深海的SAT ESSAY经验与教训(谢绝转载) 更新至5.5

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恩.同上~

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谢绝转载
不会吧?

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原帖由 深海lavender 于 2008-5-2 16:16 发表
至少在一个月前开始,每天带着看范文 ...

请问哪里有这么多的范文啊？

深海lavenderUID：2350207

OG上有.并且版内豆豆也上传过高分范文,搜一下就看到了.
我说的一个月不用每天看很多,1-2篇就行了.关键在于细心揣摩.:)

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感谢了!!很有价值啊//

话说我一直不知道sat作文怎么入手来着~

其实我托福的作文也没考好.只有20.直接导致了我总分只有100.真是悲剧啊~!!!!!


决定了.好好看范文~好好准备例子~!

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值得学习

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Hug Hug HugScore: 2

Essay
I think it is wrong to believe that to move up the ladder of success and achievement, that they must forget the past, repress it, and relinquish it. Everything you did and saw in the past helps you to move on. Every single happy moment, every mistake you make is getting a part of you. Your actions become habits which creates your personality and helps you to make your own experience. Therefore memories help people in their effort to learn from the past and succeed in the present. Everything we do has to do with our experiences in the past, the way we get along with people or treat them, the way we turn out to be an adult. If you don't live with making your own decisions, mistakes, and your experience with people and the world or school you won't have any examples to compare or to handle any coming situations in the future. If you get everything told you by someone, you will always wait for other people to make decisions for you and won't have your own point of view. For succeed you have to know what you want, to find that out, you have to have been through some difficult situations in the PAST.

Why this Essay Received a Score of 2
Although it expresses a point of view ("I think it is wrong to believe that to move up the ladder of success and achievement, that they must forget the past, repress it, and relinquish it"), this essay is seriously limited, exhibiting weak critical thinking, insufficient use of evidence, and serious problems with progression of ideas. The essay also demonstrates frequent problems in usage, grammar, and sentence structure. To achieve a higher score, the writer needs to develop the point of view with reasons and specific examples instead of merely repeating the same vague ideas ("Everything you did and saw in the past helps you to move on. . . . Everything we do has to do with our experiences in the past"). The essay demonstrates little mastery and is scored a 2.

SodakangUID：2468401

没错
og中也强调了concrete和abstract的关系