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The arguer comes to the conclusion that the WWAC radio should change to a news and talk format based on the asssumption that there is a continuing decline in the sales of record and listeners. It is entirely possible that they should have a change to attract more listeners, but only resting on such unwarranted assumptions, the author fails to make the argument convincing.First of all, the author cites the evidence that the listener numbers are declining and it is the result of their change to current rock-music format. This may be a factor, but the arguer does not give enough information to establish a cause-and-effect relationship between the change and decling. For there may be other reasons that cause the decline. For example, maybe they are just too familiar with the programs and music played so they find it is boring to listen to a reapeted program. And if the author wants to draw a more convicing conclusion, he/she should make a survey about why their listener numbers are declining and ruling out other possibilities.
What's more, the author
draws the conclusion that listeners in this location are not interested of music for the sales of record are declining. The author unfairly assumes that it is their disinterest that lead to the decling. In fact, maybe people do not buy records but they can listen to music form other channels. For example they can download the music from the internet etc. In a word, they do not need to buy records but this phenomenon does not indicate that they are not interested at music. Without citing evidence of who cause the decline and if they listen to music in other ways, the author's assumption is unwarranted.
Last but not the least, the author comes to the conclusion that they should change to a news and talk format which is increasingly popular in their area. This may be a good idea but the author should also give the necessity that they should change the format. The arthor does not indicate that if WWAC is comparable to other radio stations and they may have few experience of the field of news and talk format. The listeners of news and talk format may be very different from the listeners of WWAC. And the arguer does not indicate that if they have make a survey for the listeners of their own about what kind of format they like. If they do not like the change, the listener numbers may be continuly declining. Even they like the change, but because of there have been so many stations in such format, if WWAC would be competent is open to doubt.
All of these weaken the author's assumption.
To sum up, though it is possibl that they should change their format to news and talk, lacking more compelling evidence and ruling out other factors influencing the listener numbers, the arguer fails to draw the conclusion.
第二篇Argu了，仍然有很多问题，不过会继续每天坚持训练继续努力。求牛人给出一些进一步完善和整体上提升作文意见，谢谢！3。31加油！ 模板性不强，很好！写得也不错！！赞一个哦！！！ 2# chasedream2012
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