《12.20冲刺》IBT写作小组作文贴 by cckkll1994

cckkll1994UID：2952719

欢迎学哥学姐们批评指导啊


11.11（虽然晚了些，还是贴上吧）


Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning about a foreign country?

In contemporary era when being abroad becomes more and more common,sources to acquire information of an alien land have already draw our attention.Some people believe that newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning about a foreign country,while other people may choose other ways instead,movies,libraries,museum,travelers for examples.Speaking for my self,I prefer the former one.

Regarding movies and stories from travelers,indeed,they can be really interesting and it is likely that we would enjoy ourselves while learning knowledge.But this also demonstrate that we probably cannot concert all our effort on our goal and the information may be easy to be forgotten.Moreover,even we maximum our abilities to remember,the knowledge which is available in medium such as movies and stories,however,is limited.

Newspapers and magazines,on the other hand,are of all kinds and able to cover nearly each and every aspect of a foreign country,such as cultural customs,religious belives,food and the ways how people relate to each other.Taking the US as an example,we can learn about native American from National Geography,its economy from Wall Street as well as celebrities from Time...Admittedly,for people to learn about a whole country,a single kind of Newspaper or magazine will never be sufficient,thus,we have to keep several types of them.Yet,only under special circumstances when we take Newspapers and magazines of all kinds as resources of information about foreign countries,could we have a complete view of natural and civilized features on them.

As far as I am concerned,the advantages of Newspapers and magazines are also more than those of libraries and museums in the sense that the former ones are rather convenient and practical—we can buy magazines whenever we want and benefit from them wherever we are while the museums of foreign countries can be rarely found in their homeland and libraries often takes a lot of time.

Of course,libraries and museum also have advantages,such as the quantity and quality of
information.But if all these factors are compiled,the advantages of medium like Newspapers and magazines carry more weight then those of other medium.Accordingly ,from what has been discussed above,we could finally draw the conclusion that newspapers and magazines can be the best way of learning about a foreign country.

942wadeUID：2948617

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning about a foreign country?


In contemporary era when being(going比较好， be 表状态的) abroad becomes more and more common, sources to acquire information of an alien land have already draw（drawn） our attention. Some people believe that newspapers and magazines are the best way（复数） of learning about a foreign country, while other people may choose other ways instead, movies, libraries, museum(单复数不一致), travelers for examples. Speaking for my self, I prefer the former one.
Regarding movies and stories from travelers, indeed,（可以将这个插入语挪到theyz之后） they can be really interesting and it is likely that we would（考虑一下could） enjoy ourselves while learning knowledge. But this also demonstrate(s) that we probably cannot concert (concentrate) all our effort(s) on our goal and the information may be easy to be forgotten. Moreover, even we maximum (maximize) our abilities to remember, the knowledge which is available in medium(media) such as movies and stories, however, is limited.
Newspapers and magazines, on the other hand, are of all kinds and able to cover nearly each and every(是否重复呢) aspect of a foreign country, such as cultural customs, religious belives（beliefs） ,food and the ways how people relate to each other. Taking the US as an example, we can learn about native American（s） from National Geography, its economy from Wall Street as well as celebrities from Time...Admittedly, for people to learn about a whole country, a single kind of Newspaper or magazine will never be sufficient, thus, we have to keep several types of them. Yet, only under special circumstances when we take Newspapers and magazines of all kinds as resources of information about foreign countries, could we have a complete view of natural and civilized features on them.
As far as I am concerned, the advantages of Newspapers and magazines are also more than those of libraries and museums in the sense that the former ones are rather convenient and practical—we can buy magazines whenever we want and benefit from them wherever we are(,) while the museums of foreign countries (that) can be rarely found in their homeland and libraries often takes(s) a lot of time.
Of course, libraries and museum(s) also have advantages, such as the quantity and quality of information. But if all these factors are compiled, the advantages of medium like Newspapers and magazines carry more weight then* those of other medium*. Accordingly, from what has been discussed above, we could finally draw the conclusion that newspapers and magazines can be the best way of learning about a foreign country.
感觉说理不是很充分，可以再多一些细节，少一些观点
个人见解，多征求高手意见啊！！

cckkll1994UID：2952719

综合写作TPO10

The lecture raises serious counter argument against the reading passage by providing drastically divergent evidence regarding relevant location,involved species and uneven pattern of otter decline.

To begin with,while the author claims that increasing levels of chemicals from water samples along the Alkaskan coast suggest industrial wastes are more likely to cause the pollution that could decrease the otter’s resistance to lethal infections which leads to their death,the lecturer points out the facts that no one has ever found actual bodies of died otters,and it consists with the predator hypothesis in the sense that if they were taken as preys,there would not be any bodies anymore.

In the next stage,contrary to the author’s statement that in spite of orca that prefer to hunt larger prey such as whales,only could pollution effect the entire system along the coast which caused the decline of not only sea otters and other species as well,the lecturer argues that in recent days when whales are nearly disappeared for human hunting,it is highly possible that orca have changed their diet under special circumstances which has smaller sea mammal on the menu

Lastly, author argument rasied in the lecture is that the uneven pattern of otter decline is due to the certain locations that are accessible to orca,and this directly contradicts what is state is reading passage that suggests the sea currents and other factors which distributes the pollution are to blame.

Accordingly,the contents in reading passage are refuted down to the last point by the speaker has completely distinct ideas on the topic in reading passage.

sad0ooUID：2914120

3# cckkll1994
综合写作TPO10

The lecture raises serious counter argument against the reading passage by providing drastically divergent evidence regarding relevant location,involved species and uneven pattern of otter decline.（感觉太笼统，个人觉得应该直接写出阅读指出了是因为污染这个观点，然而听力指出了是因为predator这个观点）

To begin with,while the author claims that increasing levels of chemicals from water samples along the Alkaskan coast suggest industrial wastes are more likely to cause the pollution that could decrease the otter’s resistance to lethal infections which leads to their death,the lecturer points out the facts that no one has ever found actual bodies of died otters,and it consists with the predator hypothesis in the sense that if they were taken as preys,there would not be any bodies anymore.& y- d+ O/ M# W2 L4 h& S  p4 C
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In the next stage,contrary to the author’s statement that in spite of orca that prefer（prefers） to hunt larger(large) prey such as whales,only could pollution effect(affects) the entire system along the coast which caused the decline of not only sea otters and other species as well(这句没看懂，结构太奇怪了),the lecturer argues that in recent days when whales are nearly disappeared for(because of) human hunting,it is highly possible that orca have changed their diet under special circumstances which has smaller sea mammal on the(their) menu

Lastly, author argument rasied（raised拼错，语法上不应该有双谓语，变成what the author had raised 更好） in the lecture is that the uneven pattern of otter decline is due to the certain locations that are accessible to orca(表达意思有误，少了一方面，改成is due to the factor whether some certain locations are accessible to orca or not),and this directly contradicts what is state（stated） is(in) reading passage that(觉得应该用which) suggests （+that）the sea currents and other factors which distributes the pollution are to blame.

Accordingly,the contents in reading passage are refuted down to the last point by the speaker has completely distinct ideas on the topic in reading passage.（个人觉得可以不要，前面说清楚就可以了）
两点建议：1所有标点后面要有一个空格，这是格式。不要老用逗号，多用点句号。
2句子的结构太长太复杂，读起来很累，觉得一个句子有一个what,that,which之类引导就行了，不要引导之后再引导。个人拙见，仅供参考。

cckkll1994UID：2952719

11.16独立写作

Agree or not:Visiting museums is the best way to learn about a country.



As we all know,there are numerous ways to learn about a country ,such as movies,tv-series,books,magazines and of course,museums.Yet,a debate was raised by some people regarding whether visiting museums is the best way to know about a country and has drawn much attention.Some individuals assert that visiting museums is a much more efficient way to learn,while other people believe in various way to know about a country.Speaking for myself,I am side with the later opinion.

Concerning museums,they,indeed,are more likely to represent the history and development of a country,and even seen as a culture land mark,but this also demonstrate that museums fail to focus on more contemproray issue as well as modern state of a country while time dropped in decay and the wheel of history moved forward.Moreover,it is only when we keep a newspaper or other ways to learn the country that we would have the latest information of that land.

Other sources of knowledge,on the other hand,make it possible for us to learn much more information that is previously unaccessible for us in museums.Taking America as an example,we can learn its landscale from the magazine known as NationalGeography,its economy from newspaper TheWallStreet,and know how people in America relate to each other though its movies,and even more.Are there any of them mentioned before can be seen in museums?I highly doubt it.

As far as I concern,other ways to know a country fit us more in present days,for today people seldom go to museums simply for studying(except history majors).Instead,we spent increasing time on magazines,books and TV programs because of their convenience.

Of course,visiting museums also has its advantages for it enables us to have a much preciser view of the country.But if the factors that we have and have not mentioned above compiled,it is not so hard for us to reach the conclusion that visiting museums is barely one of many ways to learn a country and surely not the best.

lynn27UID：2774627

lynn27UID：2774627

cckkll1994UID：2952719

8# wanderer_2011

这个评论真的很简短，给力啊....

cckkll1994UID：2952719

11.18独立

Agree or not:it is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lose of old friends

        As a son of the oriental land,it is our tradition to value the places that we have lived and not leaving born-place unless under certain necessities. And it is coincidently attribute to the factor that mentioned in the writing direction regarding unwillingness of losing friends. However,speaking for myself,I am not side with this opinion in spite of my ancestors' view about this issue.
       First of all,moving to a new city does not necessarily equals to the lost of old friends in the sense that in comtemporary era,I have so much ways to communicate with each other regardless how long distance we've been apart. If we ever want to keep the friendships with our old friends,we simply need to drop a e-mail,have a phone call or pass a message though our mobile phone. Moreover,under special circumstances when we communicate with these "old friends" frequntly,the friendships may become even deeper then before.
      On the other hand,moving into a new city or a country,surrounded by so much strangers and ways of life,we are able to expand our horizon,meet new acquintance and even make new friends. In this way,we would learn a lot whenever we go to a new city and have a more cosmopolitan perspective of things around us. Besides,a new environment is always associated with plenty of opportunities and chances to change our life and it enables us to “explorer the strange new world and boldly go where none of us have ever gone before”(like it said in StarTrek)
      Of course,I have to admit that moving to a new city or a new country does have some side effect,for example,we have to keep in touch with our old friends all the time in order to maintain the relationships... But if all the factors compiled,it’s not so hard for us to reach the conclusion that moving to a new city or a new country may probably be a good thing for us.

cckkll1994UID：2952719

11.18 综合写作

       The lecture raised serious counter argument against the the reading paragraphs bt providing drastically divergent evidence,concerning the exposure to public,access of scientists and the scientific value that might be distroyed during the excavation process.
       Firstly,while the author claims that private collectors who spend fortune to buy those fossils limit the exposure of fossils that ought to be shown in museums to public for they always do not allow others to view their collection,the lecturer points out the fact that it is the fossil trading that allows colleges and museums of lower level to obtain those ancient remains for exhibition and researches.And it is either not true that most collectors forbid people to see their collections.
       In the next stage,contrary to author's statement that many scientists lose their  access those fossils,the lecturer argues that  this case will never happen.Because  it is only the scientists who are capable to determine the true value of fossils that private buyers collect.Therefor, instead of losing the access,scientists are able to see those fossils more frequently.
Lastly,another argument raised in the lecture directly contradict to the opinion mentioned in the reading passage regarding the damages of careless excavation and missing potential value of the original site.The lecturer explained that compare to the value of discovery itself,the regardlessness will be rather irrelevant for there are few excavating programs,and those discoveries means a lot to the researches about
      So the contents in the reading passage are refuted down to the last point by the speaker and the her fully distinct ideas on the topic in the reading passage.

jiaojiaojing198UID：2428625

The lecture raised serious counter argument against the the reading paragraphs bt providing drastically divergent evidence,concerning (这样的用法说不出哪里不太舒服，直接跟三个短语，貌似这个句子太长了，第一段就一大句话)the exposure to public,access of scientists and the scientific value that might be distroyed during the excavation process.% w; D+ Q7 Y1 X  X
       Firstly,while the author claims that private collectors who spend fortune to buy those fossils limit the exposure of fossils that ought to be shown in museums to public for they always do not allow others to view their collection,the lecturer points out the fact that it is the fossil trading that（这个结构用的好） allows colleges and museums of lower level to obtain those ancient remains for exhibition and researches.And it is either not true that most collectors forbid people to see their collections.
, `( {3 j2 A9 @' ?0 C9 _9 D7 k       In the next stage,contrary to author's statement that many scientists lose their  access those fossils,the lecturer argues that  this case will never happen.Because  it is only the scientists who are capable to determine the true value of fossils that private buyers collect.Therefor, instead of losing the access,scientists are able to see those fossils more frequently（我听到和理解的是，在这些化石买卖前，那些科学家就已经很好研究过这些化石了）.
* ?. R5 W6 j. `Lastly,another argument raised in the lecture directly contradict to the opinion mentioned in the reading passage regarding the damages of careless excavation and missing potential value of the original site（应该加上by the private collectors）.The lecturer explained that compare to the value of discovery itself,the regardlessness will be rather irrelevant for there are few excavating programs,and those discoveries means a lot to the researches about" [, H/ {) k* N: （我理解的是，演讲者辨驳说科学家也要碰触化石否则他们无法被挖掘）`
      So the contents in the reading passage are refuted down to the last point by the speaker and the her fully distinct ideas on the topic in the reading passage.

bananasliceUID：2628141

你的独立~

icecontrolUID：2782559

不好意思改晚了~~~


The lecture raised serious counter argument against the the reading paragraphs bt by providing drastically divergent evidence, concerning the exposure to public, access of scientists and the scientific value that might be destroyed destroyed（这个词看了半天都没看出来错，就觉得有点奇怪） during the excavation process.（个人觉得如果把concerning…放到arguments，会不会更好一点，另外删掉by providing…这句应该会更好一些，觉得有些重复~~~）; ]& y* S; X$ y
       Firstly, while the author claims that private collectors, who spend fortune to buy those fossils, limit the exposure of fossils that ought to be shown in museums to public, for they always do not allow others to view their collection, the lecturer points out the fact that it is the fossil trading that allows colleges and museums of lower level to obtain those ancient remains for exhibition and researches. And it is either not true that most collectors forbid people to see their collections./ ?# I8 @! p* V. I4 |
       In the next stage, contrary to author's statement that many scientists lose their  accesses to those fossils, the lecturer argues that  this case will never happen. Because  it is only the scientists who are capable to determine the true value of fossils that private buyers collect. Therefore, instead of losing the access assess, scientists are able to see those fossils more frequently.
7 m2 M2 w8 \8 w& PLastly, another argument raised in the lecture directly contradicted to the opinion mentioned in the reading passage regarding the damages of careless excavation and missing potential value of the original site. The lecturer explained that compare to the value of discovery itself, the regardlessness will be rather irrelevant, for there are few excavating programs, and those discoveries means a lot to the researches about (这句好像跟LECTURE有点出入，听力中主要说的好像是 有新的发现但出现些小的失误及信息丢失总比一直不被发现好); z+ C+ A" J# D. z# |( i
      So the contents in the reading passage are refuted down to the last point by the speaker and the her fully (?? 这个真没看懂，你应该要说的意思是 相当明显的观点， 是吧？)distinct ideas on the topic in the reading passage.
总体还不错，但觉得是不是有些偏长啊，实际考试当中可有没有时间写出这么长，另外有些表述重复，还有你文章的句子让人读起来有些吃力，因为你都没有标点符号。