarge their views rather than learn something about their real life.
“Herry potter” is one of the most famous science fiction movies, it is a story about untruth magic world, it leads audiences to a place where they never imagine, everything happen in the movie is charming, and gives the audiences a sense of being in the real sets. After watching this movie, people can forget the unhappiness in real world. This is why nowadays science fiction movie become more and more popular, they provide a new view of our daily life, and encourage us to imagine, may be some inspirations from movies can advance development of certain filed.

In one world, audience have different needs from movies, that is why there are various kinds of movie can be chosen.
It is rather superficial to simply say the movies that only teach us real life is worth watching.

综合： TPO17
The lecture provides the opposite opinion concerning that the article offered, the steady growth of the human population and the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use didn’t decrease population of birds.

Firstly the reading passage said increasing of human and settlement population will decrease the population of birds. But what the professor said indicates that the number of birds is still increase in urban, because city provides for birds a larger and safer life, even through some spices can’t fit the life in the city the population will decrease but other species still increase, so the total number of birds is not decreasing.

Secondly, the reading passage said that growing human population induces the agricultural activities increase and then destruct more wilderness where birds live in. but professor said in U.S less and less land be used as farm in future. With high technology working at agriculture, a certain land of crops will produce higher than before, so it dose not result in the destruction of wilderness.

Finally, the reading passage said that as human settlements expand and agriculture increases, the use of chemical pesticides will also increase, it will induce pollution of environment and finally induce the bird population decreased. But the professor mentions that new and less toxic has been in farm, the modified medicine brings less harm to birds. So these problem also has resolved.

我是个回不去的旅者，必须向着心中的圣地前行~

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我要疯了总是说我的验证码有问题

我是个回不去的旅者，必须向着心中的圣地前行~

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本帖最后由大笨狒于 2010-12-16 16:32 编辑

-v- good job & let's keep going~~

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腓3:13 14. 忘記背后,努力麵前.嚮着標桿直跑.

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Only movies that can teach us something about real life is worth watching? Answeing this question we must define what is worth watching movie . In my opinion a worth watching movie not only brin ...
weimo1987 发表于 2010-12-15 22:12

OK，改好~ 见附件。
加油哦~

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We created our own thorns, and never stopped to count the cost.

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不懂... 为什么是前天的作文...

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改了~

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本帖最后由 liuyuan1990 于 2010-12-16 17:04 编辑

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In one world（Word）, audience have different needs from movies, that is why there are various kinds of movie can be chosen.% v$ C, w5 p" N8 E) p
It is rather superficial to simply say the movies that only teach us real life is worth watching
我觉得你应该把反对的部分写多一些，然后论点部分写多一些，例子可以写的简略一些，还有结尾段好像有些简略。然后文章看起来写的很急，其中一些单复数问题，大小写问题较多，还有，用词可以适当高级一些，我觉得你写的不错，加油~

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