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发表于 2010-8-10 23:09:51 |显示全部楼层
Movies and TV programs made in your own country are more interesting comparing to movies and programs made in other countries, agree or disagree?

Along with the faster exchange of culture between different areas around the globe, public has gain more and more choices of movies. Many people prefer foreign movies, while others choose domestic ones. In my opinion, though domestic movies is much easier to be understood, foreign movies are more interesting and excel in many other aspects.

There is no denying fact that public can understand domestic movies better. With the same culture background, directors and audience have no diffidulty in communicating and expressing general ideas and inner values of the works. In contrast, due to different values and expression methods, many people may feel confused about the meaning of certain plots and fail to catch the idea of work. For instance, popular Tvshow Friends has many loyal audience in china, however, because of different culture backgrounds and language expression, many chinese audience feel little interesting in this “interesting” Tvshow.

However, those culture barriers donot stop the urgent demand for foreign movies and tv programs. How to explain this phenomenon? One explaination is human instinct to explore unknown and new things. People are interested in new things, especially foreign ones. Movies and tv programs provide them a good opportunity to learn the way foreign people work, live, what they pursue, what they like and hate, their attitudes towards certain affairs, etc.

Another explaination may be advanced technology. Advanced technology involved in foreign movies offers audience a better and more interesting experience in movie theater. That is why, last year, people in shanghai waited in line for more than 3 or 4 hours to buy a ticket of Avatar. 3D MAX technology made quite a few profits for movie company while brought to local audience an unusual and unprecedent experience and following happiness.

What’s more,as the quality of domestic movies went down in recent years, the gap between foreign movies and them has been increased. Once domestic movies usually excel in plots, however, recently domestic movies devote less and less energy and money on creating high quality scripts, they gradually lost the last advantage. Only by creating new attracting ideas and engaging in movie itself, could domestic be attracting and gain population.

In a word, despite its disadvantage in communication, foreign movies and tv programs better cater public curiosity and take advantage of advanced technology, providing unprecedent and more interesting experience for local audience.
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发表于 2010-8-11 14:30:32 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2010-8-11 22:00:54 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2010-8-12 22:29:32 |显示全部楼层
Some people think making sure that others(influential people or potential employers) know about your strengths and accomplishment can help you succeed, if you do not do this, you won’t have a successful life.


To what extent does the recognization of others determine success of a man? Some propose that without recognization of others, especially people or potential employers, one may never touch success. However, in my view, under certain conditions, recognization of others provides an opportunity for a man to realize his values. But it never means giving up independent ideas and spirits, or living in others’ shadow.


Along with the development of our society in nearly every area, challenges and problems people confront have been so complex and difficult that a single person can hardly deal with it. As a consequence, a team, composed by some people major in diverse areas, becomes the basic unit to deal with a task. In order to strengthen its competition to avoid being eliminated by market, every team prefer competent members to join in. If a person’s talents and accomplishment could be appreciated, he will gain a precious chance to work with expert partners in a noble team and realize his value through fulfilling intricate tasks. If not, one may never find his stage to show his talents. Thus, self advertise helps a person to get a position to pursue his dream and achieve success.

What’s more, recognization of influential people makes a significant contribution to future success. With the support and appreciation of influential people, one can gain more chances and time to pursue their goal. For instance, if a professor has confidence in a student, he may give the young man more opportunities to participate in different researches and challenge different problems, thus the young man is more likely to achieve his academic discovery or invention. Also, with the trust of the boss, an employee may acquire the chance to practice his innovative financial plan even though the former one has brought great loses instead of profits to the company. Thus, sometimes there is gap between you and success, and trust of influential people is just the bridge for you.

However, a person should have his own criterion of success and failure, but not always evaluate his accomplishment according to other’s standard, or he will be the slave of others. Moreover, our society is changing so fast, a sound criterion recognized by public yesterday may be abandoned today, for it no longer perfectly evaluate today’s accomplishment. For instance, Bill Gates may not be regarded as a person with tremendous potentials when he dropped from Harvard, however, tens of years after, he has become one of the most influential persons in our globe, many people try their best to gain his appreciation to join in his corporate. If Gates had follow contemporary criterion of success, he should continue his study and try to be hired by IBM. History informs us success primarily depends on creative spirits instead of traditional recognization. After all, those great men were always not understood by contemporary society.

To sum up, recognization of others offers a person a stage to display his talents and accomplishment. However, in order to achieve success, one should have independent spirits, or he will be slave of other’s criterion.

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发表于 2010-8-13 17:04:20 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 breezerh 于 2010-8-13 18:16 编辑

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To what extent does the recognization (童鞋,这个词我baidubaidu得到,可是我查了韦氏,这个词是不存在的,换回recognition吧)of others determine success of a man? Some propose that without recognization(recognition) of others, especially (缺了个influential people or potential employers, one may never touch success. However, in my view, under certain conditions, recognization(recognition) of others provides an opportunity for a man to realize his values. But it never means giving up independent ideas and spirits, or living in others’ shadow.
(下定义式的开头,赞一个。 提个建议:我上东方的课的时候老师教我们,以definition的形式开头的话,一定要加上你是怎么定义它 。就是说,如果在这段,老师会建议我们加上一句: To realize his or her value in society is the extent,
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Along with the development of our society in nearly every area, challenges and problems people confront have been so complex and difficult that a single person can hardly deal with it. As a consequence, a team, composed by some people major in diverse areas, becomes the basic unit to deal with a task. In order to strengthen its competition to avoid being eliminated by market, every team prefer competent members to join in.
(这里加一个连接词会更好。比如so If a person’s talents and accomplishments could be appreciated, he will gain a precious chance to work with expert partners in a noble team and realize his value through fulfilling intricate tasks.(这一句我觉得缺了一点东西。文章的题目是说make sure other people know your strengths and accomplishments,因此我觉得在这里,在 be appreciated 之前,应该有关于show your talents 的解释。比如: If you do not display your strength to your team, your talents will never be acknowledged. since that, how blablablablabla…. If not, one may never find his stage (用得好!)to show his talents. Thus, self advertiseadvertisement helps a person to get a position to pursue his dream and achieve success.3 G7 d: Q9 ]* b/ {6 t+

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老师说academic文章尽量不要用缩写) more, recognization(recognition) of influential people makes a significant contribution to one’s future success. (加上对象吧……我第一次读,以为是对社会的帮助……)With the support and appreciation of influential people, one can gain more chances and timetime在后面的解释里面似乎跟chance重叠了) to pursue their goal. For instance, if a professor has confidence in a student, he may give the young man more opportunities to participate in different researches and challenge different problems, thus the young man is more likely to achieve his academic discovery or invention. (很好的detail,赞一个)Also, with the trust of the boss, an employee may acquire the chance to practice his innovative(好词啊……学习了) financial plan even though the former one has brought great loses instead of profits to the company. Thus, sometimes there is gap between you and success, and trust of influential people is just the bridge for you.(好好好好好的比喻!)

However, a person should have his own criterion of success and failure, but not always evaluate his accomplishment according to other’s standard, or he will be the slave of others. Moreover, our society is changing so fast, a sound
(学习了) criterion recognized by public yesterday may be abandoned today, for it no longer perfectly evaluate today’s accomplishment. For instance, Bill Gates may not be regarded as a person with tremendous potentials when he dropped from Harvard, however, tens of years after, he has become one of the most influential persons in our globe, many people try their best to gain his appreciation to join in his corporate. If Gates had follow contemporary criterion of success, he should continue his study and try to be hired by IBM. History informs us success primarily depends on creative spirits instead of traditional recognization(recognition). After all, those great men were always not understood by contemporary society.让步的地方……就不评啦。例子很给力!
sum up, recognization(recognition) of others offers a person a stage to display his talents and accomplishment. However, in order to achieve success, one should have independent spirits, or he will be slave of other’s criterion.


写得好好……例证使得文章很有血有肉。词汇等都比我高级多了……
改的时候我拿本子抄下了挺多句子和词汇的用法呢,嘿嘿,谢谢哦。

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发表于 2010-8-13 22:20:56 |显示全部楼层
Some people think making sure that others(influential people or potential employers) know about your strengths and accomplishment can help you succeed, if you do not do this, you won’t have a successful life.
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Along with the development of our society in nearly every area, challenges and problems people confront have been so complex and difficult that a single person can hardly deal with it them. As a consequence, a team, composed by some people major in diverse areas, becomes the basic unit to deal with a task. In order to strengthen its competition to avoid being eliminated by market, every team prefer competent members to join in. If a person’s talents and accomplishment could be appreciated, he will gain a precious chance to work with expert partners in a noble team and realize his value through fulfilling intricate tasks. If not, one may never find his stage to show his talents. Thus, self advertise helps a person to get a position to pursue his dream and achieve success.
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What’s more, recognization of influential people makes a significant contribution to future success. With the support and appreciation of influential people, one can gain more chances and time to pursue their goal. For instance, if a professor has confidence in a student, he may give the young man more opportunities to participate in different researches and challenge different problems, thus the young man is more likely to achieve his academic discovery or invention. Also, with the trust of the boss, an employee may acquire the chance to practice his innovative financial plan even though the former one has brought great loses instead of profits to the company. Thus, sometimes there is a gap between you and success, and trust of influential people is just the bridge for you.
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8 b( I' V: x% ]2 ^1 }) THowever, a person should have his own criterion of success and failure, but not always evaluate his accomplishment according to other’s standard, or he will be the slave of others. Moreover, our society is changing so fast, a sound criterion recognized by public yesterday may be abandoned today, for it no longer perfectly evaluate
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today’s accomplishment. For instance, Bill Gates may not be regarded as a person with tremendous potentials when he dropped from Harvard, however, tens of years after, he has become one of the most influential persons in our globe, many people try their best to gain his appreciation to join in his corporate. If Gates had follow contemporary criterion of success, he should continue his study and try to be hired by IBM. History informs us success primarily depends on creative spirits instead of traditional recognization. After all, those great men were always not understood by contemporary society.
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没地方改啊 不好意思
很棒...就改了一些复数 冠词
我不给力啊

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发表于 2010-8-14 20:30:30 |显示全部楼层
09.08.07NA      Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children’s future for them.

Should children’s future be determined by themselves or their parents who love them deeply and silently? In my view, parents should regard their children as independent individuals and respect their right to decide their own career. Yet, it never means parents can pay no attention to children’s growth. Instead, they should provide advices and their experience to help children to choose their own way.

Everyone will ultimately integrate our society and be responsible for his own decisions. Hence, it’s vital for children to be informed how to make proper decisions and face consequences of his decisions, no matter it is sweet or bitter. However, only through numerous practices can a child acquire the methods and skills involved in decisions, moreover, what accounts more is that through those experience he can better analyze the dilemmas and challenges he confronts and make choices based on his analysis. Such process builds an independent individual, who is award that he, rather than his parents, must be responsible for his own life.  In addition, once parents’ decision leads to unexpected results or failure, a child may blame his parents, which exerts a negative impart on a child’s growth.

What’s more, very often children and adults make choices in different views. A children values interests more than salaries and social status, when they contemplate their future job. Parents choose their wear according to their social status and views of their colleagues; in contrast, children choose their clothes in view of their personality and emotion. In a word, personality and inner factors play a dominant role in children’s decision, while adults’ choices are more influenced by external factors. Thus, a child is more creative and focuses on decisions themselves. They are consequently more likely to put forward different and innovative ideas and thoughts, which may lead them to a successful career. After all, talents are talents since they are children, and usually can not be understood by contemporaries.

Having recognized the importance of respect of children’s right to decide their own career, however, we also have to realize that parents should play a significant role in helping children make proper decisions. As is known to all, children, without social experience or necessary logical analysis ability, is unable to distinguish between right and wrong. They may be easily influenced by crimes, sex, violence, etc. A responsible parent should teach his children how to tell wrong and right, according to our basic moral standards. Under certain conditions, a parent may provide more accurate and comprehensive analysis of consequence of decisions on children’s list. Both children and parents will benefit from such behavior, since parents can gain children’s trust and children can make a better decision.

From what has been discussed above, it’s safe for us to draw the conclusion that parents should play an accessory role in children’s decisions; children’s rights to choose their own ways should be protected and respected.

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发表于 2010-8-17 15:10:09 |显示全部楼层
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