issue63, 3.12就在眼前，哪位帮忙给一下指点：）
issue63"To truly understand your own culture—no matter how you define it—requires personal knowledge of at least one other culture, one that is distinctly different from your own."Do you truly understand your own culture, defined as traditions handed over from generation to generation? Most people may say no. Then, do you have interest to study it? As a member of the nation, the people, the majority may say yes. But how can we study and understand it? Some people may suggest reading numerous traditional works famous in the history. Yet, is it enough? In my opinion, the best way of a true understand of a culture is to know not only itself but also some other cultures.
No matter in history or in modern society, there is any doubt that no culture exists independently. In ancient times, our ancestors often change goods as the earliest form of commerce, during which cultures interacted each other underlying, for every good was so specialized, containing unique techniques, colorful draws. Later, in middle age, some business people or missionaries traveled around the world, bringing books with them, which played an important role in the exchange of culture. Marco Polo, a famous explorer, had been to China three times, and then brought some modern ideas from China to his motherland, those ideas further effecting Europe at that time. Indeed, in this day and age, people are inclined to use globalization in daily life: globalize industries, globalize economy, globalize culture, etc. People all over the world listen to different radio stations, watch programs from various countries' stations, read internationally affected newspaper and magazines. Therefore, every culture affected by one culture, influences at least one another at the same time.
When we read another culture, it will help us understand our culture better. As cultures effects each other, if we only study ours without the help of others, we may not truly understand ours. Take American people as an instance, as known to all, several hundreds ago, no except some original people lived in the continent of America. Soon after Columbus first found America, more and more Europeans traveled across the Atlantic, bring customs, goods, and guns to this continent. Even nowadays, people coming from different countries living in US, continuously adding the element of new cultures into this existing one of US, and this is why US is regarded as a country of mixed culture. If anyone wants to understand American culture, he have to know what happening in Europe led some citizens to escaping from their motherlands, similarly, he have to know British culture, Spanish culture, Chinese culture, etc, to help him understand the source of American culture and then find the similarities and varieties in those cultures, thus, he will really know how American culture formed.
Additionally, during the comparison between our culture and others, we will find the unique of our own culture. As nations experience various situations in their development, their have totally different background. As a Chinese citizen, after listening to Rock & Roll music, reading Shakespeare’s works, appreciating Picasso’s painting, I realize the treasure of Chinese traditional culture: folk tunes, poems in Tang Dynasty, Confucius’s philosophical thoughts, which experienced the tests of history and became cannon. Without comparisons, I might see them as something natural in daily life, ignoring their values; even, denying their affect in Chinese history. According to experience by myself, I believe that if there exist some differences that bring people to think, they will truly understand the value of their own culture.
All in all, to better know one’s culture, he or she should study it carefully, with the conference of other culture. And only through comparison have we got a new sight of our own culture. issue63"To truly understand your own culture—no matter how you define it—requires personal knowledge of at least one other culture, one that is distinctly different from your own."
Do you truly understand your own culture, defined as traditions handed over from generation to generation? Most people may say no. Then, do you have interest to study it? As a member of the nation, the people, the majority may say yes. But how can we study and understand it? Some people may suggest reading numerous traditional works famous in the history. Yet, is it enough? In my opinion, the best way of a true understand of a culture is to know not only itself but also some other cultures.
No matter in history or in modern society, there is any doubt that no culture exists independently. In ancient times, our ancestors often change goods as the earliest form of commerce, during which cultures interacted each other underlying, for every good was so specialized, containing unique techniques, colorful draws. Later, in middle age(the Middle Age), some business people(businessmen) or missionaries traveled around the world, bringing books with them, which played an important role in the exchange of culture. Marco Polo, a famous explorer, had been to China three times, and then brought some modern(?不太好，用eastern怎么样？) ideas from China to his motherland, those ideas further effecting Europe at that time. Indeed, in this day and age, people are inclined to use globalization(use?不太好吧) in daily life: globalize industries, globalize economy, globalize culture, etc.( etc.后面少个句号) People all over the world listen to different radio stations, watch programs from various countries' stations, read internationally affected newspaper and magazines. Therefore, every culture affected by one culture, influences at least one another at the same time.（分析得很好啊）
When we read another culture, it will help us understand our culture better. As cultures effects each other, if we only study ours without the help of others, we may not truly understand ours. Take American people as an instance, as known to all, several hundreds ago, no except some original people lived in the continent of America. Soon after Columbus first found America, more and more Europeans traveled across the Atlantic, bring customs, goods, and guns to this continent. Even nowadays, people coming（coming可以不要） from different countries living in US, continuously adding（add） the element of new cultures into this existing one of US, and this is why US is regarded as a country of mixed culture. If anyone wants to understand American culture, he have to know what happening in Europe led some citizens to escaping from their motherlands, similarly, he have to know British culture, Spanish culture, Chinese culture, etc., to help him understand the source of American culture and then find the similarities and varieties in those cultures, thus, he will really know how American culture formed.
Additionally, during the comparison between our culture and others, we will find the unique of our own culture. As nations experience various situations in their development, their have totally different background. As a Chinese citizen, after listening to Rock & Roll music, reading Shakespeare’s works, appreciating Picasso’s painting, I realize the treasure of Chinese traditional culture: folk tunes, poems in Tang Dynasty, Confucius’s philosophical thoughts, which experienced the tests of history and became cannon. Without comparisons, I might see them as something natural in daily life, ignoring their values; even, denying their affect in Chinese history. According to experience by myself, I believe that if there exist some differences that bring people to think, they will truly understand the value of their own culture.(最好不要用自己的例子，显得不太客观)
All in all, to better know one’s culture, he or she should study it carefully, with the conference of other culture. And only through comparison have we got a new sight of our own culture.
写得很好，无话可说！
继续努力，杀G成功！ 第二段：handed over,最好为handed dwon from one generation to another.新概念里就是这样的原文，地道的很。
not only, but also.可不可以换为not only, but sth also.
结尾不错哦，有新意。
总的说来，不错，要是是在45分钟内完成的就太好了，4。5总没问题了，例子虽然简单但很深刻。再接再厉！ 先佩服一把,作者的语言功力很扎实,如果是定时的,那就更厉害了
不过还是要砸两块砖,提一点小小的意见,见谅
下午才看见也是写这个issue的帖子,做了一些思考,主要是关于题目的内容的
首先, 你对这个论点是持赞成的意见,我觉得有点太绝对了. is it the best way? 现在很多人都在谈文化入侵,你是否有考虑过这个现象呢?
其次,我觉得你举美国文化的例子没有用很逻辑的语言总结,倒不如和下面一段揉合到一起,因为这个两段之间确实没有什么逻辑上面的递进关系
最后,觉得整篇文章读起来有点没有层次的感觉,如果能多加一些表示逻辑关系的连词更好
祝莫名N同学取得满意的好成绩:) 汗！！同一天考，看了你的自卑了 Do you truly understand your own culture, defined as traditions handed over from generation to generation? Most people may say no. Then, do you have interest to study it? As a member of the nation, the people, the majority(这应该再有一格逗号吧) may say yes. But how can we study and understand it? Some people may suggest reading numerous traditional works famous in the history. Yet, is it enough? In my opinion, the best way of a true understand of a culture is to know not only itself but also some other cultures. 一连串的问句开头，有水平，第一次见，新颖！呵呵。
No matter in history or in modern society, there is any doubt that no culture exists independently. In ancient times, our ancestors often change goods as the earliest form of commerce, during which cultures interacted each other underlying, for every good was so specialized, containing unique techniques, colorful draws. Later, in middle age, some business people or missionaries traveled around the world, bringing books with them, which played an important role in the exchange of culture. Marco Polo, a famous explorer, had been to China three times, and then brought some modern ideas from China to his motherland, those ideas further effecting Europe at that time（请问在这种情况下，即要修饰的词被状语格开的时候，不用这种分词短语，用非限定性定语从句行吗？）. Indeed, in this day and age, people are inclined to use（我觉得用refer to更能体现你要表达的意思） globalization in daily life: globalize industries, globalize economy, globalize culture, etc. People all over the world listen to different radio stations, watch programs from various countries' stations, read internationally affected newspaper and magazines. Therefore, every culture affected by one culture, influences at least one another at the same time. 这一段没有切入主题，好像是为下一段作铺垫.
When we read another culture, it will help us understand our culture better. As cultures effects （affect）each other, if we only study ours without the help of others, we may not truly understand ours. Take American people as an instance, as known to all, several hundreds ago, no except some original people lived in the continent of America. Soon after Columbus first found America, more and more Europeans traveled across the Atlantic, bring customs, goods, and guns to this continent. Even nowadays, people coming from different countries （are）living in US, continuously adding the element of new cultures into this existing one of US, and this is why US is regarded as a country of mixed culture. If anyone wants to understand American culture, he have to know what happening in Europe led some citizens to escaping from their motherlands, similarly, he have（has to know British culture, Spanish culture, Chinese culture, etc, to help him understand the source of American culture and then find the similarities and varieties in those cultures, thus, he will really know how American culture formed.
Additionally, during the comparison between our culture and (that of) others, we will find the unique of our own culture. As nations experience various situations in their development, their (they) have totally different background. As a Chinese citizen, after listening to Rock & Roll music, reading Shakespeare’s works, appreciating Picasso’s painting, I realize the treasure（这里我觉得这里应该强调文化的独特性即你前面说得unique，用treasure不太合适，而且给我的感觉像是在贬前面提级的几种外国的文化形式） of Chinese traditional culture: folk tunes, poems in Tang Dynasty, Confucius’s philosophical thoughts, which experienced the tests of history and became cannon. Without comparisons, I might see them as something natural in daily life, ignoring their values; even, (这个逗号有必要吗？)denying their affect in Chinese history. According to experience by myself, I believe that if there exist some differences that bring people to think, they will truly understand the value of their own culture.
All in all, to better know one’s culture, he or she should study it carefully, with the conference of other culture. And only through comparison have we got a new sight of our own culture.
第一次改你的文章，看完了都没信心了，写的很不错，还有一个星期就考试了，肯定没问题的，呵呵。
最后问一个问题，in this day and age , 这种说法你有把握吗？ 关于you,好象不大适合频繁的出现或者是不出现为妙。老米和我门说的“你”概念不一样
个人意见：） 一上午的课，累~~~~
下午在模考~~
晚上上来看到有那么多XDJM给我指点真是万分感激
既然大家那么热情，我也来切磋一下：
1。sniper613提出不要用自己的例子
我觉得大例子举不出，身边的例子想不去，举自己的例子应该可以吧
而且这是个人经历，别人无从考证，而且如果有相同意见的，反而还会有知音的感觉
不知道这样想对不对，请指教。
2。TO：caspereye
文化入侵的确是一个方面，我也想到过，但那样的话，我觉得表达起来有点复杂，论点不好归纳，所以就砍掉了。
而且各人看法不一，我觉得只要能自圆其说就可以了。
连词是我的薄弱环节，谢谢caspereye的提醒
3。TO： cale
Marco Polo, a famous explorer, had been to China three times, and then brought some modern ideas from China to his motherland, those ideas further effecting Europe at that time。你提出用定语从句，我觉得可以吧，但是我怕来个which别人不知道我指的是什么，所以就用了个分词的
in this day and age 用法绝对正确，老外就这么用的！
4。TO：Fun_Yuan_23
我不太清楚老米的“你”是指什么，能告诉我吗？两者有什么不一样？
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