[习作点评] 第一次写GRE，完全不知道怎么下手，也是一边看者模板一边看着范文写，求大神指教 [复制链接]

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发表于 2016-10-18 17:05:09 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

有几个问题想请教大家
1模板是不是可以用，会不会因为模板而被查重扣成绩
2不同的问题是不是会有不太一样的模板，例如evidence,question,assutiom的是不是会有不一样的地方，哪里可以有找到总结看看
3因为要求实在不高，只要3，最好上3.5，所以，能不否指点如何在10天内熟悉...
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"A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimulating situations
(such as an encounter with an unfamiliar monkey), firstborn infant monkeys produce up to twice as much of the hormone cortisol, which primes the body for increased activity levels, as do their younger siblings. Firstborn humans also produce relatively high levels of cortisol in stimulating situations (such as the return of a parent after an absence). The study also found that during pregnancy, first-time mother monkeys had higher levels of cortisol than did those who had had several offspring."

In this argument,the author concludes that the order of birth has a direct effect on the stimulation level of infant and pregnant mother in terms of cortisol.This argument seems to be convincing at the first glance,but further reflection reveals that these evidence constitute a logical statement in support of its conclusion nor providing compelling support making this argument sound and invulnerable.

The threshold problem with this argument is that the author fail to take into account that relatively higher the level of cortisol may due to their older age.It is likely that along with their matured body and cognitive ability,they have a stronger reaction in front of potential danger or excitement of the presence of their parents.The higher result of cortisol can be attributed to emotional change rather than being first born.

The second flaw that weaken the logic of this argument is that the bigger body size relevant to older age can affects the level of cortisol.Assuming that the bigger body size is in proportion of the level of cortisol,the larger infants can produce more cortisol given the same stimulation.Therefore,we need to control the body size if we need to understand the relation between age and cortisol.

The last but not the least important,the author overlook the fact that as human nature,the first pregnant mother is always more excited and nervous than the experienced pregnant mother.A case in point is my sister,during her first pregnancy,she was suffer insomnia for a long time because of overwhelming complex feeling.When it turns to the second pregnancy,the mother may feel confident with less ecstasy.Additionally,they may be too busy to take care of the older sibling which can distract their attention.

In conclusion, a number of alternative explanation may be advanced for the higher level stimulation observed.Unless we could find concrete evidence to rule out such explanation,the argument is not very strong.

[习作点评] 第一次写GRE，完全不知道怎么下手，也是一边看者模板一边看着范文写，求大神指教 [复制链接]

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