基于展开一个段落,避免废话主要是要看你段落想表达的一个意思。比如以一个段落论证一个观点,比如,young people today are more likely to help others than young people in the past.
你可以在一段讲,不是这样的,因为我们这一代独生子女是多数。
First of all, now most juveniles in my nation are from single child families, which could hardly provide a sort of giving and sharing atmostphere for kids. Therefore, young people commonly feel less likely to help each other than their last generations did.
然后就举例子,你就说你的2个室友,一个是独生的,一个有一个brother,你遇到生活困难,有brother的那个愿意帮助你,而独生的不愿意。所以,overall的你认为,独生子女不愿意帮助别人,所以我们国家这一代的人比以前不给力了。
I once had a roommate named Tommy, who was the only one child in his family. When I ecountered with some troubles and turned to Tommy, he always showed some enthusiasm and then negatively helped me. Later I moved to live with Gerald who had a litte brother. He took care well of himself and at the same time he thought for me a lot. So I believe that young people who are the only child of their families are less likely to help others. The situation is quite common in my nation now.