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[经验] 综合写作Q&A(考了三次30分的经验) [复制链接]

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发表于 2014-1-13 12:09:53 |显示全部楼层
我综合写作没问题,独立写作就悲剧了,求教如何弄

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miranda包 发表于 2014-1-13 12:09
我综合写作没问题,独立写作就悲剧了,求教如何弄

这个问题太大了。。。你可以说具体点吗

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发表于 2014-1-14 14:13:52 |显示全部楼层
正在练这个,多谢,楼主大神

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发表于 2014-1-14 14:39:25 |显示全部楼层
想问关于综合写作听力记笔记的部分有什么tips吗。。。必须每个细点都记下来吗
之前独立一直是GOOD 综合却是FAIR-。-

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Haru621 发表于 2014-1-14 14:39
想问关于综合写作听力记笔记的部分有什么tips吗。。。必须每个细点都记下来吗
之前独立一直是GOOD 综合却是 ...

对,尽可能把听到的全部写出来。

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发表于 2014-1-14 17:45:02 |显示全部楼层
terrylazio 发表于 2014-1-14 14:55
这个问题太大了。。。你可以说具体点吗

每次都沒能寫完。。。結尾倉促。。

就說這次,開頭就用了7分鐘想,開頭寫一段第二段讓步,第三段寫第一個point結果這一段我寫太多了,到最後結尾沒時間寫。

無論雅思GRE還是托福,我都沒時間寫完(除了上次G勉強寫完結尾),雅思就是先寫ESSAY再寫第一篇圖表描述題然後圖表描述題最後一段沒寫完結果別的都上7分了就寫作5.5。 平時不想練習,有寫作恐懼症。到臨考就看慎小癡的書。。我發現我要是每天看北美寫作範文能GRE上3.5但不看又退步到3.0. 我上次托福寫作是22分,綜合寫作4.5-5.0(因為有模板了), 獨立寫作還是FAIR...本人總是容易拼錯字,連neccesarry都能寫錯。。應該這方面扣好多分,還有很多抽象名字不清楚是應該複數還是單數

最大的問題是,不能在指定時間內完成作文。結尾不是沒了最後一個標點就是只一句完結或者連寫都沒寫完。。。徹底悲劇的節奏

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miranda包 发表于 2014-1-14 17:45
每次都沒能寫完。。。結尾倉促。。

就說這次,開頭就用了7分鐘想,開頭寫一段第二段讓步,第三段寫第一 ...

你贴篇作文来看看

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发表于 2014-1-14 19:12:38 |显示全部楼层
terrylazio 发表于 2014-1-14 18:57
你贴篇作文来看看

我平时的都是改了错别字再给别人看的,而且自己的练习一般蘑菇一小时才写完

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发表于 2014-1-14 19:13:46 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 terrylazio 于 2014-1-14 19:22 编辑

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The food people ate in the past is healthier than the food people eat today.

Does the food in the past are healthier than the food nowadays? It depends on how people define "healthy" food. When it comes to issues such as contamination, the food past is definitely better than the food we are eating now, but when "healthy" is related with nutiency, it may not nessecery be the case.(要有明确的观点,到底同意还是不同意)

The food nowadays is added by lots of food additives, especially some "modified food" like cakes, chocolates, or foods that require good preservation. Those additives, which always made by chemicals, has(基本语法错误遍布全文,a deal breaker in ibt writing) the function of preservation, making food more softy, or put there to replace for sugar, which may lead to obesity. Some of them are later to shown by research that they are affecting people's health by increase prossiblities of cancer and obesity or high blood pressure. Therefore the food in the past is healthier than the one nowadays because they are more natual and healthy.(中间段没有详细的例子,基本也很难拿高分。)
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To grow the food, modern farmers always put extra amount of fertilisers to increase productivities and toxic spray to kill insects. Those DDTs, is toxic to insects, and it is toxic to human too. When the small amount of them is left on the leaves of vegetables, and people eat them, with this toxic effect accumulate for a longterm, people's health can be threaten.

The increasingly heavy industial(拼写错误很伤) contamination today affects food produce too. The soil of the land which grows crops, maize, vegetable and fruits can be contaminated by toxic "heavy metal", which is with atom weight heavier than iron. These metals can be accumulated inside plants and animals. Plant absorb these toxic metals from the soil, then acculmulate them in their body. Then they are eaten by people or animals, and then be accumulated inside human body or animals. Some people accumulate "heavy metal" by absorb them from the meat of animals. Surely the food before is healthier than the one we grow now.(建议不要纯讲道理,因为要想很久,导致写来不及。你的文章风格很雅思,不适合托福。)

However, when consider a netrient issue, the food nowadays may win some scores back(chinglish). First, The transgenetic food may not cause disease, because nowadays there is no significant scientific result shows that transgenetic food is harmful to human's health. Second, people nowadays have modified food by either biological selection? or transgenetic technology, therefore the food produced nowadays is more neutient than before. Third(一个段落有且仅能有一个重点), by modern agriculture method, some integration which is harmful in some food may be reduce. People are actually making eggs which contain less cholestrol than normal eggs with transgenetic experiments. Therefore the modified food products nowadays can be more nutrient and less harmful.

In conclusion, the food in the past are less food additives, less ũҩremain, less toxic metal accumulation, we can say that they are healthier than modern food by consider(ing?) these factors. On the other hand, modern foods, which are genetic mordified, are more nutrient and contain less unhealthy integration than their accestor, are healthier than the food people ate in the past.

一小时完工的。。。。农药都忘了怎么写。。。单词拼写错误没纠正的原版作文。。

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miranda包 发表于 2014-1-14 19:13
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The food people ate in the past is healthier  ...

我大致改了,你看看。

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好厉害,支持一下!

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发表于 2014-1-14 20:25:26 |显示全部楼层
terrylazio 发表于 2014-1-14 20:22
我大致改了,你看看。

谢谢~求狠狠虐。。。不虐沒進步啊。。唉。。

我的拼寫錯誤真的很傷,有些還要是基本單詞,我都懷疑自己是否有dyslexia了

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发表于 2014-1-14 20:27:06 |显示全部楼层
那其實應該如何提高作文?除了多寫以外還要注意什麽?

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发表于 2014-1-14 20:27:31 |显示全部楼层
連中文其實我也好怕寫文章。。。

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miranda包 发表于 2014-1-14 20:27
那其實應該如何提高作文?除了多寫以外還要注意什麽?

多阅读,多思考,作文本来就是慢工出细活。

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