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发表于 2016-1-20 19:19:24 |显示全部楼层
It is quite conspicuous that we human beings made this planet worse off. And the situation is deteriorating on the daily base. We have witnessed the extinction of some animals in the last millennium. It is the human who should be held accountable for those tragedies.
   Did human activities make the Earth more inhabitable? As far as I am concerned, this question remains undetermined. We do live a prolonged life in some sense. Our lifespan has been extended. People whose bodies are inherently flawed may have a good chance to live a longer life, thanks to modern medicine. Modern medicine has advanced to the point where many uncurable diseases are not big problems anymore. But it is nowhere near immortality of humankind. BY contrast, We created more and more challenges threatening human health in the last hundred years. Due to the environmental deterioration, more and more genres of cancers popped out in last centuries. Why? Because our planet is sick now. And the outburst of cancers patients is the superficial symptom of the sickness of Earth. By virtue of terminal diseases, the life span of some people has been shortened drastically. The situation is even worsening off in the developing countries. Economic booming comes at the price of environmental pollution. More pathetically, we have never learned a lesson out of this dreadful phenomenon. By and large, developing countries never hesitate to swap environment for economic growth. We are running out of resource now. The depletion of petroleum is inevitable. And there is no replaceable or alternative substitute. The short-sighted decisions may result in destruction of Earth.
In short, the environment has been changed by the human activities negatively. And there is no sign of turning back. In general, the environment grows to be inhospitable or hostile for human kind to inhabit.

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发表于 2016-1-20 19:21:26 来自手机 |显示全部楼层
Many native speakers actually know little about their mother language.
Several weeks ago, when the writer was riding in a cab whose driver was a curious Pakistani man, she was asked to explain some words. Actually, the cab driver is keen on learning new English words by asking his passengers. However, though the writer was a native speaker, she racked her brain and struggled to explain the meanings by using some vague words and examples, which gave her a lesson that native speakers actually know little about their mother language. What’s more, she used some instances such as “Haste makes waste” in order to explain a proverb is nothing but a condensed saying that teaches a lesson. Finally, the writer only hoped the driver also owns a dictionary and works out the problem on his own rather than just listens to what native speakers say.
After all, it is obvious that it is one thing to use a word, but it is another thing to explain.

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本帖最后由 gardenia22 于 2016-1-20 21:32 编辑

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GRE: Colleges and universities should require all faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach.

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There are some divisions about whether university should require faculty to work outside the academic world. While some may hold that both society and faculty can benefit from this policy, I believe that such requirements is not applicable to instructors in all fields..

Primarily, professors in universities are inundate with teaching and researching tasks, leaving insufficient time for other non-academic activities. University should not put more burdens on them and make an unwanted requirement. Even if some teachers may think working outside the campus is benefit for their research, professors themselves should be the one to decide if time is worthy of their devotion besides researches and teachings. 

Further, After years of deep studies and research, professors already have a thorough understanding of what he or she is teaching. So there is no need for them to learn from these off-campus experiences. Beside, media and research proceedings offer them a better way of being inform of what is going on in their fields. 

Some certain majors is too recondite to find appropriate work outside academic world, because of a weak connections between academic research and industries. For example, a historian studies pre-history and a physicist studies string theory, whose knowledge is based on complicated and numerous accumulation of deep researches. Under such circumstances, working outside of academic world is not fit for their professions: Lay people and common society can hardly seek benefits from their work outside academia, since either their researches or teachings is beyond the interest and cognizance of the ordinary. Therefore it would be a waste of time and resources to require faculties in these fields to work out side of academia.

Of course, having professional staff whose research is related to industries working in practice may have considerable benefits for our whole society. However, is that really necessary to bother faculty of universities to make these contributions? If less professionals like students in corresponding majors can accomplish the work, requiring their teachers to do the same job may be unreasonable. For example, students of computer sciences are adequate to inform the basic networking security precautions for internet users without domain knowledge, then why waste the time of an eminent researcher who designs AES algorithm for public encryption.

To sum up, faculty in universities should spend their time on more worthwhile researches and can gain their knowledge in multiple supersedes. While some researchers can make salutary influences on society, certain fields is more suitable only in academia and such influences often can be completed by less professionals like students. Therefore, requiring them all to spend time working outside the academic world is unjustifiable.


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发表于 2016-1-20 19:24:19 |显示全部楼层
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题目:Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.


When it comes to the quality of learning, I think it is the degree the students master the knowledge which specific level of education requires. With this definition, I fundamentally disagree with the claim that all levels of education are limited by competition. Because different level education has different goals, in my opinion, when learning mostly involves memorizing facts,  appropriate competition for high grades could be an approach to improve the quality of learning, but overemphasizing grades does the opposite, when the purpose of education is comprehension of knowledge and innovation, pursuing high scores can hardly be meaning.

Competition for high scores a method for promoting the quality of learning when it comes to mechanical memorizing. Imagine there is a factory holds a knowledge contest of safety rules which are boring to learn, workers with the highest scores win the contest which has a reward. Workers who win the contest must have mastered the safety rules very well and workers in the contest, through competition for high scores, effectively master the safety rules and apply them in the contest, even in their daily working. In this case, a contest with competition for scores is helpful for improving the quality of learning boring safety rules. And the same is true of junior high school students and below, which their studying mostly involves memorizing the basic facts and formulations, competing for scores could be beneficial to master the basic knowledge which will be the foundation of their future studying.

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When it comes to the quality of learning, I think it is the degree the students master the knowledge which specific level of education requires. With this definition, I fundamentally disagree with the claim that all levels of education are limited by competition. Because different level education has different goals, in my opinion, when learning mostly involves memorizing facts,  appropriate competition for high grades could be an approach to improve the quality of learning, but overemphasizing grades does the opposite, when the purpose of education is comprehension of knowledge and innovation, pursuing high scores can hardly be meaning.

Competition for high scores a method for promoting the quality of learning when it comes to mechanical memorizing. Imagine there is a factory holds a knowledge contest of safety rules which are boring to learn, workers with the highest scores win the contest which has a reward. Workers who win the contest must have mastered the safety rules very well and workers in the contest, through competition for high scores, effectively master the safety rules and apply them in the contest, even in their daily working. In this case, a contest with competition for scores is helpful for improving the quality of learning boring safety rules. And the same is true of junior high school students and below, which their studying mostly involves memorizing the basic facts and formulations, competing for scores could be beneficial to master the basic knowledge which will be the foundation of their future studying.

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发表于 2016-1-20 19:26:31 |显示全部楼层
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Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.

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When it comes to the quality of learning, I think it is the degree the students master the knowledge which specific level of education requires. With this definition, I fundamentally disagree with the claim that all levels of education are limited by competition. Because different level education has different goals, in my opinion, when learning mostly involves memorizing facts,  appropriate competition for high grades could be an approach to improve the quality of learning, but overemphasizing grades does the opposite, when the purpose of education is comprehension of knowledge and innovation, pursuing high scores can hardly be meaning.

Competition for high scores a method for promoting the quality of learning when it comes to mechanical memorizing. Imagine there is a factory holds a knowledge contest of safety rules which are boring to learn, workers with the highest scores win the contest which has a reward. Workers who win the contest must have mastered the safety rules very well and workers in the contest, through competition for high scores, effectively master the safety rules and apply them in the contest, even in their daily working. In this case, a contest with competition for scores is helpful for improving the quality of learning boring safety rules. And the same is true of junior high school students and below, which their studying mostly involves memorizing the basic facts and formulations, competing for scores could be beneficial to master the basic knowledge which will be the foundation of their future studying.

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发表于 2016-1-20 19:28:27 |显示全部楼层
When it comes to the quality of learning, I think it is the degree the students master the knowledge which specific level of education requires. With this definition, I fundamentally disagree with the claim that all levels of education are limited by competition. Because different level education has different goals, in my opinion, when learning mostly involves memorizing facts,  appropriate competition for high grades could be an approach to improve the quality of learning, but overemphasizing grades does the opposite, when the purpose of education is comprehension of knowledge and innovation, pursuing high scores can hardly be meaning. Competition for high scores a method for promoting the quality of learning when it comes to mechanical memorizing. Imagine there is a factory holds a knowledge contest of safety rules which are boring to learn, workers with the highest scores win the contest which has a reward. Workers who win the contest must have mastered the safety rules very well and workers in the contest, through competition for high scores, effectively master the safety rules and apply them in the contest, even in their daily working. In this case, a contest with competition for scores is helpful for improving the quality of learning boring safety rules. And the same is true of junior high school students and below, which their studying mostly involves memorizing the basic facts and formulations, competing for scores could be beneficial to master the basic knowledge which will be the foundation of their future studying.

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本帖最后由 kingdomyi 于 2016-1-20 20:23 编辑

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Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.  


For most classes, attendances should be valued, especially some basic classes. It doesn’t mean that the self-study is forbidden, but attending classes is recommended for freshmen and sophomores. For their very first time coming into university, they might not have a proper and comprehensive understanding between college and high school life, thus they seemed be struggle to orient the new surroundings and feeling difficult to study. Therefore, joining the class’s lecture and following the professor’s guide might be suitable for most of freshmen and sophomores.
However, students should have be free to master their own time and took the classes of their own accord in the junior or senior years. After two or three years spending in school, they might develop some special patterns or discover some unusually timetable. At that case, attending classes might be not appropriated for them
Least but not the last, since there is not any eternal truth, I recommended university students found their own way to benefit themselves.

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发表于 2016-1-20 19:34:29 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 木婴 于 2016-1-20 19:40 编辑

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25. The following was written as a part of an application for a small-business loan by a group of developers in the city of Monroe.
"A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. Currently, the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away; thus, the proposed new jazz club in Monroe, the C-Note, would have the local market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popular in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer; several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe; and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every weeknight at 7 P.M. Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

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This application thinks that a jazz music club, called C-Note, will bring a great profitable in Monroe, because it lacks of competition, many people like jazz music in Monroe and typical jazz fans were generous to this entertainment. However, it ignores some specific evidences. It should provide more information about that C-Note will be not threatened by the nearest jazz club, jazz music is popular in Monroe and the nationwide study is the same as ‘Monroewide’ study.

Firstly, this application need provide more information about that C-Note will not have any competition with the nearest jazz club. It is probably that 65 miles highway which connected C-Note and its nearest jazz club. People get there conveniently. On the other hand, the nearest jazz club maybe the most famous club in the world. C-Note has no chance to challenge it position. People would rather spend time to the nearest club than go to C-Note. Therefore this application should provide the evidence that the nearest jazz club is not better than C-Note.

Secondly,the evidence is also not enough to prove jazz music is popular in Monroe. Although annual jazz festival attracted many people attended in Monroe’s last summer, we cannot learn many people attended this festival every year. It is probably that jazz festival of last summer is very special and a lot of performances were never seen before. The fresh shows attracted them rather than jazz festival itself. On the other hand, the application should provide the reasons of the jazz musicians living in Monroe. If not, we may think that jazz musicians were attracted by the unrelated jazz factors. For example, the sun is shining brightly and the people are very kind. At the same time,the application should tell us that there is a direct connection between people like “Jazz Nightly” and people would go jazz club. If not, we may think that people just like listening the jazz radio program, but they do not like jazz club. At last, the information is too small to judge that the jazz music is popular in Monroe.

Thirdly, the application should tell us the typic jazz fan is also generous to the jazz club in Monroe. Jazz entertainment has many forms like listening the radio, going to jazz festivel, buying CDs and so on. Typic jazz fans could spend much money on other forms rather than jazz club. On the other hand, nationwide study cannot represent Monroe wide study unless Monroe samples are similar to the nationwide samples. We need the information about the exact nationwide samples and Monroe samples, and then we could realise whether nationwide study has the persvation to represent the Monroe jazz fans.

At last, this application need provide the evidence above to prove the C-Note club will bring a great profit or not

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When it comes to the quality of learning, I think it is the degree the students master the knowledge which specific level of education requires. With this definition, I fundamentally disagree with the claim that all levels of education are limited by competition. Because different level education has different goals, in my opinion, when learning mostly involves memorizing facts,  appropriate competition for high grades could be an approach to improve the quality of learning, but overemphasizing grades does the opposite, when the purpose of education is comprehension of knowledge and innovation, pursuing high scores can hardly be meaning.

Competition for high scores a method for promoting the quality of learning when it comes to mechanical memorizing. Imagine there is a factory holds a knowledge contest of safety rules which are boring to learn, workers with the highest scores win the contest which has a reward. Workers who win the contest must have mastered the safety rules very well and workers in the contest, through competition for high scores, effectively master the safety rules and apply them in the contest, even in their daily working. In this case, a contest with competition for scores is helpful for improving the quality of learning boring safety rules. And the same is true of junior high school students and below, which their studying mostly involves memorizing the basic facts and formulations, competing for scores could be beneficial to master the basic knowledge which will be the foundation of their future studying.

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托福作文:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The way a person dresses reflects his/her characters.(历年试题 2011-05-28 独立写作)

There is a common saying that do not judge people by their appearances. Undeniably, outward looks can never be the only criterion on which to evaluate a person. When it comes to the question that does the way a person dresses reflect his/her own characters, people’s perspective vary from person to person. Some claim that a person’s dressing style can indicate his/her personality. However, from my perspective, I found myself in the concord with the inclination that the way people dress might be an indication of his/her character, although it can never be the best indicator.

Admittedly, to some extent, a person’s characters can not be determined only by his dressing, such as this person’s wealth, personality and so on. Because we can not safely draw a conclusion this person is pretty good only referring his appearance or wearing. And there are other factors contributing to judge a person’s characters: behavior and manners, which are more reliable ways to know a person’s real character. Thus, we should attach our focus on his or her behavior or attitude, instead of their outward appearance.

In fact, one’s dressing styles reveal his or her personal preferences, which are closely associated with their personality. For instance, if a person often wear some casual clothing in daily life, like T-shirt, jeans, or sportswear, he or she might be keen on to the enjoyment of a casual and relaxing way of living and physical activities. Thus, there exists one possibility that this person maybe out-going and open-minded. Contrary to this, if one wears formal clothes most time like suits, he or she might be a businessman and might take things really careful. Beside, if a man prefers to wear bright-colored clothes, he might be very extrovert. On the other hand, if a man choose dark clothes, he might has an introvert personality.

Furthermore, from a person’s dressing style, it can also offer us some clues of this person’s character. And there is an example well demonstrated this point. As we all know, we should dress ourselves suitably according to different situations. That is to say, when we attend a dancing party, we should wear evening dress which is suitable in this occasion. While in a graduate ceremony we need to dress special graduate clothes instead of casual T-shirt. And if a man always wears wrong clothes on those special occasions, he might be very careless in daily life. In addition, if a person wears out-dated clothes frequently, we might say this person does not have a good taste and might not be easy to accept new things.

To sum up, from my illustration we know that a person’s character should be determined from various aspects, like appearances, behaviors and attitude, but his/her dressing style could be a sign of his/her preferences and individual personality. Therefore, the clothes one choose to wear is actually under an individual consideration which includes their personal inclination and preference, and we can get some information about their characters

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本帖最后由 who-knows 于 2016-1-20 21:45 编辑

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题目:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Nowadays, neighbors depend on each other less than people in the past.

Not only once have I bumped into people next door waiting for the elevator, nodded to each other and felt embarrassed all the way home. Not only am I introverted but nowadays people tend to live on their own. We boast a less friendly and cordial neighborhood than in the past.
With the advancement of technology it is not as efficient to ask neighbors for help as yesterday. Telephones have made it more convenient to communicate with distant people. In pre-wire period, we asked technicians nearby to repair our broken devices while we call the related company to send an engineer nowadays. We chatted with neighbors face-to-face in the past and now daily interactions are carried out by telecommunications. A lack of communications have made neighbors acquaintances or even strangers.
Subjectively, people are less willing to expose themselves to the unfamiliar. Virtual technology may contribute to it, but emotionally, people don't want to show their weakness. We are facing fierce competitions nowadays and we can't endure others being in a better-off position. When we encounter people in the neighborhood, we start with 'Hello' and end up talking about weather. The problems we are dealing with are not options for topic. By assuming a smile we are rejecting encouragements and favors. We are saying it's fine and that I can handle it.
Yet a neighborhood filled with an atmosphere of nonchalance and social etiquette is not the one we really embrace. It leads to distrust in society. Attitudes influence behavior. We are in the worsening cycle of independence until the individual life collapses under its own weight. Since teamwork is exhorted in workplace, inter-dependence is required in the neighborhood.
Traditionally we live a life of helping each other, while distance limits our interaction range. Technology have abridged the physical obstacle but it's up to us to become emotionally connected.

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