issue 32 求改
College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
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提纲：
选择工作机会多的领域容易找到工作，便于经济独立，还债等。
然而，如果一个学生专业知识掌握得不好，在工作机会多的领域也难以找到工作。
因此，选择专业领域的时候还应当结合自身的兴趣和天赋。
除了考虑兴趣和天赋外，不能忽视的是不断变化的职业市场。
总结。
The speaker suggests that when a college student chooses a major, he should base his choice on the job market in order to easily get a job after they graduate. I fundamentally agree with this suggestion because it does sound in certain extent. However, as college students, in facing with the question of making of choice of a field of study, they need to consider more aspects rather than only the availability of jobs in that field.
Firstly, it seems that choosing a field which is full of job opportunities benefits college students a lot. They can easily get a job and apply what they learn into practice. Owning a job means they do not need to worry about their lives after graduation. Especially for those who loan to go to college, stable income means they can pay off the mortgage faster and economic dependence from their impoverished parents. Consider the economic regression and the fiercely competing job market today, hunting for a job is not easy for students who without any experience. Therefore, mastering knowledge of a job rich field improves the possibility of getting a position.
However, if a student do not study well, he may still hardly find a job in the field of his major which fills with job vacancies. It's reasonable that none of the employer is willing to hire a student who lacks required skills and knowledge. Therefore, to decide which field to study also need to consider one's hobbies and talent. Hobby is a great engine on the way to gain achievements, because it helps you keep enthusiasm towards what you learn. What's more, if one can apply his talent on the field, it saves him more time and endeavor to get to success than average person.
Even we consider the individual hobbies and talents in choosing a study field, if we hope to be hired after graduation, we also need to consider the trend of the ever changing job market. Due to the rapid development of science and technology, the hot field is switching continually. A field may be very popular when you enter college, but declines four years later because of the replacement by an upgraded technology. Therefore, not only need to choose a field full of job vacancies, but also have to analyze the trend of future when college students make their choices.
To sum up, when college students choose a field as their future majors, they had better combine individual hobbies, capability as well as the job market situation now and future together. And actually, we should also aware that most of the study fields related with each other. Therefore, remaining flexible in thinking and foster the ability of quick self-learning can enable us to apply the mastered knowledge in any new fields. That's the footstone in the competing job market. alanxuan 发表于 2012-9-7 15:25 static/image/common/back.gif
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谢谢哇~ alanxuan 发表于 2012-9-7 15:25 static/image/common/back.gif
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改得好用心，谢谢:) 修改：
The speaker suggests that when college students choose a major, they should base their choices on the job market in order to easily get a job after they graduate. I fundamentally agree with this suggestion because it is sound to certain extent. However, as college students, when facing with the choice of major, they need to consider more aspects than the availability of jobs in that field.
Firstly, it seems that choosing a field of many job opportunities benefits college students a lot. They can easily get a job and apply what they learn into practice. Having a job means they do not need to worry about their lives after graduation. Especially for those who loan to go to college, stable income means they can pay off the mortgage sooner and get rid of economic dependence to their impoverished parents. Consider the economic depression and the fiercely competitive job market today, hunting for a job is not easy for students without any experience. Therefore, possibility of getting a position will be higher if college students study in a hot field.
However, if a student does not study well, he may still hardly find a job in the field of his major where job vacancies are enormous. There is no doubt that none of the employer is willing to hire a student who lacks required skills and knowledge. For most people, if he is tired of a certain subject or lack of capability in some fields, he’ll hardly master that knowledge well. Therefore, to decide which field to study also needs to consider one's hobbies and talent. Hobby is a great motivation on our’s way to achievements, because it helps us keep enthusiastic over what we learn. What's more, if we can apply our talent on our study field, we can learn more efficiently than average person.
Last but not least, to be hired after graduation, the trend of the ever changing job market cannot be ignored. Due to the rapid development of science and technology, the hot field is switching continuously. A field may be very popular when you enter college, but declines four years later because of the replacement by an upgraded technology. Therefore, college students not only need to choose a field full of job vacancies, but also have to analyze the trend of future when they make their choices.
To sum up, when college students choose a field as their future majors, they had better combine individual hobbies, capability as well as the job market situation now and future together. And actually, we should also be aware that most of the study fields are related with each other. Therefore, remaining flexible in thinking and fostering the ability of quick self-learning can enable us to apply the mastered knowledge in any new fields. That's the footstone of success in the competitive job market.
看看。。。 一见到这种贴近个人生活的issue就头疼，貌似很难用准备的例子去支撑论点。个人感觉是不是论述的时候是不是把"a certain subject","some fields"之类的换成具体的什么biology,fine arts之类的更好？第三段甚至可以加点名人的例子?
继续头疼。。。
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