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Basilisk 发表于 2012-10-9 10:28:25

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太肤浅了吧，缺乏想象力将难以想象，拥有一定的经验是必不可少的。参考科技影响思维的3、4分文及其评语。能不能说出一句definite的话。3，4分文里面假大空的什么golden age of technology，opening up whole new worlds。

而且你这个正反合合的起来不？你1，2说明不可割裂了不，怎么看起来就是可以割裂的样子，按领域分。

reason里想说的是constraints of established habits and attitudes的问题，这是关于经验和想象力的矛盾所在，你没有涉及。

我估计这可能是中国学生的通病吧，看到什么复杂论题都想抹稀泥。能不能有个strong opinion

vatfy 发表于 2012-10-9 20:59:55

Basilisk 发表于 2012-10-9 10:28 static/image/common/back.gif
太肤浅了吧，缺乏想象力将难以想象，拥有一定的经验是必不可少的。参考科技影响思维的3、4分文及其评语。能 ...

额， 提纲确实水了， 麻烦你看看我实际写的吧

panmingming2008 发表于 2012-10-29 16:41:09

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vatfy 发表于 2012-10-9 20:59 static/image/common/back.gif
额， 提纲确实水了， 麻烦你看看我实际写的吧


Issue 105

Claim: Imagination is a more valuable asset than experience.
Reason: People who lack experience are free to imagine what is possible without the constraints of established habits and attitudes.

题目要求：Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

正文：
The speaker asserts that the imagination is more valuable than experience due to the reason that"who lack experience are free to imagine what is possible without the constraints of established habits and attitudes". I am inclined to disagree this opinion. （用否定的方式立论，不同意原题论点。）

admittedly, it is known to all that the importance of the imagination. we can look around, the car we drive, the aircraft we take, the cell phone
glue in our hand. all of these can not be designed and made without imagination. For instance, the wright brother's first plane （第一个让步理由：想象很重要。）

however, is it safe to draw a conclusion that the established habits and attitudes impose constraints on imagination all the time? It may be unreasonable in some cases. wright brothers, are credited for making the first controlled, powered flight in 1903. But, in fact, the wrights began interested in flight in the 1890s, and they had been experimenting with gilders and other vehicles for a long time, there is no doubt that they are experienced about flying. After tens of thousands of tests, they have imagined and made a first real plane. （第二个理由：固有习惯和态度并未限制想象力的发挥。）

BEN评：立论不够直截了当。
第一个理由用莱特兄弟，你如何建立分论点与例子的联系。不能光举例子了事。
第二个理由还用莱特兄弟，你想说明什么？分论点表达不够清晰，例子与分论点的联系也没有表达清楚。

另外，同学们老用莱特兄弟，“他们”也真够累死啰。可以用其他身边或最近几年发生的实例，来论证“想象力与经验之间的联系”，我想读者会更感兴趣，也更方便展开。






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