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issue215"The bombardment of visual images in contemporary society has the effect of making people less able to focus clearly and extensively on a single issue over a long period of time."When the first television was invented in last century, along with videos, cassettes, advertisements, soap operas, movies, etc, visual images have been bombarding in this world. Faced with millions of visual images everyday, people are likely to ignore their clear and extensive thinking; however, in my opinion, people should still think logically, while collecting useful information in the visual images.
Generally speaking, visual images are always helping people better understand the information the images carries with. Little babies, unable to understand parents words, unable to chat, have the strongest feeling with nothing other than what they see through their eyes, which shows the human nature that humans easily get interests in visual images and therefore this is one of the most effective way for humans to accept information. Take school education as an instance, as media technology develops, teachers are wildly used this techniques in their classes, making slides by software on computers, showing some videos. In this way, students do not complain about the bore of coping whole blackboard filled with words any more; on the contrary, they are soon attracted by the beautiful pictures in the slides, and never feel hard to read the big and regular words in slides compared with small and illegible words. Obviously, students are willing to imagine, leading to easier understanding the content of the class, for the visual images provide them with interests.
However, with high efficiency of producing visual images, people cannot absorb them; let alone true understanding. Compared with reading, people more concern about the plot of the story and the destination of protagonists, ignoring the background of society, the characters of the roles, even the main idea of the author, to which readers pay more attention. The bombardment of visual images hastens people to accept, and thus people themselves are lacking of time for further analysis. Additionally, as the humanity nature, people can grasp the facial phenomenon at first, which render them mistakenly think that they have got the inner essence and thus, prevent from real understanding.
Indeed, to use these visual images properly, it is necessary for us to learn to pick up useful ones and combine them together to get the information we need with a logical thinking. It may be similar with the courses of making a film. As known to all, although a film always takes one and half an hour, it has to contain a story of four or five hours. When the prior scenes shooting, the major work of later stage is to edit the film, that is, directors often choose some images which can describe the intrinsic activities of the roles and show the substance expressed by this film. Similarly, when people get so many visual images, not all of them are equally useful; therefore, people have to pick up some to find the relationship among them and get the essence. Otherwise, people may be led to a wrong view. For instance, there are always some violent scenes on TV, but we cannot regard violence as something moral to be propagandized, for some exhibitions, magazines, leaflets have told us that they are by-products during the development of the society. How we see this phenomenon is to compare the two resources of visual images together, finding that the scenes on TV are the plots of fictional stories so that it is not the mainstream in moral.
All in all, the appearance of visual images brings people to an ocean of information, and it should be an assistance to help people collect what they need rather than a blocker for people to get the true understanding. Thus, only people marry visual images to logic together do they focus on an issue clearly and extensively. 大家帮我改一下吧，
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issue215"The bombardment of visual images in contemporary society has the effect of making people less able to focus clearly and extensively on a single issue over a long period of time."When the first television was invented in last century, along with videos, cassettes, advertisements, soap operas, movies, etc, visual images have been bombardingbombarded in this world. Faced with millions of visual images everyday稍显夸张, people are likely to ignore是ignore 还是 incapable to do so? their clear and extensive thinking; however, in my opinion, people should题目是说images 使人们难于集中注意力，而不是人们应该或者不应该集中注意力，问题的关键是能否集中注意力，而非“应该集中注意力，同时采集有用的视觉信息，你空泛假设了人们有区分有用和无用的视觉信息并且不受信息爆炸的影响的能力。 still think logically, while collecting useful information in the visual images.
Generally speaking, visual images are always helping people better understand the information the images carries with. Little babies, unable to understand parents’ words, unable to chat, have the strongest feeling with nothing other than what they see through their eyes, which shows the human nature that humans easily get interests in visual images and therefore this is one of the most effectiveearly days choice means most effective? way for humans to accept information. Take school education as an instance, as media technology develops, teachers are wildly usedteachers are used? this techniques in their classes, making slides by software on computers, showing some videos. In this way, students do not complain about the bore of coping whole blackboard filled with words any more; on the contrary, they are soon attracted by the beautiful pictures in the slides, and never feel hard to read the big and regular words in slides compared with small and illegible wordson the blackboard. Obviously, students are willing to imagine,which provides them with interests,and leads to easier understanding the content of the class, leading to easier understanding the content of the class, for the visual images provide them with interests.
However, in contrast to the high...with high efficiency of producing visual images, people cannot absorb them最好加一个effectively; let alone true understanding. Compared with reading, people more concernare more concerned about the plot of the story and the destinationlocation? of theprotagonists, ignoring the background of society, the characters of the roles, even the main idea of the author, to which readers pay more attention这句多余了，而且有结构错误. The bombardment of visual images hastens people to accept没有根据的论点，从上下文看不出支持, and thus people themselves are lacking of time for further analysis. Additionally, as the humanity naturehuman nature, people can grasp the facial phenomenon at first, which render them mistakenly think that they have got the inner essence and thus, prevent from real understanding.still lack support eg.or analysis
Indeed, to use these visual images properly, it is necessary for us to learn to pick up useful ones and combine them together to get the information we need with adelete a logical thinking. It may be similar with the coursesprocess of making a film. As known to all, although a film always takes one and half an houror so, it has to contain a story of four or five hoursits content is usually more than it had shown. When the prior scenes shootingare finished, the major work of later stage后台制作？you'd better avoid this specific word and paraphase it is to edit the film, that is, directors often choose some images which can describe the intrinsic activities of the roles and show the substance expressed by this film. Similarly, when people get so many visual images, not all of them are equally useful; therefore, people have to pick up some to find the relationship among them and get the essence. Otherwise, people may be led to a wrong view. For instance, there are always some violent scenes on TV, but we cannot regard violence as something moral to be propagandized, for some exhibitions, magazines, leaflets have told us that they are by-products during the development of the society这个与前文后期制作，挑选拍摄片断有关系吗？. How we see this phenomenon is to compare the two resources of visual images together, finding that the scenes on TV are the plots of fictional stories so that it is not the mainstream in moral又转道MORAL 来了 :( .
All in all, the appearance of visual images brings people to an ocean of information, and it should be an assistance to help people collect what they need rather than a blocker for people to get the true understanding. Thus, only people marry visual images to logic together do they focus on an issue clearly and extensively.
to be frank, your issue is not qualified considering your days left, I suggest you read the sample issues again and again to better understand the requiements, and as your issue appears an incapability of fluent word use and sentence construction, I think you'd better memorize some words and phrases which are in common use.
anyway good luck. :D 谢谢SYD的修改：）
有几个疑问：
1。我可以理解成人们不能够集中精力，但仍建议他们要用logic去思考吗？
可能我在表达上有一个跨越，没有过渡
2。倒数第二段里，我只是把人们挑选信息的过程比喻成剪辑电影而已，而后面对于violence scenes的判断是一个例证
3。violence scenes是人们关于它是否属于moral 的一个例子，我并没有要讲moral怎么样，是不是觉得象重新起了一个ISSUE的TOPIC一样？ issue215"The bombardment of visual images in contemporary society has the effect of making people less able to focus clearly and extensively on a single issue over a long period of time."
When the first television was invented in last century(when the first advent of television), along with videos, cassettes, advertisements, soap operas, movies, etc, visual images have been bombarding in this(the) world. Faced(Facing为什么用被动啊？后面的主语是people啊！) with millions of visual images everyday, people are likely to ignore their clear and extensive thinking; however, in my opinion, people should still think logically, while collecting useful information in the visual images.
Generally speaking, visual images are always helping people better understand the information the images carries（carry主谓不一致啊！） with. Little babies, unable to understand parents words, unable to chat, have the strongest feeling with nothing other than what they see through their eyes, which shows the human nature that humans easily get interests in visual images and therefore this is one of the most effective way for humans to accept（我觉得receive或reach要好点，因为human不一定accept信息，我觉得接受和获得不一样！） information. Take school education as an instance, （；）as media technology develops, teachers are wildly（widely） used this（these） techniques in their classes, making slides by software on computers, showing some videos. In this way, students do not complain about the bore of coping whole blackboard filled with words any more; on the contrary, they are soon attracted by the beautiful pictures in the slides, and never feel hard to read the big and regular words in slides compared（为什么不是comparing啊？我不知道这是这么用的！） with small and illegible words. Obviously, students are willing to imagine, leading to easier understanding the content of the class, for the visual images provide them with interests.
However, with high efficiency of producing visual images, people cannot absorb them; let alone true understanding. Compared with reading, people more concern about the plot（plots） of the story and the destination of protagonists, ignoring the background of society, the characters of the roles, even the main idea of the author, to which readers pay more attention. The bombardment of visual images hastens people to accept, and thus people themselves are lacking of time for further analysis. Additionally, as the humanity nature, people can grasp the facial phenomenon at first, which render them mistakenly think that they have got the inner essence and thus, prevent（them）from real understanding.（我感觉没有深入论证一样，只是说了很多例子，大家都这样啊！）
Indeed, to use these visual images properly, it is necessary for us to learn to pick up useful ones and combine them together to get the information（想问一下这里的that可以省略啊？而且感觉we need with a logical thinking不知道和前面有什么关系！感觉不通一样！ ） we need with a logical thinking. It may be similar with the courses of making a film. As known to all, although a film always takes one and half an hour, it has to contain a story of four or five hours. When the prior scenes shooting, the major work of later stage is to edit the film, that is, directors often choose some images which can describe the intrinsic activities of the roles and show the substance expressed by this film. Similarly, when people get so many visual images, not all of them are equally useful; therefore, people have to pick up some to find the relationship among them and get the essence. Otherwise, people may be led to a wrong view. For instance, there are always some violent scenes on TV, but we cannot regard violence as something moral to be propagandized, for some exhibitions, magazines, leaflets have told us that they are by-products during the development of the society.（前面一句话有语法错误，自己看看吧！） How we see this phenomenon is to compare the two resources of visual images together, finding that the scenes on TV are the plots of fictional stories so that it is not the mainstream in moral.
All in all, the appearance of visual images brings people to an ocean of information, and it should be an assistance to help people collect what they need rather than a blocker for people to get the true understanding. Thus, only （要不要加个when啊？）people marry visual images to logic together do they focus on an issue clearly and extensively.
总的来说还是挺不错的，至少写了那么多啊！思路很清楚的，就是有点语法错误，这可能是很难避免的！你的例子真不少哦！我的学习，学习！
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