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发表于 2015-12-8 20:42:36 |显示全部楼层
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issue 24/29/52
The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.  

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.


I think this statement is true for teaching children who are emotionally sensitive and can learn more from encouragement and positive reinforcement. For students in high schools and colleges, it is important for them to recognise their weaknesses manifested in their mistakes.  For employees in industries such as manufacturing, negative actions should be corrected immediately and punished to ensure the safety and quality.   

这篇没有写背景引入,直接提观点。这种写法适合只需要4-4.5分的同学,可以节省一些时间写后面的内容及修改。

For young children, offering positive feedback on desirable behaviors will lead to more of such behaviors.  On the other hand, since they are not emotionally mature enough to receive criticism or punishment, it is reasonable to ignore their negative behaviors.  For example, when a 3 year-old is learning to deal with the problem of bedwetting, parents should praise the child every time when s/he manages to stay dry the whole night.  Through such positive feedback, the child will gain more confidence over his/her ability on this issue over time and will eventually overcome the problem.  On the other hand, if the child occasionally wets the bed, it is not a good idea for parents to scold him/her for doing that as this may hurt the child and destroy his/her confidence and self-esteem.  

举了一个尿床的例子 前面的观点分两部分 后面的例子解释也是两部分 一一对应 一般不鼓励写太多例子 一个例子讲清楚就很好了

For older schoolchildren, while it is still important to praise good behaviors, handling negative actions more directly and firmly is also necessary.  For example, in a math classroom, children should be praised and perhaps rewarded when they performed arithmetic operations accurately.  Doing so, as in the case of the baby with bedwetting problem, will help them build confidence and develop interests in the subject.  On the other hand, when they make mistakes, the teacher will have to provide corrective feedback and work with the students to figure out the causes of the problems.  Only through such feedback and problem solving can the students learn more effectively.  

同样只有一个例子,但分正反两方面来写  


In the context of employee training, more attention should be focused on fixing the negative behaviors rather than positive ones in order to maximize the training efficiency.  As the employees are mature adults who receive compensation for their work, there is no need to praise them for following instructions correctly.  They will get awarded in the form of their salary and maybe bonus if they meet the expectations of the boss.  Prasing them for all the positive actions would be a waste of time and money.  On the other hand, it is essential for them to receive feedback and further training if they do not perform well enough in certain aspects of their jobs.  After all, helping them to learn how to do the job correctly and efficiently is the main purpose of their training.  

这里有一个干货就是以效率作为价值判断的标准。题目中提到best其实是需要判断何为好。teach的好与不好要考虑学生能否接受、信心会不会建立(尿床),能否有效的学习(算数)以及培训教学的效率(员工培训)。遇到涉及价值判断的题目,立论的基础是价值判断的依据和标准。

In conclusion, there is no such thing as a universally applicable “best way of teaching”.  Teachers and trainers have to decide when and how to provide feedback to students according to the ages of students and the learning contexts.  




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发表于 2018-8-6 11:09:04 |显示全部楼层
第二段好像和开头Thesis Statement不太一致

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