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[作文] 新手求大神批改作文 [复制链接]

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发表于 2016-4-28 12:25:50 |显示全部楼层
也写了篇独立作文,离考试时间不多了,求大神给点建议,个人感觉文章写出来变化太少,求指点
3.29  110304NA   Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important problems affecting our society today could be solved within our lifetime.
Nowadays, as our society has been unprecedentedly developed, we are living in a world with abundant material and our appreciation of this universe are deeper than any period of history. But we have to admit that the essential troubles we are facing are impossible to be solved in a short time.
To begin with, staying healthy is always a problem we can hardly overcome, not to mention within our lifetime. Since our body is comprised of various chemical substances, it usually runs into some problem from time to time. Although the medicine science is continually doing impossible, the vital diseases are still frustrating us, like cancer. Also, almost each time when a new epidemic bomb us, hundreds of people died. It is easy to predict that epidemics will continual hurt us.
The second thing comes to my mind that cannot be solved currently is human right. This problem involves with human nature and authorities, which seems exist as far as individuals are living in the world. For instance, the essential spirit of legislator/legislation should be equal as well as individualism, but the constitution has been modified several times and such modification will go on and on, which reflects that the eternal human right is not determined and we are still seeking to solve them since thousands of years ago.
A more important problem existing is unhappiness. Theoretically, living in a world with affluent resources would render us more happiness, but in reality, from my experience and feeling shares with people around, we are more depressed than before. We used to have a simple life. But now, the society is vexed by seemingly ridiculous problems like late marriage, suicide, etc. When we can achieve totally happiness is not assured by anyone.
Although we could not solve these problems during our life, we should not feel depressed. Instead, we should do our best to improve our living quality. After all, everyone has only one opportunity to live and death.
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