dolphin暑假作文修改铺子（9月暂停）

HennnnryUID：3555775

dolphin_wby 发表于 2014-8-28 21:17

灰常感谢版主！非常有用的指导！好久没有见过这样上水平的修改了

dolphin_wbyUID：3408651

Hennnnry 发表于 2014-8-28 22:05
灰常感谢版主！非常有用的指导！好久没有见过这样上水平的修改了

过奖了，其实好久没写了，改得很犹豫，水平肯定比不上魔术君啦~

iotaprilUID：3477785

829 求大大修改~
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1761412-1-2.html
827或者826的都可以 many thanks~:)

HennnnryUID：3555775

dolphin_wby 发表于 2014-8-28 22:25
过奖了，其实好久没写了，改得很犹豫，水平肯定比不上魔术君啦~

即使很久没写……但毕竟是有功底的修改，还是挺有意义的。
昨天重写了一下此篇，当然重写的就不用改了……
版主能不能帮忙看看今天这篇，机经的题目，是最后的练习了……非常感谢版主！
开头首句是题目……

dolphin_wbyUID：3408651

Hennnnry 发表于 2014-8-29 13:42
即使很久没写……但毕竟是有功底的修改，还是挺有意义的。
昨天重写了一下此篇，当然重写的就不用改了… ...

你是要明天考试嘛？

dolphin_wbyUID：3408651

和之前说的一样，从8月30日起暂停修改啦~这段时间太忙了，而且基本都在外出，所以也很不方便，希望大家理解哈~

HennnnryUID：3555775

dolphin_wby 发表于 2014-8-29 13:51
你是要明天考试嘛？

是的………………

dolphin_wbyUID：3408651

Hennnnry 发表于 2014-8-29 13:42
即使很久没写……但毕竟是有功底的修改，还是挺有意义的。
昨天重写了一下此篇，当然重写的就不用改了… ...

HennnnryUID：3555775

dolphin_wby 发表于 2014-8-29 16:34

非常感谢版主的细心批改啊！祝版主好人多福！

dolphin_wbyUID：3408651

Hennnnry 发表于 2014-8-29 18:33
非常感谢版主的细心批改啊！祝版主好人多福！

不谢~考试顺利~

gurumamaUID：3555269

Teachers were more appreciated and valued by the society in the past than they are now.
Thanks to the introduction of technology into social life, people have more accessibility to education facilities and resources. A rising controversy is debated for years that teachers are not respected and valued than they used to be. Admittedly, we’ve seen the impact of technology and increasing accessibility of education resource on the social status and reputation of teachers. However, we still must confess that with the rapid demand of innovation and creativity, teachers are still being respected and valued by students and society as in the past.
To begin with, one must acknowledge the fact that the importance of education is not just offering knowledge and information merely. Education is also served as a mean of informal social control over students to fit the society better and behave themselves according to the social norms. Thus, teachers are still playing a crucial role in regulating and guiding students. Especially, when student’s parents are absent for works or other stuffs. Imagining this, if a child is without proper control by other people, they are likely to waste their time strolling around and slack off. What’s more severe is that they are likely to commit delinquency since their parents are on work and necessary additional regulation is absent. Thus, teachers are up to fill the blank of education and regulation which make them still valued and necessary in this modern society.
Moreover, as the market is getting more and more knowledge and technology-intensive-oriented, parents and students are beginning to pay much more attention on the nurturing and cultivation of students’ intellectual development to ensure a competitive ability so that they are capable to survive in the future career. For instance, my sister always keeps an intimate contact with her son’s teachers to get information about his academic performance, his attitudes towards teachers, and his daily attendance conditions. It clearly indicates that teachers are acting as a bridge to parents and students’ education, a medium between school and home, and a school supervisor over students when parents are absent. The significance of teachers for students’ education is obvious and keeps them still worshiped and admired by the society as whole.
Furthermore, one irreplaceable importance of teachers is that they symbolize the possession of knowledge which illustrate the long-going saying “Knowledge is power”. Somehow, it is a historical merit that keeps teachers profession unique among other occupations. Teachers’ face-to-face communication is thus hard to be replaced by online-courses or video classes. In addition, with the increase of students’ enrollment resulted from the emphasis of education. Teachers with wisdom and knowledge still remain as competitive components among schools. Many schools are spending quite a budget to attract teachers and professors to take positions in their schools or simply give a lecture. The historical merit, together with the accentuation on education among the public, makes teachers’ social status remain relatively high and valued.
To sum up, even some students or people are devaluing the reputation of teachers, they are simply a small proportion of the whole picture. As I’ve stated above, teachers are still valued and appreciated by the public in general.

gurumamaUID：3555269

我发了自己的文章。希望楼主可以看到。这个是docx附件

dolphin_wbyUID：3408651

gurumama 发表于 2014-9-4 17:33
我发了自己的文章。希望楼主可以看到。这个是docx附件

已经暂停了，如果改最早也要到周六了，可以参加下写作小组互批~

sokillerUID：3446082

whuphUID：3503458

版主版主，求改作文~~
求痛批。。。。。
我10月11号就考了~~O(∩_∩)O谢谢

【独立作文】whuph作业贴（10.11）
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