【GRE作文互助组】Juanita's Argument 作业贴
Argument 73:While it sounds attractive that the Mozart School of Music may be the best choice for children to take music lesson, the writer did not provide sufficient information which will influence the parents' decisions.
Although the Mozart School of Music promises that child at any age and ability level could enter the school without examination, this kind of promise is under the conditions that, for example, the author assumes the school has the ability to make youngsters , who may just have little music foundations or even do not interested in music, acknowledge and fall in love with music. And the argument build upon the implication that no matter how ignored the child is at the beginning of the study, he could get improved after enter the school.Unfortunately, many parents may keep away from this school because of this obvious unrealistic promise.
Top schools usually have the excellent source of the teachers, who may often be really famous in their studying field. The author mentioned above that the faculty in the Mozart School of Music also contains some of the well-known musicians. But the writer did not offer the exact number of outstanding musicians teaching in the Mozart School of Music, perhaps only one or two masters are teaching in this school. Besides, parents also want to know that even if there are lot of masters in this school, do they really teach students rather than be titular teachers? Of course, not every course could be taught by extraordinary musician, so we should consider the performance of other faculty members in this school.
Additional, the author implies that many students will be prosperous after they graduate from the Mozart School of Music.Actually the writer unfairly attribute the graduates' succes to the education they received in the Mozart School of Music. If the student himself did not take efforts to learn music or have no talent, would he becomes successful? Also, many other reasons could lead to one person's success such as parents' support and family environment. What's more, the argument simply equates becoming famous and getting highly paid with musical achievement. For instance, Franz Schubert, who is seen as one of the leading exponents of the early Romantic era in music, became famous after his death.
In conclusion, parents, who a choosing the most suitable music school for their children, should consider not only the reasons the author suggest, but also the tuition fee whether the family could afford. And many other information should be given as I mentioned above. 亲，加油哦~
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