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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Observing and studying animals’ behavior are useful for knowing more about humans.

Maybe six thousands years ago, there came up a new living creature—humans in the world. This new organism is highly advanced differentiating the other animals due to the ability of creating and using tools. As a result, humans are distinct from the rest barbaric animals which behave totally instinct and even unconsciously. I concede the animals are our close friends and observing them will be conducive to our biotechnologies but not understanding more about humans. As we all know, the differences between the animals’ and humans’ behavior are the intentions, the self-cognitive, and the courtesy.

Firstly, due to different intentions, the animals and humans behave differently. More detailed, most animals with low intelligence, only take the action to satisfy their basic requirement or just for the survival. Take the chicken for example, which spent most of their time in searching food and peeking on the ground all the day. Another lively example, the giant panda, which is so valuable in China, is preserved in zoo or labs. They will never have a sense of losing freedom or want to make a progress in losing weight while they enjoying wasting time staying in only a limited place without any movements but eating all the day. Excitingly, many animals will show some wonderful performances such as dancing, singing, or even make-up themselves. All of these really look like humans, but their intention is still for survival. They want to attract others only for match. On the other hand, we, human beings will set a longtime goal and consider carefully before doing something. What’s more our intentions about doing the same thing will be so complex and even different from one to another.

Secondly, humans’ behavior will show self-cognitive while the animals’ don’t. It is obvious every person has its own personality and characteristics. They perceive themselves the unique one in the world. Sometimes, they show their confidence in their proficient areas while, sometimes, they will be diffident in doing something they never try. This is because they are able to understand themselves which is called self-cognitive. However, the rude wild animals will never think about themselves. What they are? And how they are different from the other companions? They are so barbaric that they will never have the feel of self-cognitive. There is growing evidence that several years ago, many zoologists states that chimpanzees and a special bird do have self-consciousness. But till now, this statement is subverted there they are just show social behavior in front of mirror.

Finally, humans are highly intelligent, so they behave courteously to others while the animals don’t. Humans will greet each other no matter who is, apologize when making mistakes, and say goodbye to farewell another. It is no surprise that the animals are always aggressive toward others. They are afraid of losing their habitat, supply, and match. Even there is cannibalism in the animal kingdom. For example, immature bigger sharks will eat the smaller ones in order to occupy more space and food in the future. So, as human beings, they recognize these almost out of ethic.

Summarily, it is no use to observe and study animals’ behavior which is ultimately different from the humans’ in the aspects of intention, self-cognitive, as well as courtesy.

mingpjUID：2716886

改好了， 今天辛苦你了

yaoxiang1015UID：2311632

改好啦~！

mileschen2008UID：2771287

呵呵，改好了，修改见附件

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12 17 TPO2 独立&综合(其实今天综合是个熟悉老话题，但是我还是写晕了。估计漏了很多东西，很乱:dizzy: )
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The car has a greater influence on our society than the airplane has.

What will you choose as your transportation tool, a car or an airplane? Absolutely, the majority of people would like to choose a car rather an airplane. The simplest reason is that they don’t know how to control a big airplane. As you see, the car is more prevalent and easily manipulated than the airplane. Therefore, I have to admit the statement that the car has a greater influence on our society than the airplane has. More detailed, the car will greatly change our recreational life, job and work efficiency, as well as some adverse impact.

To begin with, the car will vary our traditional recreations by enlarging traveling scope, promoting cultural communication. Several years ago, without car, many people will spend he weekend staying at home watching televisions or playing cards with family members. If they want to travel to other further places, they have to take a train. However, none of them want to spend the valuable spare time just in the train. Nowadays, the urban citizens can enjoy a distant rural scenes by driving their cars while the suburban residents could also spent less time to reach the city center. All of these will be conducive to the promoting of cultural communication. For instance, the suburban settlers without the cars would never have such city life experiences like shopping in malls, having the fast food, and watching the live concert.

Moreover, the car becomes an indispensable part in our daily life. Both the employees and students need to drive cars or take in cars to work places and schools. The vehicles help us save more time and energy spending on the way which will bring benefits to our work and private life. It means we can reach the destination such as companies and institutions on time without missing any important conferences and classes. Take myself for example, it costs me 2 hours to go the school from my home by walking, while if I took the bus, I just spend 20 minutes on the road. Besides, with the time and energy saved, we may have more spare time to concentrate on our private life and interests. So, the car is playing an essential role in our work and study.

On the other hand, the vehicles also bring harms to our society such as exhaust, noisy, and traffic jam. The contamination of the car is so obvious that the air in the city with large amount of cars is less fresh and clean than that in rural areas. The other car pollution is noisy. For instance, I lived besides an avenue which is common in China. I was afflicted by the big noise outside my window for totally one year that I felt deeply mental suffering. The traffic jam is also very serious especially in big cities like New York and Beijing which results in a lot of complaints and irritations.

In total, the airplane is not as available as the cars because of the high price and maintenance fees. Therefore, the car has more beneficial and negative influence on our society than the airplane does particularly in the aspects of our spare time, daily life, and our environment.

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改好了

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TPO3：Do you agree or disagree Most of the advertisements make products appear better than they really are.

“What you are waiting for, this is your best choice!” This is a very familiar advertising slogan in present advertisement. However, do you really need the object they recommended? Is it really the best choice for me? Such questions will vary depend on different persons. Provided the majority of advertisements are so charming which could attract many potential customers by the elegant appearance of the object shown on the screen. But we can hardly judge the quality and feasibility of the product just by our first sight and our hunch. Therefore, I disagree with the quote that commodities can be better by advertising.

First of all, we are getting so sophisticated that we are able to judge the real quality of the commodity by our experience rather than the advertisement. Nowadays, variety of advertisements is penetrating our stuffed life in every possible aspect like the subway station, toilet, skyscrapers, and so on. We can not escape from them, so we only bear them, eventually, we are numb to them. In a result, we no longer trust the advertisements, and we will buy something which has a long-lasting brand or is recommended by our friends. Actually, this method is feasible. It could prevent us from buying something with low quality but shown to be cool in ad.

What’s more, although the commodity advertised on the screen or posts seems to be fantastic and reliable, we would not make our decision to purchase it as quickly as we saw them. More specifically, firstly, we will consider the necessity of the commodity. Then we will compare the product with others’ prize, fame, function and you name it. Finally, it is not the last step to buy it. We will absolutely take other factors of purchasing in to account, such as the service, the method of paying, location of the shop and so on. As you see, the action of consumers’ purchasing is so delicate and complex. It means that advertisements could hardly lead to the better appearance of the products and improve the sales.

On the other hand, a great number of advertisements will mislead consumers. For instance, a famous-brand infant milk ad will show the audience that a happy and healthy baby is enjoying its most wonderful milk meal. After finishing the milk, the baby grows quickly also with high intelligence. However, in fact, this well-known milk powder now is prohibited in China because some unhealthy addictive which result in the infants’ malformation. Besides, many ads are not misguiding themselves but would play a misleading role in some special audience. There are a lot of clothing ads which will attract many teens especially the girls. They are so sensitive to their clothes that these ads would distract their concentration on study and they will spent time and money in pursuing these fashion.

General speaking, the advertisements would promote the products’ propaganda but they can do nothing to improve the better appearance of the commodities.

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22# xiongcan818   修改好了~
“What you are waiting for, this is your best choice!” This is a very familiar advertising slogan in present advertisement. However, do you really need the object they recommended? Is it really the best choice for me? Such questions will vary depend on different persons. Provided the majority of advertisements are so charming which could attract many potential customers by the elegant appearance of the object shown on the screen. But we can hardly judge the quality and feasibility of the product just by our first sight and our hunch. Therefore, I disagree with the quote that commodities can be better by advertising.6 q% {! C" _& W' m) ]' W1 v
First of all, we are getting so sophisticated that we are able to judge the real quality of the commodity by our experience rather than the advertisement. Nowadays, variety of advertisements is(are)penetrating our stuffed life in every possible aspect like the subway station, toilet, skyscrapers, and so on(去掉). We can not（cannot） escape from them, so we only bear them, eventually, we are numb to them. In a result, we no longer trust the advertisements, and we will buy something which has a long-lasting brand or is recommended by our friends. Actually, this method is feasible. It could prevent us from buying something with low quality but shown to be cool in ad.
What’s more, although the commodity advertised on the screen or posts seems to be fantastic and reliable, we would not make our decision to purchase it as quickly as we saw them. More specifically, firstly, we will consider the necessity of the commodity. Then we will compare the product with others’ prize, fame, function and you name it. Finally, it is not the last step to buy it. We will absolutely take other factors of purchasing in to account, such as the service, the method of paying, location of the shop and so on. As you see, the action of consumers’ purchasing is so delicate and complex. It means that advertisements could hardly lead to the better appearance of the products and improve the sales.5 _$ o/ f9 d- b- h/ J

On the other hand, a great number of advertisements will mislead consumers. For instance, a famous-brand infant milk ad will show the audience that a happy and healthy baby is enjoying its most wonderful milk meal. After finishing the milk, the baby grows quickly also with high intelligence. However, in fact, this well-known milk powder now is prohibited in China because some unhealthy addictive which result in the infants’ malformation. Besides, many ads are not misguiding themselves but would play a misleading role in some special audience. There are a lot of clothing ads which will attract many teens especially the girls. They are so sensitive to their clothes that these ads would distract their concentration on study and they will spent time and money in pursuing these fashion.（smiling~）
General speaking, the advertisements would promote the products’ propaganda but they can do nothing to improve the better appearance of the commodities.
  这篇文章，写的很不错哦~但我觉得好像有那么一点偏题，因为我理解的这个题目是讲：你是否同意广告把自己的产品展现的比真实的好。然后你不同意，那么我觉得你就应该从广告比较真实的展现了自己的产品这方面来写，可是我觉得你的重点放在了：广告即使做的很好也不一定能吸引消费者，因为消费者。。。，然后，还说了广告的一定的误导性。所以我认为这方面有一些问题。再次说一下，单从文章来讲，我觉得很不错~

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改好了，迟了，不好意思哦，去我那该吧，谢谢····
There is a painting alleged by the writer that it is not the Rembrandt's original painting because the woman in the portrait is luxuriously dressed, the usage of light and shadow is wrong, and the glued panel is not the style of Rembrandt. But the speaker illustrates a totally opposite idea that the portrait is indeed the brush work of Rembrandt by giving three evidences.

The first one is that the four colors was added over the original painting 100 years after painted by Rembrandt, because the owner wanted to make the picture more valuable. Whereas, the passage says that Rembrandt would not make such inconsistency that the servant in the portrait is wearing expensive clothing.

The second aspect is that by removing the added paints off this portrait, they found the realistic light and shadow on the face of this woman. It really reflects the truth that it is painted by Rembrandt who would never make a light and shadow mistake. This point is contrary to that given by the writer. The writer(用who代替) thinks the face of the woman should appear partially in shadow while it doesn't.

The last reason is the glued panel is also the modification by other people after Rembrandt. Just because the people want to appreciate the portrait, he or she glued many pieces of wood to the sides and top of this picture with the same time adding the paints. What's more, there is evidence that the original wood panel is derived from the same tree, other Rembrandt's painting used. But the writer disagrees again that Rembrandt often paint on single wood panel rather several glued pieces.

To sum up, the speaker illustrates three aspects  which is contradict to what is supported in the passage to come to a conclusion that this portrait is the original painting of Rembrandt's.
佩服楼主哦，写得那么详细，总体来说点都对了。但是我个人认为开头的时候不要用偏向于对reading的叙述，因为主要是写lecture的东东。

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is a waste of time and money because customers already know what they want.

A growing number of people prefer to spend spare time in watching televisions which is filled up with many kinds of advertisements. As customers, we have no choice but to enjoy these colorful but maybe unreliable ads. On the other hand, the merchants who aim to promote their products are successful to some degree. So, I don’t think the advertising is a waste of time and money just due to customers already know what they want. There are many benefits that the product sale managers can gain from the advertising.

First of all, the rapid progress in the advertising area is the most credible evidence that a dramatically increase of companies are willing to propaganda their products by ads. In today’s fierce competitive market, every merchant want their commodity can be recognized and admitted by customers as quickly as possible which will lead to the most efficiency use of the company financial circulation, so the company could make the greatest profit. Although there is some special companies think them can persuade people to buy their products without ads because of their famous, long-lasting, brand and high quality, they are now gradually getting out of the memory of people. This bad experience is valuable to every company especially newborn ones. Therefore, no matter what of kind of company would like to choose ads to attract more potential customers in order to survive much longer.

Secondly, psychologists reveal some secrets of the ads that customers who are repetitively confronting the same ad would mostly like to buy the product shown in the ad. This is because the subscribers eventually gain a subliminal impression or familiarity about the some repetitive appearance of the same thing positively or passively. For instance, if the people go the supermarket and want to buy some beers, they will absolutely face a lot of brands and may be got confused. But eventually, they will make a quick decision when they see something is familiar for them which they think is with high quality too. You see, the ads play a very important role in the action of purchasing of the customers.

Last but not least, the advertising can promote not only the products of the certain companies but also their reputation. More detailed, there are many wonderful ads including charming superstars and melodious songs but without any appearance of the real products. We nearly can see the brand or their company culture and these will surprising make a deep impression in our minds. What’s more, these ads can also serve as hiring ads to encourage more imaginative and intelligent persons to join in the group.

To sum up, advertising is not a waste of time and money, no matter whether the customers know or don’t know what they want. The ads are very conducive to promotion of the companies’ competence and reputation.

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改好了  还看了你的独立， 感觉有问题，特别是第二段， 泛泛而谈的感觉 例如famous company； 没具体哪个公司，难以证明啊  5句话 143的字 读着有点累 长短结合吧 前三句太长了。感觉有个一两句凸显你的断句水准就行，主要还是要给给人人爽朗的感觉。
其他的都很好，好的就不依次列举了。 是高分作文。

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改好了~

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额，我还是用附件形式方便大家一点。

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这样可以了吗？ 还有，你给我发的改过的作文，发错了，是别人给你改的，请重新给我发一次，谢谢~

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改好了