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1.Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The food we ate in the past was healthier than the food we eat today.
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观点:食物是以前更健康
论点一:化学添加剂使得食物新鲜程度难以辨认
论点二:网购上的虚假图片
论点三: 转基因
One of the pressing problems facing our nation these years is the consistently exposed phenomenon of productions of unhealthy food. The credits of the seller is undoubtedly responsible, yet another factor, the accelerating development of technology, would come to mind if we take a deeper look.

First, while tremendous amount of chemical additives are invented aiming at extending the shelf life, improving the tastes or lower the price, they also bring significant side effect. In order to reduce the costing, some factories that providing the meat for fast food restaurant, apply a certain kind of hormone to hens. The result is shocking that those hens have more that two meaty legs and are sustained on a rather skinning body. Though the image of such a tiny monster are scaring, factory do harvest, as they wished, at the max yielding rate. However, problem raised. Those food seems fine with adult but cause a severe negative influence in children who are the most keen customers to fast food. Children who eat a considerable amount of these meats are observed to grow faster and sometimes malformed. This kind hormone are banned after the incidents were exposed, but doubtlessly more of such seemingly beneficial technics would keep emerging. Entrepreneurs, focusing on the profits, frankly would be unable to resist applying them and consequently lowering the average health state of the present day food.

The second point comes from the irresistible booming of on-line trading. While people are so rely on on-line shopping, its trading products extend from daily necessities to food that varies from punch food to the so-called fresh-guaranteed fruits. Admittedly, the delivery system is so advanced that guarantee an one-day arrival and the technics for preserving is developed a great deal. On the other hand, the concealing of stale fruit at the same time became even more convenient. Sellers embellish the images of their products, making it looks more charming and fresh. Worse, they may also hold a sale that help them to dispose those food or products which are close to the shelf-life limit. Customers, the disadvantaged side in business, become more vulnerable to be treated and sometimes they don’t even realize it. The unhealthy food, to some degree, find themselves a perfect disguise and grow more prevailed to our daily life.

Some more advanced technology may also be used to create new kinds of food, such as the gene-transplantation and space-travel food. Scientists experiments in those field and proud of their outcomes and hence advocate those newly invented food. Gene-transplantation may create a fruit combine the tastes of apple and the tiny shape of cherry while space-travel brought more unpredictable changes such as colorful peppers. However, they are so hurry to sell their fruits that inadequate further inspection are made thus recent years have witnessed countless cases where those food do harm to mankind’s health.

In short, technology, while bring countless kinds of convenience to our life, can bring bad influence in the food market unless the correspondingly stricter inspections are taken.

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发表于 2018-2-19 16:03:08 |显示全部楼层
楼主,写的很好,语言功底很扎实。 首段如果能够清晰的表达论点会更好一点

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