argument第三类同主题写作 8月24-25日

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Arg 31 government spending and residents attitudes on public schools -

The following appeared in a letter to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper.

In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend the city-run public schoolscomes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary priority they give to public education. For example, both as a proportion of its overall tax revenues and in absolute terms, Parson City has recently spent almost twice as much per year as Blue City has for its public schoolseven though both cities have about the same number of residents. Clearly, Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

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Argument 10/21/23
Arg 21 Dr. Field anthropologist

10) Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

Claim: Dr. Field’s conclusion about rearing practices in Tertian is invalid, and so is his observational research method.
Data: Children tended to talk more about their biological parents during Dr. Karp’s interview.
Warrant: That children tended to talk more about their biological parents implies that they were more familiar with and were raised by their biological parents.

Question1 : Whether the content that children provided during the interview actually reflect the proximity between children and their biological parents. Whether the content is accurately recorded.
Question 2: Whether the interview questions are objective enough? Is there any bias or framing problem that may induce children to talk more about their parents.
Question 3: Whether the rearing method changed within 20 years so that Dr. Field actually observed and recorded the rearing situation 20 years ago.

Claim: future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method
Data: Some anthropologists recommend using interview-centered method to obtain accurate data.
Warrant: Interview-oriented approach is assumed to be superior and accurate.

Question1: Whether the interview-oriented approach is as accurate as some anthropologists assume.  Whether the interview-centered approach can gather sufficient data the results from interview are representative.



In the passage, the author sides with Dr. Karp, whose recent findings overturn the previous conclusion by Dr. Field that children in Tertian are raised by the whole village community, and recommends adopting Dr. Karp’s interview-oriented method to conduct further study on Tertian children. However, still some questions need to be addressed so as to evaluate this argument, including questions about the interview questions and contents, questions about the evolution of rearing practice in Tertian, and the accuracy and representativeness of the interview-oriented.

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Likewise, when the author makes recommendation about adopting the interview-centered method, the author should address whether the interview-oriented approach is as accurate and favorablea what Dr. Karp and some other anthropologists assume. After all, we do not have any information about the sample size of the interview conducted by Dr. Karp. Neither do we know whether it is feasible for him and further researchers to interview a large number of children in terms of financial and time constraints. If he only interviewed several children due to these constraints, his sample size might be too diminutive to generalize and make reliable and accurate conclusion about the rearing practice in Tertian. Or if he coud only approach female children as his subjects, who were more likely to be raised by biological parents due to security and conventional concerns, his conclusion may also be less likely to be representative enough. In these cases, Dr. Karp’s interview-centered method is not favorable because it fails to generate comprehensive, accurate, and representative results regarding the rearing situation in Tertian.


分析和檢查自己的文章

It is always argued that importing new blood into the top management level is essential to ensure the prosperity of any enterprise in any field. And one way to do it is to limit the term of office of those leaders in power to ensure leadership replacement. The stipulated terms should run off in few years, for example, five years. While I agree that revitalization in the top management level might be important to any enterprise, we should also take potential costs and risks into consideration. In business and educational field, stability and experience are more important than leadership replacement; so I do not think that the term of office for leaders in these fields should be limited to few years. However, in the political field, the term of office indeed should be restricted not only to revitalize the enterprise but also to prevent power abuse and corruption. (不知道這個thesis statement會不會太長了？)

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In the business and educational field, stability within the management level is a great consideration.
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「改成In the business and educational field, stability within top management level is a more important consideration than leadership alteration and term constraint since it enables enterprises to avoid disastrous risks and uncertainties.」
Consider the business world first. In the business world, leaders usually serve for copious amount of time, sometimes their whole life. Change of leadership in top management level may imply a change in the direction of business strategy and focus. Without severe problems in top management level, constant alteration in the leadership is usually not necessary. New leadership may bring significant risk to the company, for example, severe loss due to leaders’ inexperience or strategic incoherence.  Therefore, frequent changes in the leadership may bring instability and additional risk to the company. Moreover, in the educational field, the experience is an influential factor that affects leadership.  Any recreation within the educational system should be based on empirical experiences of those in power. For example, department heads usually discover problems within the department and adjust the course structure based on their long-term observation.  
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If the department heads are constantly altered, the department will suffer from uncertainties in designing course curriculum and in making department policies. It is even difficult for the department to improve and revitalize.
Therefore, revitalization within education is not based on risky change of leadership but observation and experience.

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3) The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.

Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

开头段
According to the letter, the store owner who writes it believes that skateboarding is the direct cause of the decrease of shoppers in Central Plaza and that the prohibition of skateboarding is helpful to increase the business in the plaza. However, if we delve into the phenomenon described by the owner, some questions need to be answered to link the recommendation to the predicted result.

中间段
First of all, it is necessary to find out why the number of customers who come to the plaza and spend money has been decreasing in the past two years. The owner mainly attributes it to the popularity of skateboarding. However, there is no data to indicate that shoppers dislike the skateboarding people. Maybe shoppers discard the plaza due to its poor products or service quality, or they may also find a better place to enjoy shopping. If this is the case, there is no use prohibiting skateboarding.

改错
SV主谓一致

The conclusion is based on the assumption that the results of the survey is reliable.
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The conclusion is based on the assumption that the results of the survey are reliable.

However, some people points SV out when happening something RP under emergency, they should make a risky choice without much thinking.
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However, some people point out that when there is something happening under emergency, they should make a risky choice without much thinking.

The chairperson merely compare SV the current data with previous years recycling state
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The chairperson merely compares the current data with previous years recycling state

感想：主谓不一致或者时态错误是我之前互改里几乎每篇都会遇到，甚至不只一次的。非常值得重视的一个问题