JD的PS，美国LLM的PS和英国LLM的PS

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抛砖引玉帖，

我记得自己在做英国申请的时候，PS还是涉及了很多自己的个人经历，虽然在网申的时候自己的经历已经都有所填写；
也读过几个申请美国LLM同学的PS，行文也大多对自己的经历有所涉及
最近在读《55 Harvard Law School Application Essays》，直觉是大部分是申请JD的文书。
文书中并未对自己的经历有过宽泛的涉及，之前听过一位加拿大的朋友说，其实ps就是tell a story. 和我最近读书的感觉是相似的。

所以，有个疑问，各位大牛的ps的逻辑结构是怎么样的，不妨我们搭个楼，让后面的同学少走些弯路。

我申请的是英国的LLM，哎，ps写的简直low到爆，基本结构模糊记得：
第一部分讲自己为什么读了法学，还写了很喜欢英国；第二部分把大学的一些经历很泛泛的描述了，包括实习啊，上的课程啊，以及一些喜欢课程的感悟啊这些；第三部分写了自己以后的计划以及读LLM将对自己产生的意义这些。

期待大牛拍砖！

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涉嫌误导小盆友，所以删除:L

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以下摘自Berkeley法学院网页：

SOME PERSONAL STATEMENT ADVICE FROM A PAST FACULTY ADMISSIONS COMMITTEE MEMBER
The following was written by a member of our faculty, who served for many years as a member of the Admissions Committee, in response to trends in personal statement content and tone. We offer his comments for you to consider when composing your own personal statement:

“The statement should avoid simply summarizing what is in the resume. It should avoid simply asserting how able, accomplished, and well suited for law school the applicant is. It should avoid uninformed attempts to ingratiate oneself through exaggerated claims of one’s interest in Boalt. For instance, more than a few applicants stressed how much they want to work with named individuals who are at best passingly related to a Center or the like and aren’t even members of the faculty; these claims make one doubt the applicant’s due diligence.

The statement should avoid self-absorbed autobiography. What we need is something that doesn’t simply assert, a.k.a brag about, how qualified and impressive the applicant is, but rather demonstrates it through the substance of what is said in the personal statement. If it is going to be autobiographical, I for one would prefer it to generalize a bit; that is, instead of, ‘How I changed as a result of this experience and now am so special,’ it should talk about how and why such experiences can affect people.

“I felt the cold, sharp edge of a knife at my neck.”  “ ‘You rich Americans are all alike,’ she screamed.” “I’ve never been so scared in my life.” “The child’s belly was swollen and scabbed.” You get the picture. Starting the essay with a dramatic, unexplained sentence designed to grab the startled reader’s attention. (In fact, what it does to the reader is produce a dismayed feeling of, “Oh no, not another one of these.”). Continuing this dramatic episode for a short paragraph without tipping off its relevance to the application. Beginning the next paragraph by switching to expository style and informing us of what you were doing in this dire situation and how it was part of the background that makes you a special applicant to law school. Developing why you are so special in the rest of the statement. Then concluding with a touching statement returning to the opening gambit, about how now, after law school, you can really help that little girl in rags.

It is very clear that many applicants have been coached by someone that this is how to write a compelling personal statement. This format is transparently manipulative, formulaic, and coached. Except for the occasional novelist we admit, none of our students or graduates is going to write in this style again; none, thank goodness, is going to begin a brief with, “He stood frozen in fear as the gunman appeared out of the darkness.” So, this artifice is irrelevant to law and counter-productive:  Once it ceases to surprise – and it did so more than 10 years ago – it just becomes a cliché which really ought to be held against the writer.  Not only using clichés, but also having been coached ought to, in an ideal world, discount an application. Needless to say, however, I did not hold these statements against the writers. Often the bulk of the statement does report on impressive activities that are relevant to admission. But it is transparent when essay formulas have been coached, and we (should) strongly advise applicants to write in their own voice and style and without trying to dramatize what they have to say in order to attract our attention.”

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http://www.top-law-schools.com/f ... php?f=18&t=4353

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阿泰 发表于 2015-9-16 21:31
http://www.top-law-schools.com/forums/viewtopic.php?f=18&t=4353

谢谢泰版，很有收获！:victory:

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tianyuezhang 发表于 2015-9-16 19:54
以下摘自Berkeley法学院网页：

SOME PERSONAL STATEMENT ADVICE FROM A PAST FACULTY ADMISSIONS COMMIT ...

谢谢您

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Northernabyss 发表于 2015-9-16 10:37
个人关于PS的理解哈，请大家狠踹：PS应该是申请人审视你的时候，在大致了解了你的履历、成绩之后，更能具体 ...

太生动了，谢谢

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亲 求《55 Harvard Law School Application Essays》电子版链接
Google木有找到。。。。。

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油炸小花生 发表于 2015-10-2 10:58

thx！

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感谢楼主！！！！

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tianyuezhang 发表于 2015-9-16 19:54
以下摘自Berkeley法学院网页：

SOME PERSONAL STATEMENT ADVICE FROM A PAST FACULTY ADMISSIONS COMMIT ...

受益颇多啊  多谢分享

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LZ 和回复的大牛太赞！

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谢谢分享

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所以JD和LLM PS的区别是？