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The reading and listening material have a debate on whether ethanol is a good alternative for gasoline. The writer does not believe ethanol is an ideal replacement from the ascpects (aspects)of global warming, animal food and the price, which are all refuted by the professor.

First of all, the writer states that the increasing use of ethanol will add global warming. It's true that there are carbon dioxide emissions after burning. But the process of growing plants, like corns, which are the sources of ethanol, can counteract this effect. Because plants absorb carbon dioxide as a nutriton(nutrition) while growing. In this way, carbon dioxide can be removed.

Second, the claim that the amount of food for animals will be reduced owing to the use of ethanol is not convincing yet. According to the professor, ethanol is produced by a part of the plant that is not eaten by animals. As a result, there is no need to worry about this problem.

Finally, the passage argues that ethanol will have no competiviness (competitiveness)on the price compared to gasoline. Howver(However), the professor holds an absoluatly(absolutely) opposite view. He admits that now ethanol needs to rely on government subsidies to lower its price. Nevertheless, support is not always needed. As the production rises and it being more available, the price will naturally go down. And according to one study, as long as the production tripples(triples), the price will drop by 40%.
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The reading and listening material have a debate on whether ethanol is a good alternative for gasoline. The writer does not believe ethanol is an ideal replacement from the ascpects (aspects)of global warming, animal food and the price, which are all refuted by the professor for the following reasons.

First of all, the writer states that the increasing use of ethanol will add to global warming. It's true that there are carbon dioxide emissions after burning ethanol. But the process of growing plants , like corns, which are the main source of producing ethanol, can absord large amounts of carbon dioxide, thus counteracting this effect.

Secondly, the claim that the amount of food for animals will be reduced owing to the use of ethanol is not convincing convinced yet.这句话感觉很啰嗦 The claim that food amount for animals will reduce due to ethanol usement is skeptical. According to the professor, ethanol is produced by a part of the plant that is not eaten by animals. As a result, there is no need to worry about this problem.这句很平凡.

Finally, the passage argues that ethanol will have no competiviness (competitiveness) on the price 这写法好怪,然而变换词性可能是好的 compared to gasoline. Howver(However), the professor holds an absoluatly(absolutely) opposite view. He admits that now ethanol needs to rely on government subsidies to lower its price at the moment. Nevertheless, support is not always needed might not be needed in the near future. As With the production rises raising and it being more available, the price will  naturally go down. And according to one study, as long as the production tripples(triples), the price will drop by 40%.

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