ISSUE 第一篇练习~~求修改
题目是：一个人要想了解一个社会的特点，主要通过学习大城市I concede that to understand the most important characteristic of society ,one must study its major cities,because those major cities are parts of the society,representing some unique characteristic of a certain society.However,it is not sufficient that only studying major cities to taste charaterastic of a society,in respect that even townlets and countries also have their particular specilities.
As we all known,the major cities almost are in possession of the best resource of a society ,like perfect education system ,convenient living facilities,advanced medical institution and efficient transportation,in addition rich goods from other places. On the other hand ,the major many famous doctor and excellent engineer also come to major cities,and some grand museum have been established in it.whoever could live and study in the major cities to take its charctaristic.
But considering the major cities could delegate a society is incorrect.shanghai and Beijing are the most modern cities in China,which represent the most advance culture and economic.At the same time,China also have a long history about thousands of years.It is pity that we hardly see the trace of history in those cities and the like. Admittedly,there are various museum in those palces may record the history,after all this is abstract and indirect. Though major cities just perform the aspect of prosperity and busyness of a society,a lot of reality and native custom exist in countries and downlet,for example that many farmers are plowing in farmland,even more serious is some others are hungry and lacking house to live in China.America,the most affluent countries in world,also have some people rely on Government relief fund,and so on.A mounts of tranditional costom subsist in countries rather than big cities.
In general, the major cities become more and more international ,duing to the frequently communication between countries,leading to the phenomenon that any of those big cities consist
Of others’culture and technique . Not only indigene live in those major cities,but also many foreigner.The identification between major cities indigene are blurred .On the contrary,townlet and countries retain many trace.So,if someone want to understand the characteristics of a society in the the true sense,who should consentrade on townlet and country rather than major cities.
亲，能把instruction一起贴出来好吗。。。
个人认为第一段不应该出现because内容，这属于具体论述部分。然后第二段的中心句应该是理解大城市可以帮助XXX。
in possession of==>possesses，反了吧
第三段第一句可以写成：However, assuming that big cities can represent the society is in correct.
应该是it is "a" pity that吧？
perform the aspect of prosperity？这是什么？
第三段先讲历史和博物馆，然后讲农民和大众？
a lot of reality and native custom？现实？大城市不现实？你是想说Other small towns tell you more about/are more representative of/reveal what the life is like for the majority of people？
主体只有两段？ Basilisk 发表于 2012-8-30 11:26 static/image/common/back.gif
亲，能把instruction一起贴出来好吗。。。
个人认为第一段不应该出现because内容，这属于具体论述部分。然 ...
嗯，谢谢哈~我仔细修改下 ，题目就是前面的中文啊 会不会是我翻译的不到位？ duanzhuojun321 发表于 2012-8-30 19:47 static/image/common/back.gif
嗯，谢谢哈~我仔细修改下 ，题目就是前面的中文啊 会不会是我翻译的不到位？
新g作文除了题目还有instruction。。。instruction会影响写法。。。
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