issue 112写作及相关问题
各位好，请大虾关于我的第一篇issue给予点评，还有相关问题。首先，关于指导语1，可以一边倒地评论吗，网上很多人说不行，但是我看OG上的关于技术的那篇范文好像就是一遍倒啊，求解？？
其次，关于让步，可以放到主体第一段吗？比如该篇：我认为是good way, but not best way，如果放到主体最后一段的话，好像不太恰当，也求解？？
这是我的第一篇习作，请大虾耐心点，呵呵。
Issue112, instruction 1.
11.23.2011 10:00AM---11:10AM
There is great discussion today about thetopic of courses choice of college students. One of the questions under debateis whether requiring college students to take a variety of courses outside theirmajor is the best way to assure that the students become truly educated. Differentpeople have different opinions. As far as I am concerned, it is true thatrequiring the students to take courses outside their major is a good way forthem to become truly educated, but it isn’t true that above method is the bestway for them to become truly educated.
Admittedly, choosing a variety of coursesbeyond their major does good to university students. They could enrich theirmind through learning more knowledge other than field of their study. Forexample, the literary students could strengthen their logic thinking ability bychoosing science courses, and the science students may enhance their aestheticcapability by virtue of taking literary classes. Another, some students may donot have interest to their major, in this case, they could search their trueinterest by taking other courses. However, what the most important thing forcollege students to acquire is critical thinking ability and learning ability,not taking courses as much as possible. So, the above method is not the bestway for students to become truly educated for several reasons listed asfollows.
To begin with, college students have rightto choose their interested courses according to instruction of college. Theyare beyond eighteen years old and they have enough ability to make their owndecisions. They should not be compelled to choose the courses outside theirfield that they never like to study heart and soul.The college have obligation to give suggestion about how to choose courses, butthey do not have right to arrange all courses for students
Also, it is not beneficial to their futurecareer for the students to take more courses outside their major. We all knowthat we live in a competitive world, so the university students have to face fiercejob market after their graduation. They must present the desirable skills andknowledge that the employers want the employees to have in order to look for adecent job. When it comes to choosing courses, undoubtedly, they should takeand focus on the major courses which do good their future job and meet therequirement of job market. Another, the university fees an tuitions areincreasing year by year, so studying in university is a strong economic burdento students and their parents. Taking more courses implies more fees andtuitions and surely increases their burden. It may also increase studyingpressure of students, even do harm to their health for they will spend moretime on study at the expense of physical exercises. Moreover, if university studentstake a variety of courses beyond their field, they will spend more time andenergy to the additional course, so they have no time to deep into the corecourse that are favorable to their job hunting.
To sum up, from what has been discussedabove, we may safely draw the conclusion that requiring university students totake courses beyond their major is not the best way for them to become trulyeducated because it will do harm to their health and future career and becausecritical thinking and learning, not taking more courses, is the most importantthing for college students. 我刚看了一个评论说，一定要有例子，像我这篇，是不是被毙了，当场？ 当然可以一边倒...Issue的写作要求并没有限制写作方向和形式...但是你的文笔要好，一边倒显然理由要更充分些
关于主体直接让步，这是可以的，当年我很多文章就是这么写的...俗话说：欲取先予...在写作中如果碰到选择或者比较的题目，如果你更倾向A，那么第一段你可以先让一步，列举些B的好处，在第二段以强转折的方式引导之后两段论述你赞同的A，关系上也更加紧密，而且你的论述可以参照B的好处，使得A比B更好，从而突出与B相比你更倾向A，也不会显得很突兀之类的
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