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3. "It is more important to allocate money for immediate, existing social problems than to spend it on long-term research that might help future generations."与其花钱进行可能有助于后代的长期性研究，还不如把钱花在迫在眉睫，已经存在的社会问题上。
In this contradictory era of pleasure and pain, loyalty and treachery, joy of life and fear of future, which arise a considerable of problems government has been bored by. No matter how serious and urgent one aspect turns out to be in a certain period, government is supposed to call for a balance between allocating money for immediate problems and spending it on long-term research when making budget.
To be responsible for current citizens, government should solve those existing social problems, such as unemployment, illiteracy, and social crimes, in order to oil the social machine. To some extent, increasing the amount of jobs may get more benefit than itself, because it is a way to release social pressure and dissatisfaction of those unemployed workers who may eventually become a ticklish factor to society. Additionally, illiteracy is to society as the shortest baffle is to a cask. And it could do nothing but lengthen the shortest baffle to the same length as the other baffles if more water is supposed to be poured in this cask. As a malignant tumor, social crimes do harm to the economy and security of our society and, in some cases, is a potential fuse especially when there is an internal or external opposition to the government, so, to keep society stabilized and booming, government has to pay more attention to social crimes.
If not, citizens may feel under peril and lose confidence to the ruling class. As a result, for saving money, the government is bogged down in Sargasso Sea of troubles.
Nonetheless, the governors are not born only for today’s people. That is to say, another significant and meaningful responsibility of government is to try its best to supply our posterity a society that consists of people who are well educated and obtain a desirable job or career, less juvenile crime and drug, and stable economy. As H.W.Beecher pointed, “We should so live and labor in our time that what came to us as seed may go to the next generation as blossom, and what came to us as blossom may go to them as fruit. This is what we mean by progress.”
It is true that long-term research could not give out an immediate value, for example, how to afforest a wasteland, but we shouldn’t be so narrow foci and misprize the real value normally coming up in about decades or more. “Life can only be understood backwards, but it must be lived forwards”, said by Kierkergaard. The phrase “be lived forwards” here, in this case, means digging out the profit in future, the same as futures. Although no one knows whether or not the future is in concord with what we expect, we still could invest in it based on a pile of wide investigation and a cogent demonstration rather than a gambling.
Simply put, without spending money on immediate and existing social problems, our society cannot keep flourish and robust. Without investing on so many long-term researches, we will live no guarantees and aimless. Therefore, to ensure the stability and health as well as lasting development of our society, spending money on immediate social problems and investing on long-term researches weigh the same. 3. "It is more important to allocate money for immediate, existing social problems than to spend it on long-term research that might help future generations."
与其花钱进行可能有助于后代的长期性研究，还不如把钱花在迫在眉睫，已经存在的社会问题上。
In this contradictory era of pleasure and pain, loyalty and treachery, joy of life and fear of future, which arise（give rise to） a considerable （少了个number?）of problems government has been bored by. No matter how serious and urgent one aspect turns out to be in a certain period, government is supposed to call for a balance between allocating money for immediate problems and spending it on long-term research when making budget. 开头不错！直白入题而又不失精彩。
To be responsible for current citizens, government should solve those existing social problems, such as unemployment, illiteracy, and social crimes, in order to oil the social machine. To some extent, increasing the amount of jobs may get more benefit than itself（get…itself? 表达的不是很清楚）, because it is a way to release social pressure and dissatisfaction of those unemployed （workers多余，能省则省） who may eventually become a ticklish factor(前边还是those呢，单复数！) to（to?）society. Additionally, illiteracy is to society as the shortest baffle is to a cask. And it could do nothing but lengthen the shortest baffle to the same length as the other baffles if more water is supposed to be poured in this cask.(没看懂，是不是瓶颈的意思？) As a malignant tumor（用词不错！）, social crimes do harm to the economy and security of our society and, in some cases, is a potential fuse（这里用名词fuse倒不如什么potentially destructive/detrimental之类的，形容词反倒更加直接形象了） especially when there is an（an --> some） internal or external opposition to the government,（这里要另起一句） so, to keep society stabilized and booming,（to maintain a …. society） government has to pay more attention to social crimes. 中文构思的时候想到的是“为了维护…所以要…”但是英文没必要按照这个语序的！完全可以So government must …. so as to … 行文就更加紧凑了。
If not, citizens may feel under peril and lose confidence to the ruling class. As a result, for(我觉得这里要用though而不是for，意思上差别很大) saving money, the government is（will be） bogged down in Sargasso Sea of troubles.
Nonetheless, the governors are not born only for today’s people（today’s people --> the contemporaries）. That is to say, another significant and meaningful responsibility of government is to try its best to supply our posterity a society that consists of people who are well educated and obtain a desirable job or career, less juvenile crime and drug, and stable economy.（这个句子写得有点怪，不过没有原则性错误） As H.W.Beecher pointed, “We should so live and labor in our time that what came to us as seed may go to the next generation as blossom, and what came to us as blossom may go to them as fruit. This is what we mean by progress.”
It is true that long-term research could not give out(give out?) an immediate value, for example, how to afforest a wasteland, but we shouldn’t be so narrow foci and misprize the real value normally coming up in about decades or more. “Life can only be understood backwards, but it must be lived forwards”, said by Kierkergaard. The phrase “be lived forwards” here, in this case, means digging out the profit in future, the same as futures. Although no one knows whether or not the future is in concord with what we expect, we still could invest in it based on a pile of wide investigation and a cogent demonstration rather than a gambling.
Simply put, without spending money on immediate and existing social problems, our society cannot keep flourish (flourishing) and robust. Without investing on so many long-term researches, we will live no guarantees and aimless(?). Therefore, to ensure the stability and health as well as lasting development of our society, spending money on immediate social problems and investing on long-term researches weigh the same.
这是我这几天以来看到的，可以说最好的一篇文章了。立意立在了balance上面，通篇模仿specialist/generalist的风格，而且模仿得相当成功。用词基本上准确，行文平和而一气呵成。力度上可能不及一边倒的文章，不过我觉得应该至少是5分之作了。
提出几点问题：写句子的时候注意语序的组织，并且尽量保持紧凑；用词尽量要简练，保持精确就可以了。最后一点的keep flourish似乎是词性不对，live no guarantees and aimless
可能词性上有问题，并且违反了平行的原则。开头的arise的话，一般都是problem arise，暂时并没有见过arise problem的用法。克服掉小问题。
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